Guys, I feel like my emails to potential clients suck hard, need to improve critically, but guesswork is something I can't have.
Updated version in the second post.
"Good evening, N
Here's short analysis of your website:
Each month, if your website ranked #1 - you have 18231 visitors, which is 34% of total amount.
With average check of 1000 rubles, if just 1% of visitors will come to your place, you'll potentially make 182.000 more rubles/month.
Right now your website gets only ~1.5% (~804 visitors/month) and makes you nothing. At best.
Search engine statistics for your keywords: 53622 q/month.
1. Парикмахерская [10698 запросов] - 21 rank.
2. Маникюр [10510] - 15 rank.
3. Салон красоты [10509] - 17 rank.
4. Татуаж [5806] - 11 rank.
5. Косметология [5289] - 5 rank.
6. Наращивание ногтей [4672] - 24 rank.
7. Окрашивание волос [4027] - 10 rank.
8. Прическа, укладка волос [3111] - 17 rank.
It's just google, yandex ranks are at least twice worse.
Our offer:
We provide you with good looking and handy website, make it to the top of search engines, help raise prices for at least 30% without loosing existing clients, also bringing you new ones.
We can also connect e-commerce, so you could provide not just services, but also sell goods.
You can read more about our services here: (our website)
What do you think?
Yevgeny."
I noticed a lot of things I want to change, after I translated this into english, so now I'll re-write things. Any help is highly appreciated.
Updated version in the second post.
"Good evening, N
Here's short analysis of your website:
Each month, if your website ranked #1 - you have 18231 visitors, which is 34% of total amount.
With average check of 1000 rubles, if just 1% of visitors will come to your place, you'll potentially make 182.000 more rubles/month.
Right now your website gets only ~1.5% (~804 visitors/month) and makes you nothing. At best.
Search engine statistics for your keywords: 53622 q/month.
1. Парикмахерская [10698 запросов] - 21 rank.
2. Маникюр [10510] - 15 rank.
3. Салон красоты [10509] - 17 rank.
4. Татуаж [5806] - 11 rank.
5. Косметология [5289] - 5 rank.
6. Наращивание ногтей [4672] - 24 rank.
7. Окрашивание волос [4027] - 10 rank.
8. Прическа, укладка волос [3111] - 17 rank.
It's just google, yandex ranks are at least twice worse.
Our offer:
We provide you with good looking and handy website, make it to the top of search engines, help raise prices for at least 30% without loosing existing clients, also bringing you new ones.
We can also connect e-commerce, so you could provide not just services, but also sell goods.
You can read more about our services here: (our website)
What do you think?
Yevgeny."
I noticed a lot of things I want to change, after I translated this into english, so now I'll re-write things. Any help is highly appreciated.
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