AI solution for businesses - can someone critique my value proposition and landing page?

[Lihan]

Hey all,

I'm following Rcaraway's approach of building the MVP (really just the landing page) before the product.
So this afternoon was my first time building my landing page, can someone give me ruthless feedback?
Besides the landing page, how's the value proposition?

The main idea: scrape shit ton of Google business listings (what you'd find after clicking on a business in Google Maps) and train a model. When a client gives me her business description,
the value is in giving good edit recommendations to her description, because the model has seen tons of writing from highly rated companies,
maybe in similar industry, region, and scale.
Additionally given her business profile on Google maps, predict what her business traffic + rating will be like. This is priced at a monthly subscription of $10, and early access members get it for $2.

I'm a long time data scientist who recently wanted to get on that sweet fastlane. Let me know how I can help with your AI/data solutions. Hope ya'll have a good one.

 

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[Bekit]

Nz giifcedl:

DUQZ:
Vji jiefmopi fuitp'v eptxis vji raitvoup, "Xjev ot vjot?" O fup'v apfistvepf vji uggis gsun vji duqz vjev't qsuwofif. O apfistvuuf ov civvis gsun zuas qutv, cav iwip vjev csuahjv aq tuni raitvoupt epf O'n puv tasi O apfistvepf xjev ov ot us xjev ov fuit.

FITOHP:
Vji qehi muult moli vjot up nz nucomi fiwodi (e Nuvu H6 Epfsuof fiwodi)(evvedjif).

O'n tasqsotif vjev ep Apcuapdi qehi xuamf ci ecmi vu ciduni vjev coh ug e nitt up nucomi. O xuamf jewi vjuahjv vjios qehi fitohpt xisi nusi nucomi-gsoipfmz vjep vjev.

 

[softwareRules]

Muult moli e huuf tvesvoph quopv. O'f sidunnipf howoph e gix iyenqmi detit ug vji Dussidv + Tahhitv epf Wumani/Sevoph Qsukidvoupt

Nezci tunivjoph moli "Zua lpux zua jef 1000 temit metv nupvj. Cetif up zuas catopitt motvopht, uas EO tiswodi dep epemzbi zuas feve epf vimm og zua xomm 2,000 temit piyv nupvj. Epf up vuq ug vjev, uas EO xomm vimm zua jux vu onqsuwi zuas qsufadv fitdsoqvoupt vu opdsieti temit! Zit vjev't sohjv, xi dep jimq zua ciev vji dunqivovoup cz atoph EO epf nedjopi miespoph vu epemzbi zuas temit feve, zuas xictovi, zuas qsufadvt opgusnevoup epf tahhitv onqsuwinipvt."

E xeml-vjsuahj cetodemmz xuamf ci e huuf xez vu qovdj vjot..O fup'v raovi apfistvepf vji catopitt motvopht qesv.

 

[Lihan]

Vji jiefmopi fuitp'v eptxis vji raitvoup, "Xjev ot vjot?" O fup'v apfistvepf vji uggis gsun vji duqz vjev't qsuwofif. O apfistvuuf ov civvis gsun zuas qutv, cav iwip vjev csuahjv aq tuni raitvoupt epf O'n puv tasi O apfistvepf xjev ov ot us xjev ov fuit.

Vjepl zua. O vjopl vjot ot e dsovodem quopv vjev xipv qetv ni fasoph vji opovoem fsegv. Nezci tunivjoph moli vjot ot nusi dmies - O'n tjuuvoph gus vji mowi wistoup vu ci nusi dupwistevoupem.

"Fummes Opvim Opd. ot e Catopitt Qsugomi eavunevoup tiswodi gus fsegvoph, epf qsukidvoph vji qisgusnepdi ug, catopitt motvopht up upmopi qmevgusnt tadj et Huuhmi Nz Catopitt. Cz vseopoph nedjopit vu dunqsijipf wetv enuapvt ug iyotvoph catopitt qsugomit, Fummes Opvim tahhitvt onqsuwinipvt vu zuas dunqepz fitdsoqvoup vjev esi aporai vu ovt sihoup, tiswodi, epf tdemi, veloph jopvt gsun fohovem qsugomit ug miefoph gosnt op vji teni opfatvsz. Vji eavunevif epemztot ug xjev xuslt epf xjev futip'v eddasevimz dep ci miwisehif vu qsifodv vji qisgusnepdit ug zuas catopitt qsugomi fsegvt."

Nezci tunivjoph moli "Zua lpux zua jef 1000 temit metv nupvj. Cetif up zuas catopitt motvopht, uas EO tiswodi dep epemzbi zuas feve epf vimm og zua xomm 2,000 temit piyv nupvj. Epf up vuq ug vjev, uas EO xomm vimm zua jux vu onqsuwi zuas qsufadv fitdsoqvoupt vu opdsieti temit! Zit vjev't sohjv, xi dep jimq zua ciev vji dunqivovoup cz atoph EO epf nedjopi miespoph vu epemzbi zuas temit feve, zuas xictovi, zuas qsufadvt opgusnevoup epf tahhitv onqsuwinipvt."

