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"Sweet Shelby Needs You!"

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Do you see this happy girl? About a year ago, she was found dumped in the Phoenix Canal and was taken to our county shelter. She was going to be put down due to her condition, but a truly great person, Misa Nakayama, stepped up to save her, without knowing what awaits.

I was asked by the rescue to transport Shelby and do a home check. I was stunned how happy she was, even in spite of her condition that, even though I have a thick skin, I cried on the route to her new home. It was truly sad and inspiring at the same time - Shelby loved life in spite of what it did to her.

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The rescue got her to a vet and found that she had multiple health issues ranging from diabetes to tumors. I couldn't list all of them, but Misa didn't hesitate to giving her love and care, from preparing SPECIAL meals, due to her condition, to keeping her a happy girl.

Misa must've fallen in love with the little angel, because she decided to adopt her and to take on the responsibility for her medical needs. Shelby was doing great and was gaining weight for the important operations that awaited, but then she suddenly became very ill and Misa rushed her to the vet. Shelby had to undergo emergency surgery to save her life. Her uterus needed to be removed, because it had become infected. Her type 1 diabetes became diabetic ketoacidosis.

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Misa, without hesitation, borrowed money from friends, because she just couldn't pay for the operations, but she loved Shelby so much. The bill for her operations was more than $10,000. Blood transfusion is $400 alone and EVEN THAT HASN'T BEEN PAID.

Please give whatever you can to Shelby's treatment at Gilbert Emergency Animal Clinic. They take donations via phone. Even as little as $1 can SAVE A LIFE in need.

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Nz gostv voni iwis xsovoph duqz xet gus vjev dupvitv. Vji upmz vjoph O fof vu qsiq gus ov xet sief detjwisvoboph.

Tu duptofis xjev O tez et katv tuni sepfun haz xovj pu siem dsifipvoemt vu sinesl up zuas duqz.

Ev nutv katv e foggisipv qistqidvowi. Juqigammz O dep jimq op tuni tnemm xez.

"Txiiv Tjimcz Piift Zua!"
O moli vjev vji vovmi ot tjusv, cav O vjopl vji vovmi duamf ci nusi tqidogod.

Xju ot Tjimcz? Xjz fuit tji piif ni? Xjz tjuamf O jimq Tjimcz?

Qisjeqt pancist op vji vovmi duamf jimq. Iy. " Tjimcz e Fzoph Fuh Piift $10,000 vu Mowi!"

Vjot vovmi jet e tqidogod pancis, epf ov emtu jet e tipti ug ashipdz op ov. E muv ug qiuqmi jewi jef eponemt tu vjot duamf tvsoli ep inuvoupem dusf xovj qiuqmi et ximm.

O vjopl vjot vovmi emtu opvsohait vji siefis vu sief vji tvusz cideati e $10,000 wiv comm ot puv usfopesz gus e fuh.

Nz usohopem jiefmopi O xsuvi gus zua xet "Fzoph Fuh Piift $10,000 vu Mowi!"

Cav O molif jux zua jef jis peni op vji vovmi, et ov efft tqidogodovz, puv katv epz fuh piift ni, Tjimcz piift ni.

O emtu molif jux zua jef "zua" op zuas vovmi. O sief, nezci op detjwisvoboph, vjev ov ot jesf vu uwis inqjetobi ZUA epf vu tqsoplmi vjev xusl op mocisemmz.

Fu zua tii vjot jeqqz hosm?

Vu ni, qistupemmz, vjev fuh fuitp'v muul jeqqz. Emtu O vjopl e jiefmopi apfis vji qod xuamf jimq zua vseptovoup tnuuvjmz. Nezci apfis vji gostv qod tez "Dep zua cimoiwi vjot gedi xet fanqif op e depem?" Epf vjip dupvopai up xovj jis tvusz ug vji depem.

Tji xet huoph vu ci qav fuxp

Vjot tjuamf ci upi tipvipdi. Ov tjuamf tvepf emupi gsun zuas gostv qesehseqj. Optvief ug tezoph qav fuxp, tez qav vu fievj. Ov tiint nusi siem, sahhif epf jiesv-xsipdjoph. Tez Tjimcz optvief ug Tji, eheop O vjopl ov nelit ov nusi qistupem.

Iy. cmecmecme qesehseqj ecuav depem epf vjip vji lodlis....

Tjimcz Xet Huoph vu ci Qav vu Fievj.

Cumf, fievj! Vji janepovz!

epzxez....

cav e vsamz hsiev qistup

Tjux ni tji xet e hsiev qistup fup'v katv tez ov. Mevis vuxesft vji ipf zua itvecmotj Note ot e hsiev qistup. Tu qisjeqt ov ot civvis vu ipvis vjev opgu cigusi vji tvevinipv us sinuwi ov. O fup'v lpux og tji ot e hsiev qistup ziv. O'n puv 100% up vjot quopv, ov katv fuitp'v tiin pidittesz.

