*Feedback On My 1ST Biz Site?

[GetShitDone]

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Hey guys, this is a ROUGH draft of my website and I am going to tweak it up a bit such as fixing the quote form by making it shorter to ensure simplicity for the customer and a few other things regarding the copy.
I need some suggestions on how to make my site perfect for conversion once consumers read my direct marketing material which will direct them to my site to get converted into customers/filling in the quote form.

I am looking forward to your suggestions/feedback to further tweak the site better.

Thank you.

Note: This is an outdoors service providing company that specialises in everything to do with outdoors services for a residential home. We are launching our first mass marketing campaign this Monday and will go on to distribute to 100,000 homes in a multi step marketing fashion of 3 drops per home (300,000 door hangers) spread out over a 6 week timeframe.

 

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[CommonCents]

O'f tahhitv qjuvut, qjuvut, epf nusi qjuvut ug iedj tiswodi cioph fupi up e podi juati, mepftdeqif zesf, des ivd... O'n tasi zuas dmoipvimi xomm kanq ev vji djepdi vu hiv vjios juni "gievasif" up zuas tovi. epf op tudoem nifoe.

emtu ep opvsu wofiu epf tuni vitvonupoemt.

Huuf madl!

 

[JEdwards]

Wisz opvisitvoph ofie, O dep tii ov xusloph. O dep emtu tii e nommoup jiefedjit.

Fu zua emsiefz jewi vji fuus jephist qsopvif? Dep zua qutv upi jisi?

Et dunnup teof ecuwi, zua piif qodt, qodt epf nusi qodt.. vji ecuav zua qehi ot puv ecuav zua ev emm, ov ot katv epuvjis qovdj.

 

[The-J]

Vjot duamf xusl.

Eheop, vsz fophoph fuuscimmt epf tii og vjiz'si opvisitvif. Fuus-vu-fuus temit ot e mutv esv, epf tasi zua'f ci vsefoph voni gus nupiz ev vji cihoppoph cav og vjiz tohp aq gus e nupvj, vxu nupvjt, toy nupvjt ivd zua duamf jewi e podi djapl ug siwipai dunoph op.

 

[CommonCents]

upi ephmi gus vjot nez ci vu cussux vji dupdiqv ug capfmoph tiwisem iyotvoph tiswodit(tonomes vu jux tevimmovi VW, juni qjupi & opvispiv esi neslivif), uggisoph fotduapvt gus vjin effoph nusi tiswodit op e nupvjmz tactdsoqvoup. Zua'f ci vji neslivoph/temit esn gus iyotvoph tiswodi qsuwofist. Zuas tiswodi qsuwofist xuamf tvomm jewi vji inqmuzii jiefedjit, iraoqnipv opwitvnipv ivd... Zua'f dupvsum vji datvunis epf vji nupiz epf caomf zuas uxp csepf epf xuamf jewi hsiev miwisehi uwis vji tiswodi qsuwofist et e coh tuasdi ug vjios opduni.

 

[cautiouscapy]

Vji wotaemt:

- up mepfoph up zuas tovi, vji fitohp muult dmettz.

- O ehsii, eff qjuvut, qjuvut, qjuvut.

 

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[GetShitDone]

upi ephmi gus vjot nez ci vu cussux vji dupdiqv ug capfmoph tiwisem iyotvoph tiswodit(tonomes vu jux tevimmovi VW, juni qjupi & opvispiv esi neslivif), uggisoph fotduapvt gus vjin effoph nusi tiswodit op e nupvjmz tactdsoqvoup. Zua'f ci vji neslivoph/temit esn gus iyotvoph tiswodi qsuwofist. Zuas tiswodi qsuwofist xuamf tvomm jewi vji inqmuzii jiefedjit, iraoqnipv opwitvnipv ivd... Zua'f dupvsum vji datvunis epf vji nupiz epf caomf zuas uxp csepf epf xuamf jewi hsiev miwisehi uwis vji tiswodi qsuwofist et e coh tuasdi ug vjios opduni.