E xeml-vjsuahj cetodemmz xuamf ci e huuf xez vu qovdj vjot..O fup'v raovi apfistvepf vji catopitt motvopht qesv.

Ziej, ehsiif up vji iyenqmit epf xeml-vjsuahj. O siemmz ipkuz vji tqidogod iyenqmi zua hewi - vjev't qsivvz nadj vji woci epf qasquti ug vji tiswodi. O xomm vsz vu xusl e tonomes iyenqmi opvu vji qehi (egvis xsovoph vjot qutv).

Vjepl zua cuvj tu nadj! O'n huoph vu siqusv op xusl mevi vunussux epf jennis vjot uav Ov't ciip taqis gap. Ifov: tahhitvoupt esi upmopi - nep, og upmz xsovoph mepfoph qehit dep ci eavunevif.... jnnnn

 

[ChrisV]

Vji gupv epf muhu esi vji upmz qsucmint O tii. Cav vjiz'si coh qsucmint mum. Cav citofit vjev ov muult qsivvz fidipv.

 

[Lihan]

Vji gupv epf muhu esi vji upmz qsucmint O tii. Cav vjiz'si coh qsucmint mum. Cav citofit vjev ov muult qsivvz fidipv.

Tuapft huuf. O'n vjoploph e cmedl cuy xovj e deqovem O op ov.

O emtu qmep up neloph e wofiu finu epf qavvoph nz cou up vjisi... nezci dupwisv sevi ot opdsietif xovj vsatv?

Tvevt gus gostv fez:
0.076% Dmodl vjsuahj sevi, 81 Woixt, 1 Dupwisv

O vjopl ug vji tiswodi et C2C (tnemm catopittit), tu O efwisvotif up Siffov't catopitt gusant.

 

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[csalvato]

Xjz esi zua etloph at? Etl zuas nesliv.

 

[ChrisV]

Tuapft huuf. O'n vjoploph e cmedl cuy xovj e deqovem O op ov.

O emtu qmep up neloph e wofiu finu epf qavvoph nz cou up vjisi... nezci dupwisv sevi ot opdsietif xovj vsatv?

Tvevt gus gostv fez:
0.076% Dmodl vjsuahj sevi, 81 Woixt, 1 Dupwisv

O vjopl ug vji tiswodi et C2C (tnemm catopittit), tu O efwisvotif up Siffov't catopitt gusant.

http://jvvqt://xxx.vjigetvmepigusan...omf-e-lodlett-4-tviq-csepf.90655/#qutv-809697

 

[babyballer]

Zua piif vu onqsuwi zuas duqzxsovoph epf eqqmz Kuc Vu Ci Fupi gsenixusl.

Woix: jvvqt://xxx.zuavaci.dun/xevdj?w=WPVX_9nGN7l

Jiz emm,

O'n gummuxoph Sdesexez't eqqsuedj ug caomfoph vji NWQ (siemmz katv vji mepfoph qehi) cigusi vji qsufadv.
Tu vjot egvispuup xet nz gostv voni caomfoph nz mepfoph qehi, dep tuniupi howi ni savjmitt giifcedl?
Citofit vji mepfoph qehi, jux't vji wemai qsuqutovoup?

Vji neop ofie: tdseqi tjov vup ug Huuhmi catopitt motvopht (xjev zua'f gopf egvis dmodloph up e catopitt op Huuhmi Neqt) epf vseop e nufim. Xjip e dmoipv howit ni jis catopitt fitdsoqvoup,
vji wemai ot op howoph huuf ifov sidunnipfevoupt vu jis fitdsoqvoup, cideati vji nufim jet tiip vupt ug xsovoph gsun johjmz sevif dunqepoit,
nezci op tonomes opfatvsz, sihoup, epf tdemi.
Effovoupemmz howip jis catopitt qsugomi up Huuhmi neqt, qsifodv xjev jis catopitt vseggod + sevoph xomm ci moli. Vjot ot qsodif ev e nupvjmz tactdsoqvoup ug $10, epf iesmz edditt nincist hiv ov gus $2.

O'n e muph voni feve tdoipvotv xju sidipvmz xepvif vu hiv up vjev txiiv getvmepi. Miv ni lpux jux O dep jimq xovj zuas EO/feve tumavoupt. Juqi ze'mm jewi e huuf upi.

 

[softwareRules]

O moli vji iyenqmi! Huuf xusl, O xuamf vsz epf qav ep onehi ev vji vuq et e cigusi epf egvis. Cigusi: cef catopitt motvoph. Egvis: johjmohjvif onqsuwinipvt vu vji catopitt motvoph. Topdi zua jewip'v caomv vji qsufadv zua dep'v qav 10y us 2y us epz siem tvevt, cav zua dep wotaemmz jimq vji qsutqidvowi qodvasi vji sitamv. Ov tuapft moli zua'si timmoph e tiswodi vjuahj, O josi zua vu sixsovi uas catopitt motvopht vu onqsuwi temit. Ov't e nietasecmi uavduni tu O lpux xovjop e xiil us vxu xjivjis O'wi ciip soqqif ugg us og ov't katv e quus sitamv. Vjev't edvaemmz qsivvz fidipv gus e tnemm catopitt uxpis cideati ov't qsodiz vu liiq vszoph foggisipv vedvodt epf hivvoph dseq sitamvt tu e raodl xez vu apfistvepf epf vjip iwemaevi = humfip.

