Finally Made a Breakthrough

[trh90]

I've been reading this forum for a while now and finally made a breakthrough on getting started.

A little history

When I was young I never ran out of words or smart comments. I was so full of great ideas and actions. As I jumped into the working world I got crushed. My ideas were always terrible (until they became someone else's), I was always told to keep my opinions to myself, always shutdown when I did voice them. The list goes on and on. I complied because that is what I thought I was supposed to do.

Fast forward 20 yrs. I'm sick of it! I don't want to shut up! I tried and failed at creating digital content. I can create a blog but I can't create content. I sit down to write and my brain freezes up. Nothing comes out. I've tried recording my thoughts as well. Nothing but brain freeze (without the slushy). Got sick and spend 4 yrs pretty sure I was going to be dead within in a few yrs. My brain didn't function nor did my body and no diagnosis only that it was all in my head. I found an article in a free copy of a magazine decided to try it and it helped. I continued searching for help until I finally found a doctor 7 hrs from me that was willing to help me for a reasonable fee. That was 1 yr ago. I'm 90% better.

Now I read the Millionaire Fastlane and it made me think. Next I have spent hours reading this forum learning a lot and discovered one thread that had the most impact.
15 Days to Freedom - Make Money Copywriting in 15 Days or Less

I realized if I can make it thru that I can create content and move forward with anything I desire. Well I've read that thread multiple times and finally got some words out.

So backing up a bit. With the help of many of you on here I have 2 books started. The story is good, the writing still needs a lot of work but progress is good, right? I have a list of other books that I want to write because the ideas just keep coming. Since writing is still a problem for me I downloaded 5 pictures and have been trying to describe them. (Still working on the copywriting thread). I made a breakthrough today with one of the pictures.

This is the picture. The first description I post under it is the one that is copied from the site I got the picture from. The second one is the one I wrote. I need some constructive critisism on my writing so I can keep improving and I'm hoping you guys will help me out one more time.

20Pcs Colorful Soft Cat Nail Cover
This fashion, non-toxic and simple kitten nail caps can protect you from scratching by your kitten effectively.
Made of high quality rubber material, very soft and comfortable to wear.
Also it will make your kitten special.
Specifications:
Condition: New and high quality.
Material: Rubber/ Silicone
Size(Approx.):
S: Fit: 2.5KG-5.0KG, Width: 0.6CM, Length: 1.2CM
M: Fit: 5.0KG-7.5KG, Width: 0.7CM, Length: 1.2CM
L: Fit: 7.5KG-10KG, Width: 0.8CM, Length: 1.2CM

Note:
1. Please compare the detail size with your pet\'s before you bid. Please choose larger size if your pet\'s size fall between two sizes.

2. The picture may not refect the real color of the item due to different computer monitor and different light brightness.

3. Please allow us some measure error due to hand measurement.

4. The nail caps will fall off with the natural growth of your pet\'s nails, we recommend that you check your pet\'s nails periodically.

Instructions:
STEP 1: Trim the tip of your pet\'s nails. Trim just enough to allow the nail cap to fit all the way to the base of the nail. FOR KITTENS: Do not trim kittens\' claws before applying Soft Paws. You will need sufficient claw surface for the glue to adhere properly.
STEP 2: Fill nail caps 1/3 full with adhesive.

STEP 3: Extend nails by gently pressing thumb on top with index finger on bottom of paw -- slide nail caps onto nail.

STEP 4: Observe pet for five minutes before release. You can play with your pet or feed some of pet\'s favorite food to distract for a few minutes.

Package Includes:

1 Pack of Nail Cap (20Pcs Per Pack)

This is what I wrote today:

Neighborhood Envy

Your cat can now show her unique style with the multi colored nail covers. With multiple colors to chose from your cat can appear to have perfect salon colored nails. These fashionable covers are made of high quality rubber making them comfortable to wear while protecting your furniture from scratches.

I tried to take a different approach to the item. It made me think of a day I was in the pet isle at the store and these ladies were picking out new clothes for their dogs. It was a serious converstation about how they dress them every day. I had to move on because I laughed so hard. I tried to write it based on what I think they would be looking for in an accessory.

 

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