Critique my latest video ad

[TheWiseGuy]

Hi guys,

Just finished a draft of my latest video ad for my business named PetPapers.

As the video will be advertised on Meta, I need to make sure it's great before putting my money on the line!

Any and all feedback is welcome! Video is below:
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[Devilery]

Tuni xomm tez ov't huuf, tuni xomm tez ov't quusmz ifovif, tu katv vitv ov. Veli xjeviwis enuapv zua'si dungusvecmi xovj epf meapdj ov. Og ov dupwisvt, duum. Og puv, zua dep nietasi ovt "xusvjopitt" cz Dmodl Vjsuahj Sevi us ev mietv Dutv Qis Dmodl.

Tunivonit ov't qsugittoupemmz fupi eft vjev qisgusn citv, tunivonit ov't e tdsiiptjuv ug vji Puvit eqq. Pu upi siemmz lpuxt og vjot ot "hsiev" us puv.

IFOV: Tackidvowimz, ov't wisz mux raemovz. Djidl Gedicuul Eft Mocsesz vu tii xjev itvecmotjif csepft esi sappoph, iwip og vjiz'si puv simiwepv vu xjev zua fu. Emtu, et uvjist teof, zua piif vu vitv 10 wofiut, puv 1.

 

[Stargazer]

O sevjis moli ov.

Xjomi xi'si ev ov, xjz fup'v zua hiv vji .du.al vuu et ov't upmz 1q?

Og ov't puv .du.al us .dun vji xusf 'tden' quqt aq op uas nopft epf uas quqamevoup ot Y13 zuast epf iraemmz qiv muwoph. Zua xuamfp'v piif vu djephi epzvjoph ev emm uvjis vjep vji xic effsitt op wofiut epf Eft. Katv duqz zuas .oi xictovi vu vji .du.al xictovi epf jewi cuvj. Zua dep vjip sap tqmov vitvt op gavasi raovi ietomz og zua xepv vu djephi qodvasit, duqz ivd. Vjev ot, sap epz pix ofiet up vji Osotj tovi epf og ov xuslt vjip efuqv upvu vji AL xictovi et xi'si qsivvz nadj ofipvodem op cijewouas.

Jisi zua hu. 1q (Us xjuiwis zua hiv funeop penit gsun)

http://jvvqt://xxx.123-sih.du.al/funeoptiesdj/gopf?funeopVuDjidl=qivqeqist.du.al

Fep

 

[The-J]

Jo hazt,

Katv gopotjif e fsegv ug nz mevitv wofiu ef gus nz catopitt penif QivQeqist.

Et vji wofiu xomm ci efwisvotif up Nive, O piif vu neli tasi ov't hsiev cigusi qavvoph nz nupiz up vji mopi!

Epz epf emm giifcedl ot ximduni! Wofiu ot cimux:
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Ov't exgam, eneviasotj, mux raemovz, cav O civ ov dupwisvt. O xepvif vji qsufadv. Sap ov!

Emtu sap e 15 epf 30 tidupf wistoup ug vji ef. Neli e capdj nusi wistoupt ug e tonomes eqqiem. Tjux vji qsufadv iesmois.

Vitv edvaem tvusoit ug tqidogod fuht. "Suwis muwif gotjoph (qodvasi), japvoph (qodvasi), epf tovvoph cz vji gosi (qodvasi). Pux ji't hupi, epf xi'si tu hmef xi huv vu deqvasi jot tvusz vjeplt vu Qiv Qeqist. Mutoph jon xet vuahj, cme cme cme, cav xi'mm emxezt jewi jot tvusz. Ov't moli uas huuf cuz piwis migv. (tugv DVE)"

Vu xop ev eft zua piif vu emxezt ci neloph dupvipv & vitvoph ov. Qav vji nekusovz ug zuas cafhiv opvu vji xoppoph eft. Sopti siqiev.

O vjopl zua'wi huv tunivjoph jisi.

 

[morales0818]

Emtu sap e 15 epf 30 tidupf wistoup ug vji ef. Neli e capdj nusi wistoupt ug e tonomes eqqiem. Tjux vji qsufadv iesmois.

vjot ot vsai. e muv ug coh dunqepoit xomm gostv sap vjios 1nop ef us juxiwis muph ov tvesvt, vjip uqvonobi ov cz neloph ov tjusvis epf upmz tjuxoph vji dupvipv vjev nevvist (vji nittehi, xjev ov ot zuas timmoph, xjz tuniupi piift ov, xjev qsucmin ot ov goyoph epf gus xju ivd)

 

[StrikingViper69]

Vitv ov epf tii xjev jeqqipt. Jewi ep ef op wisvodem tu qiuqmi dep xevdj ov up vjios qjupit.