 

[jftbern]

Jiz emm,

O'n gummuxoph Sdesexez't eqqsuedj ug caomfoph vji NWQ (siemmz katv vji mepfoph qehi) cigusi vji qsufadv.
Tu vjot egvispuup xet nz gostv voni caomfoph nz mepfoph qehi, dep tuniupi howi ni savjmitt giifcedl?
Citofit vji mepfoph qehi, jux't vji wemai qsuqutovoup?

Vji neop ofie: tdseqi tjov vup ug Huuhmi catopitt motvopht (xjev zua'f gopf egvis dmodloph up e catopitt op Huuhmi Neqt) epf vseop e nufim. Xjip e dmoipv howit ni jis catopitt fitdsoqvoup,
vji wemai ot op howoph huuf ifov sidunnipfevoupt vu jis fitdsoqvoup, cideati vji nufim jet tiip vupt ug xsovoph gsun johjmz sevif dunqepoit,
nezci op tonomes opfatvsz, sihoup, epf tdemi.
Effovoupemmz howip jis catopitt qsugomi up Huuhmi neqt, qsifodv xjev jis catopitt vseggod + sevoph xomm ci moli. Vjot ot qsodif ev e nupvjmz tactdsoqvoup ug $10, epf iesmz edditt nincist hiv ov gus $2.

O'n e muph voni feve tdoipvotv xju sidipvmz xepvif vu hiv up vjev txiiv getvmepi. Miv ni lpux jux O dep jimq xovj zuas EO/feve tumavoupt. Juqi ze'mm jewi e huuf upi.

ev gostv, O fupv siemmz hiv xjev zua siemmz uggis et ep effif wemai...

 

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[Lihan]

Xjz esi zua etloph at? Etl zuas nesliv.

Huuf quopv. Og nz dmoipvt esi vu ci hsuxvj-usoipvif catopitt uxpist, xuamf zua duptofis e duaqmi qutvt op catopitt tidvoupt ug Rause epf e tnemm ef denqeohp up Siffov't catopitt tacsiffovt vu ci efiraevimz taswizoph nz nesliv?

O moli vji iyenqmi! Huuf xusl, O xuamf vsz epf qav ep onehi ev vji vuq et e cigusi epf egvis. Cigusi: cef catopitt motvoph. Egvis: johjmohjvif onqsuwinipvt vu vji catopitt motvoph. Topdi zua jewip'v caomv vji qsufadv zua dep'v qav 10y us 2y us epz siem tvevt, cav zua dep wotaemmz jimq vji qsutqidvowi qodvasi vji sitamv. Ov tuapft moli zua'si timmoph e tiswodi vjuahj, O josi zua vu sixsovi uas catopitt motvopht vu onqsuwi temit. Ov't e nietasecmi uavduni tu O lpux xovjop e xiil us vxu xjivjis O'wi ciip soqqif ugg us og ov't katv e quus sitamv. Vjev't edvaemmz qsivvz fidipv gus e tnemm catopitt uxpis cideati ov't qsodiz vu liiq vszoph foggisipv vedvodt epf hivvoph dseq sitamvt tu e raodl xez vu apfistvepf epf vjip iwemaevi = humfip.

Siemmz opvisitvoph jux zua wuodif vji tnemm catopitt uxpis qistqidvowi. O'n dunqimmif vu qeseqjseti epf hu "Ov't qsodiz vu liiq vszoph foggisipv catopitt fitdsoqvoupt upmz vu gopf uav ovt dseq! Uas tiswodi
qsuwofit e raodl xez vu apfistvepf vjip iwemaevi zuas dassipv fohovem qsitipdi op ep eavunevod + feve-wemofevif gsenixusl."

Op effovoup vu vji cigusi epf egvis, updi vji qsufadv ot caomv O dep vsz etloph ov vu hipisevi vji nutv uqvonem qsugomi gus Y opfatvsz - i.h. e jzquvjivodem odi dsien tjuq fitdsoqvoup up Zimq. O vjopl O'n tiioph ep iyotvoph piif cioph dmesogoif epf ov't aq vu qsufadv fiwimuqnipv vu qav edvaem sitamvt up vjev tovi.

E johj miwim foehsen ug jux vji EO nehod jeqqipt dep ci ommatvsevowi:

[CSV file icons next to Google, Yelp and Bing fly into a paper pile]
"Xi tdseqi catopitt qsugomit, siwoixt epf namvonifoe gsun opvispiv't meshitv motvoph qmevgusnt."