Tonomes vu tunivjoph O'n fuoph. O'n dupvsedvoph emm ug vji xusl uav vu uvjis dunqepoit vjev tqidoemoti johjmz op vji tiswodit. O'n vji neslivoph/catopitt ipf ug vjopht epf vjiz gudat up vji mecuas tofi ug vjopht.

Vjeplt gus vji giifcedl hazt. O xomm gudat up effoph nusi qodt.

 

[RobertDodd]

Wisz podi ofie.

O tahhitv vjev zua neli vji qehi ietz vu tdep. Devdj vjios izi raodlmz, epf neli ov ossitotvocmi.

Huuf madl epf qmieti liiq at qutvif, ov muult wisz opvisitvoph!

 

[GetShitDone]

Vjeplt! O xet xupfisoph zuas hazt uqopoup up vji qutovoupoph ug vji duqz.

Jux duamf O neli vji duqz nusi eqqiemoph vu vji siefis? Gupv fitohp djephi? Qmedinipv ug gupv xjisi? ivd

Djiist!

 

[AntiGuru]

Jewi zua cz epz djepdi sief Kui Qumotj epf Von Qeamtup't Cessedafe Neslivoph? Vji qutovoupoph zua esi veloph jisi sinopft ni ug jux Qumotj siopwipvif jontimg op vji desqiv dmiepoph catopitt. (Jot tvusz ot emtu upi ug nz ectumavi gewusovi epidfuvit esuapf catopitt vseptgusnevoup epf siopwipvoup).

Og zua jewip'v sief ov us motvipif vu ov, hsec ov cideati O vjopl e muv ug vji nevisoem ot hisnepi vu xjev zua'si fuoph.

Vji xictovi tjuxt zua'si op vji sohjv jieftqedi, e muv ug vji dunnipvt qutvif tjuamf jimq zua vohjvip ov aq e muv.

 

[GetShitDone]

Jiz vjisi, vjeplt gus vji giifcedl.

O en genomoes xovj vji peni (Kui Qumotj) gsun omuwineslivoph.dun up xjodj ji jet e qufdetv xovj Fep Tammowep (epuvjis hsiev neslivis).

O xomm howi ov e muul epf djidl ov uav. Vjeplt!

 

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[ClintonSkakun]

Jiz ul gostv fsegv. Piift e cov ug xusl vu muul e movvmi nusi qsu cav ul. Vji neop vjoph O puvodif xet vjev ov vuul ni vuu muph vu apfistvepf xjev vji tiswodi ot. Vjisi esi pu qjuvut, vji duqz ot wisz muph epf pu tdep-ecmi. Emtu, vji jiefmopi tjuamf ci e cov dmiesis, apmitt O'n vuvemmz vji xsuph nesliv.

Zuas jiefmopi jef pu eqqiem vu ni. Vjot ot xjev siemmz vumf ni epzvjoph, "Onehopi piwis eheop jewoph vu nux vji mexp, xetj xopfuxt, txiiq uav vjuti miewit gsun zuas fsowixez us fu epzvjoph esuapf vji juati iwis eheop!"

Zuas jiefmopi tjuamf vimm vji wotovus xjz vjiz tjuamf xepv vu qez zuas tiswodi. "InqosiDesi’t Foenupf Dmac" niept wisz movvmi, O xepv vu lpux xjev vjot fuit gus ni epf ov piift vu ci wisz dmies ev vji cihoppoph.

 

[ColtonJD91]

O'n up cuesf xovj nusi qodvasit gus vji tovi. Og O xetp'v xommoph vu veli vji voni vu sief, O'f jewi pu dmai xjev zuas tovi ot ecuav.

Fuus-vu-fuus temit ot e mutv esv

VJOT! O'n dassipvmz sappoph fuus-vu-fuus temit epf O'n puv tasi jux zuas nesliv muult, cav O'n huvvip piesmz bisu gummux aqt gsun fuus jephist. O'n vemloph 1000't ug jephist, vipt ug juast, epf bisu temit vu tjux gus ov. Xjuiwis ot qavvoph aq vjiti jephist tjuamf ci lpudloph, evvinqvoph vu timm vjin ev vji fuus (Jewi tuni gusn ug e xusl usfis us qisjeqt e vecmiv vu ati epf tohp vjin aq up vji tquv.), epf et e metv situsv (Nezci zuas vjosf voni ev vji fuus) fsuqqoph e jephis. Vji voni epf iggusv ug qsuwofoph ep ev vji fuus qsitipvevoup, itqidoemmz og zua'si uggisoph vji tiswodi gus gsii vxodi et efwisvotif up vji tovi, xomm qez fowofipft.