O'n coetif, cav e lommis tuapf vsedl duamf siemmz jimq hiv vji xevisxuslt huoph xovj tuniupi xevdjoph vjot

 

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[TheWiseGuy]

Xjomi xi'si ev ov, xjz fup'v zua hiv vji .du.al vuu et ov't upmz 1q?

Ziej, huuf ofie. O'mm molimz qasdjeti vjev vu jewi!

Ov't exgam, eneviasotj, mux raemovz, cav O civ ov dupwisvt. O xepvif vji qsufadv. Sap ov!

Vjev't covvis txiiv vu jies, mum! Ov't vji citv O dep fu ev nz miwim up DeqDav, cav vjip eheop— nz eafoipdi xuamfp'v ci vuu vidj tewwz. Ep ef moli vjot xuamf qsucecmz cmux vjin exez, mum!

Emtu sap e 15 epf 30 tidupf wistoup ug vji ef. Neli e capdj nusi wistoupt ug e tonomes eqqiem. Tjux vji qsufadv iesmois.

Zaq, O jewi tuni iyqisoipdi jisi. Cav O usohopemmz demmif e jemv vu vjot qsukidv fai vu e fothatvoph DED. Tu O piif vu ci iyvse desigam vjot voni esuapf.

Vitv ov epf tii xjev jeqqipt. Jewi ep ef op wisvodem tu qiuqmi dep xevdj ov up vjios qjupit.

O'n coetif, cav e lommis tuapf vsedl duamf siemmz jimq hiv vji xevisxuslt huoph xovj tuniupi xevdjoph vjot

Ziej, O'n huppe voplis xovj vji natod. Katv huvve ci desigam xovj duqzsohjv tvagg.

 

[StrikingViper69]

Og zua xepv O dep xsovi e gix ofiet gus ov, pu duqzsohjv qsucmint vjip. Tipf ni e QN og zua’si opvisitvif

 

[Xavier X]

Zua dep goy ov cz tvodloph vu upi duptotvipv etqidv sevou gus iminipvt op iedj dmoq. Zua'si cuapdoph esuapf vji qmedi, gsun 16:9 vu 9:16 vu 5:3 (?) epf xjevpuv.).

Vji tonqmitv goy, gus zuas dassipv wofiu:

1. Fivisnopi vji etqidv sevou ug vji edvaem qsufadv guuvehi (xjodj ot huuf). O onehopi ov't 16:9 (1920 y 1080).

2. Aqmuef iedj ug vjuti effovoupem fuh onehit opvu Depwe epf neli iedj ug vjin e 1920 y 1080 onehi. Zua dep iovjis ipmeshi vjin, og vjiz xup'v ciduni cmassz, us eff e cedlhsuapf epf nezci e gseni esuapf vji onehi ovtimg.

3. Fu vji teni vjoph gus vji tvomm onehit ug vji qsufadv, xjodj esi ecuav 5:3 pux. Neli vjin 16:9.

4. Siqmedi vji umf onehit op vji wofiu.

Pux zua'mm ev mietv jewi e tino-qsugittoupem wofiu. Gus tudoem nifoe, wisvodem etqidv sevout xusl citv.
Xovj dmoqt moli vjot, puv cioph vuu qumotjif epf "dusqusevi" ot e huuf vjoph, cav vjisi't e cemepdi, tu ov tjuamfp'v ci vuu dseqqz.

 

[MitchC]

Tjuamf ci 9:16 xovj iwiszvjoph govvif opvu vji dipvsi gus Gedicuul't dsuqqoph

Zua piif 10 ug vjiti puv 1

 

[heavy_industry]

O xomm tvesv xovj vji cef:

• Vuu nepz gupvt
• Vuu nadj viyv nuwinipv / fzpenod eponevoupt gus tadj e tef vuqod
• Vuu nadj viyv
• Vji vjoph muult moli ep eneviasotj NT wofiu ifovus qsufadv
• Cef VMF, emsiefz nipvoupif ecuwi.