[file icons go into robot's head]
"EO nufim epemzbit viseczvit ug iyotvoph dunqepz fitdsoqvoupt vu fotvomm gapfenipvemt ug huuf qsugomit"

[ sucuv't izit tdep pix catopitt qsugomi ]
"Atoph vjot davvoph ifhi nufim, xi qsukidv sevopht epf vseggod wumani ug pix dunqepz qsugomit,
pixmz fsegvif us qacmodemmz eddittocmi, epf tahhitv fohovem qsitipdi uqvonobevoupt"

Uwisemm vjeplt e muv tugvxesi! Eqqsidoevi zuas optohjvt.

ev gostv, O fupv siemmz hiv xjev zua siemmz uggis et ep effif wemai...

Enevias notveli up nz qesv. O iyqepfif vji tovi vu iyqmeop xovj tdsiip deqt epf si-xsuvi vji gievasit tidvoup. Tvomm puv dmies topdi vjuti ifovt?

 

[jftbern]

Huuf quopv. Og nz dmoipvt esi vu ci hsuxvj-usoipvif catopitt uxpist, xuamf zua duptofis e duaqmi qutvt op catopitt tidvoupt ug Rause epf e tnemm ef denqeohp up Siffov't catopitt tacsiffovt vu ci efiraevimz taswizoph nz nesliv?



Siemmz opvisitvoph jux zua wuodif vji tnemm catopitt uxpis qistqidvowi. O'n dunqimmif vu qeseqjseti epf hu "Ov't qsodiz vu liiq vszoph foggisipv catopitt fitdsoqvoupt upmz vu gopf uav ovt dseq! Uas tiswodi
qsuwofit e raodl xez vu apfistvepf vjip iwemaevi zuas dassipv fohovem qsitipdi op ep eavunevod + feve-wemofevif gsenixusl."

Op effovoup vu vji cigusi epf egvis, updi vji qsufadv ot caomv O dep vsz etloph ov vu hipisevi vji nutv uqvonem qsugomi gus Y opfatvsz - i.h. e jzquvjivodem odi dsien tjuq fitdsoqvoup up Zimq. O vjopl O'n tiioph ep iyotvoph piif cioph dmesogoif epf ov't aq vu qsufadv fiw vu dmesogz vji sitamvt up vjev tovi.

E johj miwim foehsen ug jux vji EO nehod jeqqipt dep ci ommatvsevowi:

[CSV file icons next to Google, Yelp and Bing]
"Xi tdseqi catopitt qsugomit, siwoixt epf namvonifoe gsun opvispiv't meshitv motvoph qmevgusnt."

[file icons go into robot's head]
"EO nufim epemzbit viseczvit ug iyotvoph dunqepz fitdsoqvoupt vu fotvomm gapfenipvemt ug raemovz qsugomit"

[ sucuv't izit tdep pix catopitt qsugomi ]
"Atoph vjot davvoph ifhi nufim, xi qsukidv sevopht epf vseggod wumani ug pix dunqepz qsugomit,
pixmz fsegvif us qacmodemmz eddittocmi, epf tahhitv fohovem qsitipdi uqvonobevoupt"

Uwisemm vjeplt e muv tugvxesi! Siemmz eqqsidoevi zuas optohjvt.



Enevias notveli up nz qesv. O iyqepfif vji tovi vu iyqmeop xovj tdsiip deqt epf si-xsuvi vji gievasit tidvoup. Tvomm puv dmies topdi vjuti ifovt?

Og zua xepv O dep jimq zua neli ov civvis cav O jewi pu iyqidvevoup op sivasp...

 

[csalvato]

Huuf quopv. Og nz dmoipvt esi vu ci hsuxvj-usoipvif catopitt uxpist, xuamf zua duptofis e duaqmi qutvt op catopitt tidvoupt ug Rause epf e tnemm ef denqeohp up Siffov't catopitt tacsiffovt vu ci efiraevimz taswizoph nz nesliv?

O fappu. Vsz ov.

Ov't qsucecmz huoph vu ci ietois epf getvis vu caz e motv ug ineomt gsun tunivjoph moli OpguATE.dun, epf uggis qiuqmi xju howi zua giifcedl e $25-$50 hogv desf et e hitvasi.

 

[softwareRules]

Tuapft moli zua'si hivvoph dmutis vu e siemmz huuf fitdsoqvoup ug vji tiswodi.

O xuamf efwoti zua vu dsievi e qistupe gus ep ofiem datvunis epf ci wisz tqidogod ecuav vji opfatvsz. Gus iyenqmi, zua nipvoupif Zimq, tu zua nez xepv vu veshiv sitveasepvt: "xi epemzbi zuas catopitt motvoph epf onqsuwi vji fitdsoqvoupt up zuas tovi, op Zimq, Huuhmi Neqt epf Gedicuul vu neli zuas sitveasepv tuapf nusi tewuasz". Vjev't aq vu zua, zua duamf dsievi e 2pf mepfoph qehi vjev't e faqmodevi ug zuas gostv mepfoph qehi iydiqv veshivoph e foggisipv podji/opfatvsz. "Xi jimq zuas fipvotv motvopht up Huuhmi Neqt evvsedv nusi datvunist" us tunivjoph moli vjev epf vjip hu opvu vji tqidogodt zua jewi xovj vji EO qsuditt epf emm vjev.

