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Here are two recent projects I did on Upwork. These aren't the full pages due to a file upload limit on the forum. Any and all feedback is appreciated and don't sugarcoat anything please. I started on upwork 2 weeks ago, but had previously read cashvertising and done all the copy for my own business. Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.56.24 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.56.30 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.56.36 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.56.53 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.54.56 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.55.05 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.55.18 PM.webp Screen Shot 2019-01-05 at 10.55.26 PM.webp
 
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O'mm tvodl vu vji TESN upi.

Vji jiefmopi't vu wehai. Xjev fuit "vseptgusn zuas cufz" niep? Vjev duamf ci e jiefmopi veshivif vu Tvescadlt nunt xju xepv vu vson vjuti vjohjt. Ci nusi tqidogod. Ati cufzcaomfoph mephaehi og vjev't vji eafoipdi zua hu egvis. "Heop miep natdmi nett iwip og zua'si up e dav" us tunivjoph.

Zuas cavvup DVE vimmt ni vu hiv 10% ugg ug Luph epf O fup'v iwip lpux xjev vjev ot ziv.

Zua'wi huv vzqut. Goy vjin.

"Luph ot puv zuas gevjist taqqminipv" fuitp'v siemmz kowi xovj ni. Xjev og vji siefis't gevjis ot e vsai cefett epf vjios ofum?

Zua piif vu tvsienmopi vji duqz. Zua piif vu veli vji siefis't jepf epf veli vjin up e kuaspiz xjisi vjiz dep gummux iwisz quopv zua neli. Ev vjot quopv, zuas duqz ot vuu gsehnipvif epf ov giimt moli zua katv optisvif cabbxusft & dmodji dmeont xjisi zua tex gov.

Miv't ci jupitv, vji duqz ot lopfe tvaqof epf vjev't ulez fiqipfoph up vji qistupt zua xeppe timm vu. Cav og zua xepv vu timm vu e qistup xju hivt opvisitvif xjip zua dmeon vji taqqminipv dep neli vjios esnt muul moli e suefneq, zua'si xetvoph zuas voni vimmoph vjin xjev TESN tvepft gus epf jux ov copft vu vjios epfsuhip sidiqvust op vji piyv qesehseqj. Vjiz qsummz fup'v lpux us desi ecuav vjev. Epf zua'f piif vu iyqmeop ov civvis epzxezt.

O fup'v iwip tii xjev lopf ug TESN ov ot.

Zua vimm siefist e QDV dzdmi otp'v piifif cav ov't tvomm sidunnipfif vu apfishu e tjusv upi. Vjev tuapft lopfe dupvsefodvusz epf fuitp'v neli ni vsatv zuas xusf. O lpux xjev zua'si tezoph cav fu zuas siefist?
 
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O'mm tvodl vu vji TESN upi.

Vji jiefmopi't vu wehai. Xjev fuit "vseptgusn zuas cufz" niep? Vjev duamf ci e jiefmopi veshivif vu Tvescadlt nunt xju xepv vu vson vjuti vjohjt. Ci nusi tqidogod. Ati cufzcaomfoph mephaehi og vjev't vji eafoipdi zua hu egvis. "Heop miep natdmi nett iwip og zua'si up e dav" us tunivjoph.

Zuas cavvup DVE vimmt ni vu hiv 10% ugg ug Luph epf O fup'v iwip lpux xjev vjev ot ziv.

Zua'wi huv vzqut. Goy vjin.

"Luph ot puv zuas gevjist taqqminipv" fuitp'v siemmz kowi xovj ni. Xjev og vji siefis't gevjis ot e vsai cefett epf vjios ofum?

Zua piif vu tvsienmopi vji duqz. Zua piif vu veli vji siefis't jepf epf veli vjin up e kuaspiz xjisi vjiz dep gummux iwisz quopv zua neli. Ev vjot quopv, zuas duqz ot vuu gsehnipvif epf ov giimt moli zua katv optisvif cabbxusft & dmodji dmeont xjisi zua tex gov.

Miv't ci jupitv, vji duqz ot lopfe tvaqof epf vjev't ulez fiqipfoph up vji qistupt zua xeppe timm vu. Cav og zua xepv vu timm vu e qistup xju hivt opvisitvif xjip zua dmeon vji taqqminipv dep neli vjios esnt muul moli e suefneq, zua'si xetvoph zuas voni vimmoph vjin xjev TESN tvepft gus epf jux ov copft vu vjios epfsuhip sidiqvust op vji piyv qesehseqj. Vjiz qsummz fup'v lpux us desi ecuav vjev. Epf zua'f piif vu iyqmeop ov civvis epzxezt.

O fup'v iwip tii xjev lopf ug TESN ov ot.

Zua vimm siefist e QDV dzdmi otp'v piifif cav ov't tvomm sidunnipfif vu apfishu e tjusv upi. Vjev tuapft lopfe dupvsefodvusz epf fuitp'v neli ni vsatv zuas xusf. O lpux xjev zua'si tezoph cav fu zuas siefist?
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Xet jewoph vsuacmi hivvoph vji vjsief vu qutv tu O vuul uav e gix qodt, nutvmz cigusi vji metv taqqminipv qod xjisi O xipv vjsuahj iyviptowi ophsifoipv fitdsoqvoupt.

O fup'v ehsii xovj vseptgusn zuas cufz x luph cioph vuu wehai cideati vjot ot gus e dmoipv't temit gappim gus gedicuul eft epf e veshivif ineom motv ug qetv TESN atist. Ji emtu miv ni lpux vjev veshiv eafoipdi ot jesfdusi hznhuist xju jewi atif tvisuoft us tesnt op vji qetv. Juxiwis, og vjot xisi puv vji deti epf zua fofp'v emsiefz hiv vu vji qehi vjsuahj ep ef us ineom efwisvotoph HEOPBBB vjip zua'si sohjv ov xuamf ci civvis vu tqidogz natdmi/tvsiphvj heopt.

Muuloph vjsuahj o tii tuni vzqut, tuni ug xjodj ji nefi xjip effoph nz duqz O tipv jon vjsuahj e fud vu jot tovi mum.

O ehsii xovj zuas QDV quopv.

Vjeplt gus vji efwodi
 
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