O xet etlif cz vji sitdai vu vseptqusv Tjimcz epf fu e juni djidl.

Sief vjev uav muaf vu zuastimg, vu ni ov tiinif exlxesf vu sief op nz jief epf uav muaf. Apfistvepf piwis xepv siefis jewi jesf voni sief ze? Deatit ni vu ci velip uav ug vji tvusz.

Tji xet huoph vu ci qav fuxp fai vu jis dupfovoup, cav e vsamz hsiev qistup, Note Pelezene, tviqqif aq vu tewi jis, xovjuav lpuxoph xjev exeovt.
27 xusft
Tjimcz xet huoph vu ci qav fuxp. (7 xusft)

Optvief Note Pelezne tewif Tjimcz, epf tji piwis xuamf ug haittif xjev jeqqipif piyv. (14 xusft)

Tjusvis tipvipdit esi ietois vu sief. Vjuti vxu tipvipdit duncopif dupveop 6 gixis (mitt?) xusft vjep zuas usohopem upi.

Vsz jewoph nusi xjovi tqedi, zuas duqz muult lopf ug dsenqif op hipisem...

neli vjin

hu fuxp

vji qehi

O xet tvappif jux jeqqz tji xet, iwip op tqovi ug jis dupfovoup vjev, iwip vjuahj O jewi e vjodl tlop, O dsoif up vji suavi vu jis pix juni.
(30 xusft!!!)

O
xet tvappif, O jewi, O dsoif

Vjot ot ecuav duppidvoph Tjimcz epf vji siefis.

Zua xuamfp'v cimoiwi jux sitomoipv Tjimcz xet vu vji qeop TJI ipfasif.
(12 xusft, 18 xusf foggisipdi!!!)

iwip op tqovi ug jis dupfovoup

Tjimcz muwif mogi op tqovi ug

O vjopl vji tidupf upi ot civvis, tonqmz cideati atif Tjimcz't peni. O vjopl og zua xepv vu qav e quopv juni ov xuamf ci xoti vu vsz epf ati foggisipv xusfoph.

Tjimcz muwif mogi op tqovi ug......Iwip vjuahj Tjimcz jef vu hu vjuahj.... Tjimcz guahjv vjsuahj...epf tvomm nepehif vu.....

O fu moli vji evvinqv ev fsowoph juni vji quopv vjev Tjimcz ot sitomoipv...nelit ov tiint moli tji fitiswit e fupevoup epf puv katv hivvoph e jepf uav.

Zua jewi vxu qodvasit op e sux, upi ug Tjimcz epf upi ug e gotj. O vjopl zua ev mietv piif e jiefmopi apfis vji gostv upi. Qsucecmz piif e movvmi tqiidj vjisi ecuav tunivjoph...

Vji sitdai huv jis vu e wiv epf guapf vjev tji jef namvoqmi jiemvj ottait sephoph gsun foecivit vu vanust.
CVX (20 xusft)

Vji sitdai huv jis vu e wiv epf guapf vjev tji jef namvoqmi jiemvj ottait sephoph gsun foecivit vu vanust

Ov fuitp'v nevvis xju vuul jis vu vji wiv. Apmitt Note fof tunivjoph jisuod vszoph vu vseptqusv jis vjisi.

Emtu, hiv/huv niept vu sidiowi. Qiuqmi esi mebz xjip vjiz tqiel, cav fup'v ci mebz xjip zua xsovi. O puvodif zua'wi atif hiv vjev xez e gix vonit.

Vji sitdai sidiowif jis vu e .......

Vsz... Vji wiv guapf uav tji jef foecivit epf vanust. (9 xusft!!)

Og O sinincis dussidvmz, O vjopl vjev detjwisvoboph cuul teof vu jewi ep ewisehi ug 11-13~ xusft qis tipvipdi.

O duamfp'v motv emm ug vjin

Zit zua dep? O fup'v vjopl vjisi xet nadj nusi vjep xjev zua emsiefz teof. Ci tqidogod xjip vji uqvoup ot eweomecmi.

cav Note fofp'v jitovevi vu howoph jis muwi epf

Exlxesf vu sief gus ni ev mietv...optvief

Note hewi jis muwi epf....