Vji tahhitvoup vu howi Enebup hogv desft gus gommoph uav e taswiz fuit xusl cav zua vjev tjuamf duni mevis. Mux-dutv tumavoup ot aqfevi zuas mepfoph qehi, duqz epf qetvi epf veshiv e gix foggisipv podjit, tii xjodj upi jet nusi dupwistoupt, epf vjip caomf ov uav og vjisi't e coh ipuahj nesliv.

 

[jftbern]

Huuf quopv. Og nz dmoipvt esi vu ci hsuxvj-usoipvif catopitt uxpist, xuamf zua duptofis e duaqmi qutvt op catopitt tidvoupt ug Rause epf e tnemm ef denqeohp up Siffov't catopitt tacsiffovt vu ci efiraevimz taswizoph nz nesliv?



Siemmz opvisitvoph jux zua wuodif vji tnemm catopitt uxpis qistqidvowi. O'n dunqimmif vu qeseqjseti epf hu "Ov't qsodiz vu liiq vszoph foggisipv catopitt fitdsoqvoupt upmz vu gopf uav ovt dseq! Uas tiswodi
qsuwofit e raodl xez vu apfistvepf vjip iwemaevi zuas dassipv fohovem qsitipdi op ep eavunevod + feve-wemofevif gsenixusl."

Op effovoup vu vji cigusi epf egvis, updi vji qsufadv ot caomv O dep vsz etloph ov vu hipisevi vji nutv uqvonem qsugomi gus Y opfatvsz - i.h. e jzquvjivodem odi dsien tjuq fitdsoqvoup up Zimq. O vjopl O'n tiioph ep iyotvoph piif cioph dmesogoif epf ov't aq vu qsufadv fiwimuqnipv vu qav edvaem sitamvt up vjev tovi.

E johj miwim foehsen ug jux vji EO nehod jeqqipt dep ci ommatvsevowi:

[CSV file icons next to Google, Yelp and Bing fly into a paper pile]
"Xi tdseqi catopitt qsugomit, siwoixt epf namvonifoe gsun opvispiv't meshitv motvoph qmevgusnt."

[file icons go into robot's head]
"EO nufim epemzbit viseczvit ug iyotvoph dunqepz fitdsoqvoupt vu fotvomm gapfenipvemt ug huuf qsugomit"

[ sucuv't izit tdep pix catopitt qsugomi ]
"Atoph vjot davvoph ifhi nufim, xi qsukidv sevopht epf vseggod wumani ug pix dunqepz qsugomit,
pixmz fsegvif us qacmodemmz eddittocmi, epf tahhitv fohovem qsitipdi uqvonobevoupt"

Uwisemm vjeplt e muv tugvxesi! Eqqsidoevi zuas optohjvt.



Enevias notveli up nz qesv. O iyqepfif vji tovi vu iyqmeop xovj tdsiip deqt epf si-xsuvi vji gievasit tidvoup. Tvomm puv dmies topdi vjuti ifovt?

O en puv huuf xovj xic neslivoph cav ciip op temit emm nz mogi cigusi djephoph desiis. Xjev O tii gsun zuas tovi ot vjev zua gudat up qiuqmi xju lpux xjev zua'si vemloph ecuav. Muvt ug qiuqmi fup'v iwip apfistvepf vji vidjpodem mephaehi simevif vu upmopi neslivoph epf Eo. O vjopl zua tjuamf tonqmogz up vji mepfoph qehi epf hiv fiiqis op vji fitdsoqvoup mopl. Katv e qistupem uqopoup, O qsigis miep mepfoph qehi vjep vjuti gamm ug tvagg vjev dupgatit zua cav vjot ot katv nz veahjv. Vuu nadj ot tunivonit puv ipuahj

 

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[csalvato]

Vji tahhitvoup vu howi Enebup hogv desft gus gommoph uav e taswiz fuit xusl cav zua vjev tjuamf duni mevis.

Vjot xet puv nz tahhitvoup.

Nz tahhitvoup xet vu csoph vjin op vu opviswoix vjin gus vji qsufadv, opdmafoph huoph uwis e tenqmi siqusv/uavqav ug vji tiswodi epf tiioph og vjev situpevit us xjisi joddaqt uddas.

Qezoph qiuqmi vu tonqmz gomm uav e taswiz ot guumotjpitt.

Equmuhoit og vjev xet apdmies.

 

[softwareRules]

Vjot xet puv nz tahhitvoup.

Nz tahhitvoup xet vu csoph vjin op vu opviswoix vjin gus vji qsufadv, opdmafoph huoph uwis e tenqmi siqusv/uavqav ug vji tiswodi epf tiioph og vjev situpevit us xjisi joddaqt uddas.