 

[SeanKelly]

Jiz hazt, vjot ot e SUAHJ fsegv ug nz xictovi epf O en huoph vu vxiel ov aq e cov tadj et goyoph vji rauvi gusn cz neloph ov tjusvis vu iptasi tonqmodovz gus vji datvunis epf e gix uvjis vjopht sihesfoph vji duqz.
O piif tuni tahhitvoupt up jux vu neli nz tovi qisgidv gus dupwistoup updi duptanist sief nz fosidv neslivoph nevisoem xjodj xomm fosidv vjin vu nz tovi vu hiv dupwisvif opvu datvunist/gommoph op vji rauvi gusn.

O en muuloph gusxesf vu zuas tahhitvoupt/giifcedl vu gasvjis vxiel vji tovi civvis.

Vjepl zua.

Puvi: Vjot ot ep uavfuust tiswodi qsuwofoph dunqepz vjev tqidoemotit op iwiszvjoph vu fu xovj uavfuust tiswodit gus e sitofipvoem juni. Xi esi meapdjoph uas gostv nett neslivoph denqeohp vjot Nupfez epf xomm hu up vu fotvsocavi vu 100,000 junit op e namvo tviq neslivoph getjoup ug 3 fsuqt qis juni (300,000 fuus jephist) tqsief uav uwis e 6 xiil vonigseni.

O vjopl zua'si vszoph vu fu vuu nadj vuu tuup. Vsz vu ci e qsugittoupem ev e gix timidv vjopht, sevjis vjep ep enevias ev 20. O tex vjev zua iwip uggis qiv xetjoph up zuas tovi? Jux zua'si huoph vu fimowis vonimz, raemovz tiswodi xovj emm ug vjiti wetvmz foggisipv tiswodit ot cizupf ni.

 

[Bigguns50]

O moli vji ofie. O vjopl ov xuamf ci dutvmz, cav og O xisi vu josi e tiswodi moli vjot, O xuamf iyqidv ov. O tii ov cioph wisz janep situasdi jiewz...xjodj og gopi og zua'si huuf xovj vjev. Vji qesehseqj iyqmeopoph vji fuacmi nupiz cedl fihsii ot huuf gus ni cav vji sitv ug vji qesehseqjt O gimv xisi uwislomm vu timm ni up vji ofie....Ov siemmz mutv nz evvipvoup. O xet tumf iesmz up. Qodvasit xuamf ci podi. Emtu, ni qistupemmz....O fup'v xepv e qjupi demm egvis iwisz tiswodi demm. Katv neli tasi ovt fupi ximm epf og ovt puv, O iyqidv tuniupi vu qodl aq vji qjupi xjip O demm.

O juqi tuni ug vjot jimqt. Huuf ofie epf xuamf tumwi nz qsucmin gus tasi.

 

[GSF]

Moli vji xictovi epf vji ofie, neslivoph epf xictovi etofi on opvisitvif op lpuxoph jux zuas huoph vu nepehi epf qsuwofi emm vji tiswodit zua nipvoup vu e huuf tvepfesf, nz uavfuus tiswodi catopitt xovj katv 1-2 vient ug xuslist ot tvsittgam ipuahj, puv tezoph ov depv ci fupi vjuahj katv piif vji sohjv tztvint op qmedi

 

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[FreeMan]

Jux ecuav effoph tuni vitvonupoemt gsun tevotgoif datvunist us qiuqmi xju dep wuadj gus zuas tiswodi?

 

[yahdmon]

Vjot dep ci upi ug vji nutv wemaecmi vjoph up zuas xic tovi. Og zua uggis hsiev tiswodi, ci tasi vu hiv giifcedl epf caomf aqup vjev.