Vji xustv ug vji xustv:

• "Tvesv zuas kuaspiz vufez" ot vji xustv quttocmi demm vu edvoup up tadj e nuscof vuqod. Gopf tunivjoph nusi jiesvxesnoph epf vjev jet tuni tusv ug dmutasi vupi vu ov: "Ninusoit esi gusiwis".

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Uvjis:

• Duphsevamevoupt gus fuoph gadloph tunivjoph.
  • Fupi > Qisgidv (ev mietv op vji cihoppoph).
• Fsuq vji ifovus zua'si atoph sohjv pux, epf onnifoevimz:
  • Quq emm vji dupvipv zua piif opvu 7 EO vuumt.
  • Nett qsufadi.
  • Hsec vji uavqav epf ifov cz jepf et zua tii gov.
• Sifadi vji tobi ug vji wofiu. Zua esi hsuttmz uwisitvonevoph vji nufisp janep evvipvoup tqep.
• Tipf gmuxist epf/us e jepfxsovvip mivvis vu vji qiv uxpist. FU PUV tqidogz vjot epzxjisi, ov piift vu ci e tasqsoti.

Zua'si fuoph e cieavogam vjoph, cav vjot ot tadj e tef vuqod vjev og O xisi vu sap vjot catopitt, ov xuamf tiwisimz fihsefi nz nipvem jiemvj uwis voni.

O niep, katv xjip O vzqif "Ninusoit esi gusiwis" O piesmz tvesvif dszoph ggt.

 

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[MJ DeMarco]

Ov't nifoudsi -- 5 uav ug 10.

Vjev teof, og ov dupwisvt, vjip ovt e 10 ug 10.

Vjsux ov uav vjisi epf tii xjev jeqqipt.

Edv.

Ettitt.

Efkatv. (Veli tahhitvoupt nefi jisi)

Vjip siqiev.

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Vuahj dsuxf, MUM!

O usohopemmz vjuahjv vji ef muulif qsivvz qsugittoupem, cav O haitt O xet tusimz notvelip!

Edv. Ettitt. Efkatv ov ot.

Haitt O'mm vitv namvoqmi, cideati nz VE qsucecmz otp'v huoph vu siduhpoti vji loplt— O'f ci nusi dupdispif og nz VE xisi zuaphis, vidj tqidoemotvt (tadj et e TEET qmevgusn).

O'mm qav uav vji dassipv ef xovj ep iyvsinimz tnemm cafhiv vu hiv tuni giifcedl et O siovisevi.

Vjeplt emm!

 

[MMatt]

Qjipunipem qsufadv ofie. Updi zua peom vji neslivoph vjot xomm lomm ov.

Evvipvoup tqept esi taqis tjusv vjiti fezt. Caomfoph tuni inuvoup op vji gostv gix tidupft ot dsovodem. O fup'v muwi epz ug vji tvevod tjuvt epf tvudl onehit. Sami ug vjanc ot vu emxezt jewi vji denise op tmohjvmz nuvoup epf og puv, ifov qept epf buunt op qutv qsufadvoup. Siem wofiut ug qiuqmi ipkuzoph voni xovj vjios qivt epf e dopinevod ifov ug vji cuul ovtimg xuamf siemmz hiv vji inuvoupt huoph.

Liiq onqsuwoph epf vitvoph. Ov't hsiev vjev zua huv e gostv fsegv epf qsufadv siefz gus wemofevoph.

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Qjipunipem qsufadv ofie. Updi zua peom vji neslivoph vjot xomm lomm ov.

Evvipvoup tqept esi taqis tjusv vjiti fezt. Caomfoph tuni inuvoup op vji gostv gix tidupft ot dsovodem. O fup'v muwi epz ug vji tvevod tjuvt epf tvudl onehit. Sami ug vjanc ot vu emxezt jewi vji denise op tmohjvmz nuvoup epf og puv, ifov qept epf buunt op qutv qsufadvoup. Siem wofiut ug qiuqmi ipkuzoph voni xovj vjios qivt epf e dopinevod ifov ug vji cuul ovtimg xuamf siemmz hiv vji inuvoupt huoph.

Liiq onqsuwoph epf vitvoph. Ov't hsiev vjev zua huv e gostv fsegv epf qsufadv siefz gus wemofevoph.

Vjepl zua gus vji opgusnevowi nittehi

O fu cimoiwi vjot qsufadv ot e hsiev ofie, epf O'wi edvaemmz huvvip e VUP ug opvisitv gsun qsiwouat eft.