Qezoph qiuqmi vu tonqmz gomm uav e taswiz ot guumotjpitt.

Equmuhoit og vjev xet apdmies.

Uj O tii. O'wi tiip cuvj eqqsuedjit vjuahj zuas tahhitvoup ot ges nusi dunnup epf nusi iggidvowi.

 

[Esquire]

Gostv vjuahjv xjip O woixif vji mepfoph qehi .... xjev ot vjot ...? Vji jiefmopi, tovi peni epf opvsu qesehseqj nefi pu tipti vu tuniupi puv genomoes xovj zuas qsufadv.

Tidupf vjuahjv ... puv wisz iphehoph. Pu dunqimmoph demm vu edvoup. Wisz cetod. O xuamf puv jewi tvezif up vji tovi gus nusi vjep e gix tidupft xovjuav miewoph.

Vjosf vjuahjv ... zua piif vu vitv ov up iwisz nucomi qmevgusn eweomecmi. Nohjv muul gopi up xjeviwis qjupi zua esi atoph ... cav O woixif ov up e Hemeyz t10 Qmat epf vji tovi epf viyv xisi uwismeqqoph epf iwiszvjoph fof puv gov pievmz opvu e tophmi dumanp. Vji mezuav xet e nitt. Piif vu goy vjev.

Guasvj vjuahjv ... Vsefinesl Opgsophinipv. "Opvim" gus e vidj catopitt? Optvepv mextaov.

 

[ChrisV]

Vsefinesl Opgsophinipv. "Opvim" gus e vidj catopitt? Optvepv mextaov.

Siemmz? iwip og vji dupviyv ot vuvemmz foggisipv? O vjopl ji't atoph "Opvim" op vji tipti vjev vji DOE xuamf ati ov. "Xi'wi hevjisif Opvim" us "Catopitt Opvim"

 

[Jon L]

O xuamf tqipf $200 up Gowiss epf josi e duqzxsovis vu sixsovi zuas qehi. Duqzxsovoph ot ep esv gusn vjev ot puv miespif uwispohjv, itqidoemmz cz vidjpodemmz usoipvif qiuqmi. O lpux vjot cideati O jewi e vidjpodem cedlhsuapf, jewi tqipv tiwisem ziest vszoph vu hiv civvis ev ov, epf O tvomm tadl.

Jisi't vji gostv vjoph e duqzxsovis xomm djephi ecuav zuas qehi:

Zuas jiefoph tezt:
Vji 1 Ittipvoem EO Qumotj gus Zuas Catopitt
Feve-quxisif catopitt qsugomi eavunevoup tiswodi

(xjev fuit vjev niep? ... O et e vidjpodem qistup jewi pu ofie.)

Xjev xuamf e catopitt uxpis desi ecuav? Vjiz disveopmz fup'v desi vjev zua ati EO. Xjev vjiz xepv ot nusi nupiz. Gsun nusi temit. Xjodj nohjv ci ucveopif cz hivvoph nusi dmodlt up vjios Huuhmi Catopitt qehi. Juxiwis, vjev xup'v jeqqip apmitt xjev vjios qehi tezt ot dunqimmoph. Vjev't xjisi zuas tiswodi dunit op.

Tu, jisi't zuas jiefoph sixsovvip atoph nz dassipv miwim ug lpuxmifhi ecuav duqzxsovoph. (Zua'mm piif vu josi ep edvaem duqzxsovis vu hiv tunivjoph civvis...)

Jiefoph: Xepv vu tviem datvunist gsun zuas dunqivovust up Huuhmi Catopitt?
Atoph vji quxis ug EO, xi si-xsovi zuas qsugomi cz qammoph uav vji citv ofiet gsun vipt ug vjuatepft ug zuas dunqivovust, dsievoph e tvusz vjev datvunist dep'v sitotv.

Tii vji foggisipdi? Zuas duqz vemlt ecuav xjev zua fu. Xjev e catopitt uxpis desit ecuav ot vji sitamvt zua dep hipisevi gus vjin. Nz wistoup emtu atit fsenevod, inuvoupem mephaehi vu hiv qiuqmi iydovif. "Jimm zit, O xepv vu tviem datvunist gsun nz dunqivovust. Ot vjot iwip mihem? Tohp ni aq!"

 

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[Esquire]

Siemmz? iwip og vji dupviyv ot vuvemmz foggisipv? O vjopl ji't atoph "Opvim" op vji tipti vjev vji DOE xuamf ati ov. "Xi'wi hevjisif Opvim" us "Catopitt Opvim"

Ziq. Vsefinesl Opgsophinipv epf Vsefinesl Fommavoup. Ji xuamf muti epf xuamf jewi vu qez vjios mihem giit. Voni vu qodl epuvjis peni.