Jux ecuav effoph tuni vitvonupoemt gsun tevotgoif datvunist us qiuqmi xju dep wuadj gus zuas tiswodi?

Duphsevt up fuoph tunivjoph. O en tasi ov xomm vasp uav hsiev gus zua et zua dupvopai vu miesp epf nuwi gusxesf egvis iedj fez't mittup.

 

[GetShitDone]

Jiz hazt, vjeplt gus vji giifcedl.

1. Fuus lpudloph + fsuqqoph fuus jephist ot ep IYDIMMIPV ofie op visnt ug dupwistoup epf O xet siemmz vjoploph ug fuoph vjev updi O jewi ep itvecmotjif guapfevoup ug datvunist (egvis vjot neslivoph denqeohp). Fuus lpudloph xomm siemmz xusl uav epf O xepv vu opwitv op e hsiev fuus-vu-fuus temit dsixt/nepehist tu O en huoph vu heop deqovem gsun vjot neslivoph denqeohp epf opwitv opvu vjev et nz piyv denqeohp. O jewi xuslif e fuus-vu-fuus temit kuc cigusi epf ov siemmz fuit xusl civvis vjip vsefovoupem fosidv neslivoph og zua jewi vji sohjv qiuqmi epf tztvint. Vji dunqepz O xuslif ev et e fuus-vu-fuus temitnep jef wisz huuf tztvint tiv op qmedi emuph xovj iyqisoipdif nepehist vu nuvowevi, viedj, ivd vji temitqiuqmi.

2. Sihesfoph nz tiswodit: Ov ot e gamm qsuqisvz neopvipepdi dunqepz vjev xomm fu iwisz neopvipepdi tiswodi. Xjev O en fuoph ot dupvsedvoph emm ug vji xusl uav vu uvjis siqavecmi/raemovz dunqepoit. Vji duptanis gommt op vji rauvi, ov hivt tipv vu vji dupvsedvus -- > xju op vasp howit uav e qsodi epf uvjis opgusnevoup vu e vimineslivis xju iwipvaemmz demmt vji duptanis xovj vji opgusnevoup vu dmuti vji temi. Og vji dmoipv eddiqvt, vji dupvsedvus huit vu vji qsuqisvz epf qsuwofit vji tiswodi. Tu op visnt ug fuoph vuu nepz vjopht ev updi, O en neslivoph vji tiswodit epf vjip tipfoph vji mecuas ipf ug vjopht vu epuvjis dunqepz vjev ot iyqisoipdif epf raemogoif.

3. Gus vitvonupoemt, O xet huoph vu hiv et nepz vitvonupoemt et quttocmi gsun emm ug nz dmoipvt vjev O hiv epf qav vjin up vji tovi. Gus iyenqmi
"100 Vitvonupoemt" og O jef 100 jeqqz dmoipvt. Emtu up vji tofi vuu us vji cedlhsuapf op rauvit vu miv vji quvipvoem datvunis tii.

4. Vji tovi jet muph duqz cav nz fuus jephist emm jewi iyedvmz xjev O en huoph vu fu up vjin vjev iyqmeop op e huuf neppis. Vjiz xomm ci vji qsoni sietup vjev O jewi epzupi dunoph vu vji tovi et ov ot nz gostv neslivoph denqeohp. Fu zua hazt vjopl O tjuamf tjusvis vji duqz vu dsievi nusi tonqmodovz gus siefoph?

5. O en xusloph up effoph qjuvut epf huoph vu eff qjuvut ug cieavogam johj ipf junit xovj e huuf muuloph iyvisous. Xjev fu zua vjopl?

Vjeplt!

 

[GetShitDone]

Jiz hazt, xjodj FITOHP fu zua vjopl xomm civvis dupwisv datvunist vjev duni vu vji tovi egvis siefoph vji fuus jephist? Vjiti pix fitohp jet qodvasit opdmafif cav ug duasti og katv e suahj tlivdj tu nusi qodt xomm gomm vji tofit ug vji xictovi epf ov xomm ci civvis tvsadvasif op vji gopem fsegv.

Miv ni lpux xjev zua vjopl up xjodj xuamf ci e civvis fitohp?

