Hello everyone, trying to teach myself copy by helping friends and family with for sale ads on craigslist and ebay. Figured the best way is just to dive in and go! This is my first try, honest and constructive feedback wanted Coworker is selling his car, told him I would rewrite his ad since he has had no hits on it. Here is his ad:
Title: 2011 Honda CRZ
Honda mechanic looking to sell my 2011 Honda CRZ. Original owner and very well cared for. Every maintenance has been performed at all intervals in accordance to Honda recommendation. No aftermarket anything 100% Honda genuine parts for every service from brakes to fluids.
Here is mine, took about 20ish minutes.
Title - Pristine 2011 Honda CRZ Sport Coupe 6 Speed Manuel
Looking for a fun sports car with that famous Honda reliability for your summer ride? Come take a ride in style in this immaculate CRZ, don’t let it pass you by while you pass gas stations enjoying the incredible 39pmg average fuel economy! Feel the crisp shifting action of the 6-speed gearbox containing the power of 122 horses producing 128 lb-ft of torque! Zero to sixty in 8.3 seconds; don’t worry about those extra hydrocarbons your producing, since the CRZ is rated as an Advanced Technology Partial Zero Emissions Vehicle (AT-PZEV for short).
One owner, (Honda trained technician) with every maintenance lovingly performed at all intervals in accordance to Honda recommendation since new. No aftermarket anything, 100% Honda genuine parts for every service for your peace of mind. Henry Ford said you could have a car in any color as long as it’s black, and boy does this car deliver on that promise! Black on black minty fresh interior, non-smoker for that almost new car smell. The two lush sport seats will keep you firmly in place while you put the car through its paces, or provide support for those long road trips. Come take your test drive today, don’t let this future classic slip away!
Thanks in advance everyone,
Eric.
Title: 2011 Honda CRZ
Honda mechanic looking to sell my 2011 Honda CRZ. Original owner and very well cared for. Every maintenance has been performed at all intervals in accordance to Honda recommendation. No aftermarket anything 100% Honda genuine parts for every service from brakes to fluids.
Here is mine, took about 20ish minutes.
Title - Pristine 2011 Honda CRZ Sport Coupe 6 Speed Manuel
Looking for a fun sports car with that famous Honda reliability for your summer ride? Come take a ride in style in this immaculate CRZ, don’t let it pass you by while you pass gas stations enjoying the incredible 39pmg average fuel economy! Feel the crisp shifting action of the 6-speed gearbox containing the power of 122 horses producing 128 lb-ft of torque! Zero to sixty in 8.3 seconds; don’t worry about those extra hydrocarbons your producing, since the CRZ is rated as an Advanced Technology Partial Zero Emissions Vehicle (AT-PZEV for short).
One owner, (Honda trained technician) with every maintenance lovingly performed at all intervals in accordance to Honda recommendation since new. No aftermarket anything, 100% Honda genuine parts for every service for your peace of mind. Henry Ford said you could have a car in any color as long as it’s black, and boy does this car deliver on that promise! Black on black minty fresh interior, non-smoker for that almost new car smell. The two lush sport seats will keep you firmly in place while you put the car through its paces, or provide support for those long road trips. Come take your test drive today, don’t let this future classic slip away!
Thanks in advance everyone,
Eric.
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