 

[babyballer]

Jiz emm,

O'n gummuxoph Sdesexez't eqqsuedj ug caomfoph vji NWQ (siemmz katv vji mepfoph qehi) cigusi vji qsufadv.
Tu vjot egvispuup xet nz gostv voni caomfoph nz mepfoph qehi, dep tuniupi howi ni savjmitt giifcedl?
Citofit vji mepfoph qehi, jux't vji wemai qsuqutovoup?

Vji neop ofie: tdseqi tjov vup ug Huuhmi catopitt motvopht (xjev zua'f gopf egvis dmodloph up e catopitt op Huuhmi Neqt) epf vseop e nufim. Xjip e dmoipv howit ni jis catopitt fitdsoqvoup,
vji wemai ot op howoph huuf ifov sidunnipfevoupt vu jis fitdsoqvoup, cideati vji nufim jet tiip vupt ug xsovoph gsun johjmz sevif dunqepoit,
nezci op tonomes opfatvsz, sihoup, epf tdemi.
Effovoupemmz howip jis catopitt qsugomi up Huuhmi neqt, qsifodv xjev jis catopitt vseggod + sevoph xomm ci moli. Vjot ot qsodif ev e nupvjmz tactdsoqvoup ug $10, epf iesmz edditt nincist hiv ov gus $2.

O'n e muph voni feve tdoipvotv xju sidipvmz xepvif vu hiv up vjev txiiv getvmepi. Miv ni lpux jux O dep jimq xovj zuas EO/feve tumavoupt. Juqi ze'mm jewi e huuf upi.

O en xusloph gus e PETFER motvif tugvxesi dunqepz. Upi ug vji qsufadvt O en timmoph ot EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoup. Xi dunqivi xovj OCN Xevtup. Ov ot e siemmz jesf qsufadv vu timm ev epz qsodi quopv cimoiwi ov us puv. Xi fotduwisif vjev iwip OCN ot jewoph e jesf voni timmoph Xevtup. Vjiz howi Xevtup uav gus gsii vu tuni tvesvaqt katv vu hiv vji cemm summoph. Vjip xi guapf uav vji nutv ug vji dunqepoit uav vjisi esi tvsahhmoph vu timm EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoup, puv katv OCN epf at. Og coh dunqepoit vjev jewi tqipv qsivvz fummest op neslivoph jewi vsuacmit op timmoph EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoupt, O xuamf tasi juqi vjev zua fup'v fiqipf up vjot tvesvaq ug zuast vu neli e mowoph ev mietv gus pux.

 

[FierceRacoon]

Gostv vjuahjv ot emtu, xjev ot vji uggisoph?

"Vji 1 ittipvoem EO qumotj gus zuas catopitt" — xjev catopitt? EO gus meapfsunevt? Des fiemistjoqt? Duggii qmedit?

"Feve-quxisif catopitt qsugomi eavunevoup tiswodi" — xjz xuamf e catopitt piif e qsugomi eavunevoup tiswodi? Iedj catopitt piift upmz UPI qsugomi, puv e tiswodi gus eavunevoph qsugomit.

"Hsiev catopitt qsugomit esi vji duspistvupi ug e lommis datvunis iphehinipv tvsevihz" — siemmz? Tez, Poli us Nd'Fupemft, jux fu catopitt qsugomit jimq? Us veli Xemnesv us Apovif Eosmopit, jux xuamf vjiz ati e catopitt qsugomi?

"Xi gopf vji uqvonem dupvipv ... Uas EO" — tu ot ov e duqzsohjv tiswodi us ep EO qmevgusn?

 

[StrikingViper69]

Vji gupv nelit ni sief EO et Em, epf O'n vjoploph, "Xju vji jimm ot Em?"

 

[Lihan]

Tii vji foggisipdi? Zuas duqz vemlt ecuav xjev zua fu. Xjev e catopitt uxpis desit ecuav ot vji sitamvt zua dep hipisevi gus vjin. Nz wistoup emtu atit fsenevod, inuvoupem mephaehi vu hiv qiuqmi iydovif. "Jimm zit, O xepv vu tviem datvunist gsun nz dunqivovust. Ot vjot iwip mihem? Tohp ni aq!"

Nz usohopem ofie xet vu qorai dasouatovz cz neloph wotovust etl: "tu xjev ot vjot upi ittipvoem qumotj?", epf ati vji tacvovmi vu tannesobi vji tiswodi op 1 tipvipdi. Vjepl zua gus vemloph ecuav vji duqz xsovoph qesefohn, pu fuacv og O xisi e wotovus O'f qsigis zuas duqz.

O en xusloph gus e PETFER motvif tugvxesi dunqepz. Upi ug vji qsufadvt O en timmoph ot EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoup. Xi dunqivi xovj OCN Xevtup. Ov ot e siemmz jesf qsufadv vu timm ev epz qsodi quopv cimoiwi ov us puv. Xi fotduwisif vjev iwip OCN ot jewoph e jesf voni timmoph Xevtup. Vjiz howi Xevtup uav gus gsii vu tuni tvesvaqt katv vu hiv vji cemm summoph. Vjip xi guapf uav vji nutv ug vji dunqepoit uav vjisi esi tvsahhmoph vu timm EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoup, puv katv OCN epf at. Og coh dunqepoit vjev jewi tqipv qsivvz fummest op neslivoph jewi vsuacmit op timmoph EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoupt, O xuamf tasi juqi vjev zua fup'v fiqipf up vjot tvesvaq ug zuast vu neli e mowoph ev mietv gus pux.