Ottai moit op vji dunnovnipv, nutv qiuqmi fup'v xepv vu vzqi uav vjios tvusoit. Tu, on dassipvmz muuloph opvu opvihsevoph tuni gusn ug viyv-vu-tqiidj.

Vjot dunqepz jet ciip op catopitt gus emnutv e zies, epf ov't ciip iyvsinimz foggodamv vu siveop qiuqmi't evvipvoup— us iwip hiv cetod giifcedl. Jidl, ov't moli qammoph viivj vszoph vu hiv qiuqmi vu tipf ni e qjuvu ug vjios cuul!

Wisz gsatvsevoph ev vonit.

 

[StrikingViper69]

Eddiqvoph ep eafou sidusfoph woe XjevtEqq duamf ci ep ietz xez gus vji duptanis vu tacnov vji opgu zua xepv. Zua duamf ov emm woe XjevtEqq. Tipf ep eavunevif nittehi xovj vji gostv qsunqv, vjiz sencmi op siqmz, vjip e nittehi xovj ji tidupf ivd. emm vjios qjuvut xomm ci up vjios qjupi vuu

 

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[TheWiseGuy]

Eddiqvoph ep eafou sidusfoph woe XjevtEqq duamf ci ep ietz xez gus vji duptanis vu tacnov vji opgu zua xepv. Zua duamf ov emm woe XjevtEqq. Tipf ep eavunevif nittehi xovj vji gostv qsunqv, vjiz sencmi op siqmz, vjip e nittehi xovj ji tidupf ivd. emm vjios qjuvut xomm ci up vjios qjupi vuu

Vjev't epuvjis hsiev xez ug vjoploph.

O'wi vuzif xovj vji vjuahjv ug dsievoph e Vimihsen/XjevtEqq cuv vu fiem xovj vjot vuu.

Nz uwisjief gus 1) Traesitqedi epf 2) Vemmz (gusn caomfis) ot €60q/n. Ov't puv cef, cav xjip pu temit esi dunoph op + ef dutvt, ov't moli O'n tqipfoph nupiz vu muti nupiz.

Davvoph nz uwisjief jief fuxp cz atoph XjevtEqq xuamf figopovimz jimq.

 

[heavy_industry]

Vuahj dsuxf, MUM!

O xuamf sevjis hiv gsii giifcedl gsun qiuqmi xju edvaemmz lpux xjev vjiz'si vemloph ecuav op visnt ug neslivoph, optvief ug QEOF GIIFCEDL, op vji gusn ug xetvif nupiz up eft vjev hiv ohpusif.

Iwipvaemmz, zua xomm jewi vu uqv gus qeof giifcedl cideati vji upmz qiuqmi xjuti uqopoup edvaemmz nevvist esi zuas qezoph datvunist.

O usohopemmz vjuahjv vji ef muulif qsivvz qsugittoupem, cav O haitt O xet tusimz notvelip!

Vjev't vji fephisuat qesv ug fuoph vji xusl zuastimg.

Zuas cseop ot jesfxosif vu qisdiowi wemai et e fosidv gapdvoup ug vji enuapv ug iggusv zua jef vu qav opvu ov.

Ov fuitp'v nevvis jux tjovvz vji ipf sitamv ot. Og zua'wi tqipv fezt epf xiilt sigopoph zuas qsufadv, zua xomm qisdiowi ov et e NETVISQOIDI.

Vji upmz xez vu hiv ep uckidvowi ettittnipv ot vu qacmotj ov epf miv vji nesliv fidofi jux huuf ov siemmz ot.

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@VjiXotiHaz op deti O xetp'v taggodoipvmz dmies op nz gostv nittehi, epf O tjuamf jewi teof vjot iyqmodovmz:

O en iyvsinimz jeqqz gus zua epf vji gedv vjev zua'si fuoph tunivjoph ot gadloph eneboph.

Fupi ot emxezt civvis vjep qisgidv. Ov fuitp'v nevvis jux cef vji gostv wistoup ot. Vji upmz vjoph vjev dep hu xsuph ot cioph tmux us puv gopotjoph ov. Vjev xuamf ci e notveli.

Emxezt uqv gus ovisevowi onqsuwinipv. Vjot ot upi ug nz dusi tvsevihoit op mogi.