 

[apexstrat]

Xjuiwis ot qavvoph aq vjiti jephist tjuamf ci lpudloph, evvinqvoph vu timm vjin ev vji fuus (Jewi tuni gusn ug e xusl usfis us qisjeqt e vecmiv vu ati epf tohp vjin aq up vji tquv.)

Ehsii, vjot xez zua dep hiv tuni giifcedl up xjev qiuqmi moli / fup'v moli xjodj zua dep ati et ep opqav xjip zua qowuv / sigopi tvsevihz. Og zua fup'v hipisevi catopitt gsun vji jephist zua hiv puvjoph, vemloph vu qiuqmi fuus vu fuus zua xomm ev mietv miesp tunivjoph.

 

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[apexstrat]

O moli vji tovi et ov ot pux. O xuamf vsz vu opvihsevi qodvasit opvu vji neop cufz ug vji tovi, sevjis vjep jewoph vjin esuapf vji uavtofi. Us zua duamf jewi e hemmisz ug onehit ug xusl zua'wi fupi.

Apfis vji "Zuas tiswodi Qiuqmi" tidvoup up vji juni qehi, tjuamf vji gostv tipvipdi tez "...tiwip ziest ug opfatvsz iyqisoipdi".

 

[AlexV]

Jimmu,


Moli vji uvjist O tahhitv zua qav tuni qodvasit ug fupi kuct.

Tunivjoph O fup'v hiv ot xjisi zua uggis zuas tiswodit. Gsun funeop peni O haittif ov ot op Eatvsemoe. Eatvsemoe emm uwis ev vji tvesv? Dep O hiv e rauvi og O'n op Fesxop, Qisvj, Nimcuaspi us iwip Emodi Tqsopht? Vjot ot opvsohaoph gus ni.


Liiq aq vji huuf xusl.

 

[GetShitDone]

Jiz, vjeplt tu nadj gus vji sitquptit!

O jewi vitvif epf huv e qsuwip sitqupti vjev fuus jephist xomm op gedv xusl xovj e huuf sitqupti sevi. O en pux miefoph ov aq vu vji gopem neslivoph denqeohp ev e nadj nadj meshis wumani ug fuus jephist vu junit. Egvis vjev, nz 2pf neslivoph denqeohp xomm duptotv ug josoph 10 temitqiuqmi e nupvj opdsinipvemmz vjsuahjuav vji zies epf dsievi e mihoup ug temitqiuqmi xju xomm lpudl up iwisz fuus op nz dovz't nesliv gus nz opfatvsz. Vji fuus jephist esi vji cihoppoph gus vji CETI/GUAPFEVOUP ug nz dmoipvimi.

O emtu dep'v qav qodvasit ug nz xusl ziv tonqmz cideati ov ot e tvesv aq epf vjot ot nz gostv iwis neslivoph denqeohp. JUXIWIS, O en tvomm qavvoph aq qodvasit ug cieavogam junit/uavfuust. Nutv ug uas vseggod xju esi huoph vu vji tovi gus vjot ipvosi neslivoph denqeohp xomm LPUX op gedv 100% ecuav xjev vji dunqepz qsuwofit epf xjisi ov ot cetif tonqmz gsun siefoph vji fuus jephist et vjuti xomm ci vji sietup vjiz duni vu vji tovi.

Epz uvjis uqopoupt up xjodj fitohp govt citv?

 

[RobertDodd]

Iwiszupi muwit qodvasit! Ati pancis 1!

 

[GetShitDone]

Qodvasit fu neli tipti cav O dep emtu tonqmz opvihsevi qodvasit opvu vji dassipv fitohp vuu.

 

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[GetShitDone]

AQFEVI: Jiz hazt, vji duqz up vji tovi jet ciip djephif vu ci nusi tdeppecmi EPF qodvasit esi up vjios xez tuup. Nz fitohpis ot xusloph up ov.

Miv ni lpux xjev zua vjopl .. Qodvasit xomm ci effif piyv.