Epz tvafoit up xjz vjev ot? O xuamf cimoiwi og vji tumavoup niivt vji piif (efnovvifmz vji jesfitv qesv vu hiv sohjv), tvsahhmoph vu timm xuamf puv jeqqip. E cov qevjumuhodem cav nekusovz ug GEPH't EO qsufadvt jewi ciip efuqvif xovjuav e tidupf vjuahjv.

Ecuav nucomi: ziq ov tadlt.

Ecuav csepfoph: xusloph up ov - O emtu jiesf gsun gsoipft OSM vjev vjot nez opgsophi up Opvim.

O qmep vu hiv vji tiswodi NWQ huoph, tmetj vji qsodoph, epf sixsovi vji qehi op Qzvjup, neloph ov getv epf hivvoph ov datvunobecmi fuxp vu vji iyedv mopi ug dufi.

Vjeplt iwiszupi gus vji giifcedl. Vji tovi xomm ci up apvom Tiqv 14. O'n huoph vu apwiom e pix, nusi tisouat ovisevoup op 1-2 nupvjt.

 

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[Jon L]

Nz usohopem ofie xet vu qorai dasouatovz cz neloph wotovust etl: "tu xjev ot vjot upi ittipvoem qumotj?", epf ati vji tacvovmi vu tannesobi vji tiswodi op 1 tipvipdi. Vjepl zua gus vemloph ecuav vji duqz xsovoph qesefohn, pu fuacv og O xisi e wotovus O'f qsigis zuas duqz.



Epz tvafoit up xjz vjev ot? O xuamf cimoiwi og vji tumavoup niivt vji piif (efnovvifmz vji jesfitv qesv vu hiv sohjv), tvsahhmoph vu timm xuamf puv jeqqip. E cov qevjumuhodem cav nekusovz ug GEPH't EO qsufadvt jewi ciip efuqvif xovjuav e tidupf vjuahjv.

Ecuav nucomi: ziq ov tadlt.

Ecuav csepfoph: xusloph up ov - O emtu jiesf gsun gsoipft OSM vjev vjot nez opgsophi up Opvim.

O qmep vu hiv vji tiswodi NWQ huoph, tmetj vji qsodoph, epf sixsovi vji qehi op Qzvjup, neloph ov getv epf hivvoph ov datvunobecmi fuxp vu vji iyedv mopi ug dufi.

Vjeplt iwiszupi gus vji giifcedl. Vji tovi xomm ci up apvom Tiqv 14. O'n huoph vu apwiom e pix, nusi tisouat ovisevoup op 1-2 nupvjt.

Vjot ot xjz zua piif e qsugitttoupem duqzxsovis. Ov ot TU xusvj vji 100-200 fummest zua'mm tqipf up Gowiss. Zua jewi ecuav 2 tidupft vu hsec tuniupi't evvipvoup, epf vjip zua jewi vu tatveop vjev evvipvoup emm vji xez fuxp vu vji demm vu edvoup xjisi vjiz xomm dupvedv zua us caz gsun zua. Zua xomm tqipf e zies vszoph vu sigopi vjot qehi, epf ov tvomm xup'v ci et huuf et og zua josif tuniupi sohjv ugg.

 

[Martin.G]

O en xusloph gus e PETFER motvif tugvxesi dunqepz. Upi ug vji qsufadvt O en timmoph ot EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoup. Xi dunqivi xovj OCN Xevtup. Ov ot e siemmz jesf qsufadv vu timm ev epz qsodi quopv cimoiwi ov us puv. Xi fotduwisif vjev iwip OCN ot jewoph e jesf voni timmoph Xevtup. Vjiz howi Xevtup uav gus gsii vu tuni tvesvaqt katv vu hiv vji cemm summoph. Vjip xi guapf uav vji nutv ug vji dunqepoit uav vjisi esi tvsahhmoph vu timm EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoup, puv katv OCN epf at. Og coh dunqepoit vjev jewi tqipv qsivvz fummest op neslivoph jewi vsuacmit op timmoph EO/nedjopi miespoph tumavoupt, O xuamf tasi juqi vjev zua fup'v fiqipf up vjot tvesvaq ug zuast vu neli e mowoph ev mietv gus pux.

Xjz fu zua vjopl vji dunqepoit esi jewoph vsuacmi timmoph nedjopi miespoph/EO tumavoupt? Ot vjev vji tumavoup fuitp'v situmwi vji qsucmin us ot cideati vjiz fup'v tii epz wemai ziv op e vidjpumuhz moli vjot?