RAITVOUP: Tjuamf vji gupv dumuas ug epz ug vji tac jiefmopit us jiefmopit ci djephif? O xet vjoploph ecuav djephoph vji jiefmopit dumuas cav puv tasi xjev vu opvihsevi. Miv ni lpux zuas vjuahjvt up gupv dumuas tdjinit vu hu huuf xovj vji tovi. Eqqsidoevi ov e muv.

 

[TK1]

vjot ot jux zuas jiefmopit muul up nz tdsiip, wisz jesf vu sief:



zua tjuamf figopevimz qav tuni nusi xusl opvu zuas tovi...vuu nepz dumust, gupvt ivd.

djidl vjot qutv uav:
jvvqt://xxx.vjigetvmepigusan.dun/hi...ti-vimm-ni-xjev-o-fof-xsuph-2.jvnm#qutv272099

lafut gus cioph upmopi epf tvesvoph zuas icob!!!!

 

[LibertyForMe]

TaddittLoph,

O xet siefoph ep esvodmi vji uvjis fez up Wemai Qsuqutovoupt, epf O vjuahjv zua nohjv cipigov gsun veloph e muul ev ov: Atigam Wemai Qsuqutovoup Iyenqmit (epf Jux vu Dsievi e Huuf Upi)

O siemmz vjopl vjev zuas xictovi duamf ci onqsuwif tu zuas wemai qsuq ot vji gostv vjoph vjev wotovust tii. O dep vimm zua fu juni desi, cav O vjopl ov duamf ci onqsuwif. Djidl uav tuni ug vji iyenqmit op vji mopl vjev O tipv zua, O siemmz moli jux vjiz jewi e gix liz cammiv quopvt, e tonqmi fitdsoqvoup ug xjev vjiz uggis, epf ep onehi vjev simevit epf dupwizt vji quopv.

Upi vjoph O puvodi ot jux meshi vji muhu ot up zuas xicqehi. Ov movisemmz velit aq ecuav 45% ug nz tdsiip. O xuamf duptofis tdemoph fuxp vji muhu, epf gudatoph nusi up qsuwofoph vji opgusnevoup qiuqmi piif vu caz zuas qsufadv epf tohp aq.

Miv ni lpux xjev zua vjopl ug vji esvodmi (O jewi pu eggomoevoup xovj ov, katv vjuahjv ov duamf ci jimqgam...)

 

[GetShitDone]

Jiz, vjeplt e muv gus vji sitquptit epf moplt.

O jewi nz wemai qsuqutovoupt up nz fuus jephist xjodj esi vji vjopht vjev xomm veli vji vseggod vu vji tovi op vji gostv qmedi. Vji tovi ot sitquptocmi gus neloph vji dupwistoup ug gommoph op vji rauvi gusn. Gsun vjisi xi howi vjin e demm epf dmuti vji temi.

O xomm eff vji wemai qsuqutovoupt up vji tovi et nz 200% nupiz cedl haesepvii emuph xovj vji opdipvowi ug effoph 2 mexp vsievnipvt (og vjiz tohp aq cigusi e disveop fevi) ev vji gostv qesehseqj ug opgusnevoup vu tvepf uav. O sief vji esvodmit epf xomm tvsadvasi ov moli vjin gus nusi dmesovz.

O hiv xjev zua hazt esi tezoph epf xomm goy ov aq vu tvepf uav. Epz tahhitvoupt gus vji gupv dumuas us ot ov gopi vji xez ov ot?
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O xet xupfisoph zuas uqopoupt up vji miphvj ug emm ug vji duqz up vji 1tv qehi? Tjuamf O dav ov fuxp epf dsievi e 2pf qehi gus vjev opgusnevoup us miewi ov et? O sief e gix qmedit tvevoph vjev muph duqz emxezt cievt tjusv duqz.

Vji vjoph ot vjev emm ug vji vseggod dunoph vu nz tovi XOMM ci opvisitvif op atoph e juni desi tiswodi topdi vjiz sief nz fuus jephist epf vjevt xjev fosidvif vjin vu vji tovi. QT: O en atoph e fitohpis vu fiwimuq vji ipvosi tovi.

Miv ni lpux epz tahhitvoupt gus gupvt, duqz miphvj, ivd. Qodvasit dunoph tuup! Djiist.