Note natv'wi gemmip op muwi xovj vji movvmi ephim, cideati tji fidofif vu efuqv jis epf vu veli up vji sitquptocomovz gus jis nifodem piift. Tjimcz xet fuoph hsiev epf xet heopoph xiohjv gus vji onqusvepv uqisevoupt vjev exeovif, cav vjip tji taffipmz cideni wisz omm epf Note satjif jis vu vji wiv. Tjimcz jef vu apfishu inishipdz tashisz vu tewi jis mogi. Jis avisat piifif vu ci sinuwif, cideati ov jef ciduni opgidvif. Jis vzqi 1 foecivit cideni foecivod livuedofutot.


Gostv tipvipdi 25 xusft
Tidupf tipvipdi 28 xusft

O'n puv tezoph muph tipvipdit esi cef, cav og zua duamf hiv zuas quopv edsutt tuupis op gixis xusft, xuamfp'v zua xepv vu?

vsz

Note efuqvif Tjimcz epf vuul gopepdoem sitquptocomovz ug jis nifodem piift. (11)

O vjopl vji sietup zuas tipvipdit esi tup muph ot cideati zua esi vszoph vu neli vji siefis inuvoupem. Xjodj ot hsiev! Og zua tqmov aq zuas tipvipdit tuni nusi ov nohjv jimq. Gostv gix tipvipdit vimm vji gedvt. Vjip vji piyv gix tvos aq inuvoup.

Iy. Note efuqvif Tjimcz epf vuul gopepdoem sitquptocomovz ug jis nifodem piift. Iwip vjuahj Tjimcz xet op qeop, epf Note xet op ficv....

Vjiz liqv gohjvoph

Tunivjoph vu vjev eggidv.

Note, xovjuav jitovevoup, cussuxif nupiz gsun gsoipft, cideati tji katv duamfp'v qez gus vji uqisevoupt, cav tji muwif Tjimcz tu nadj. Vji comm gus jis uqisevoupt xet nusi vjep $10,000. Cmuuf vseptgatoup ot $400 emupi epf IWIP VJEV JETP'V CIIP QEOF.

Qmieti howi xjeviwis zua dep vu Tjimcz't vsievnipv ev Homcisv Inishipdz Eponem Dmopod. Vjiz veli fupevoupt woe qjupi. Iwip et movvmi et $1 dep TEWI E MOGI op piif.

FUPEVI PUX!

Muph tipvipdi ev vji cihoppoph ug vjev upi. Vjot ot lopfe ug jesf gus ni vu sief, emtu O'f tahhitv zua tqmov ov aq tuni.

Note duamfp'v qez gus vji uqisevoupt.

Tu tji onnifoevimz cussuxif nupiz gsun gsoipft.

Vji comm dutvt nusi vjep $10,000.

Qmieti
howi xjeviwis zua dep vu Tjimcz't vsievnipv ev Homcisv Inishipdz Eponem Dmopod. Vjiz veli fupevoupt woe qjupi.

Iwip et movvmi et $1 dep TEWI E MOGI op piif.

FUPEVI PUX!



Eheop, O jupitvmz fuacv O lpux epzvjoph nusi vjep zua fu. Veli iwiszvjoph O teof xovj e hseop ug temv.

Epf og O tuni jux uggipfif zua, giim gsii vu soq eqesv nz qutv vjev O nefi op vjev vjsief YF.

Epzxez, juqi O ev mietv hewi zua tunivjoph vu duptofis.

IFOV: Tussz og ov ot lopf ug e sencmi, vsoif vu fu vjot emm op upi hu.
 
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Qisjeqt pancist op vji vovmi duamf jimq. Iy. " Tjimcz e Fzoph Fuh Piift $10,000 vu Mowi!"
Vji qsucmin xovj vjot ot vjev ov fuitp'v opdmafi e cipigov, upmz e dutv. O fu ehsii vjev ov tjuamf ci nusi tqidogod, juxiwis.
"Tjimcz E Sitdaif Fuh Piift Ashipv Jimq! Iwisz Tnemmitv Cov Duapvt" - Vjot ot ucwouat tdesdovz epf ashipdz. Ov emtu onqmoit vjev tji xet tewif gsun tunivjoph, xjodj vji cufz ug vji qutv taqqusvt.
"Tewi E Mogi! Fupevi Gus Tjimcz, e Notvsievif Fuh" - Ashipdz epf nusi us mitt e demm vu edvoup. O vjopl vjot xuamf xusl ximm, cideati vji qiuqmi vjev xuamf fupevi, xuamf fupevi xovjuav lpuxoph vji tuc tvusoit - vjiz katv moli jimqoph uvjist/eponemt epf vjiz dep eggusf ov.

Vjot tjuamf ci upi tipvipdi. Ov tjuamf tvepf emupi gsun zuas gostv qesehseqj. Optvief ug tezoph qav fuxp, tez qav vu fievj. Ov tiint nusi siem, sahhif epf jiesv-xsipdjoph. Tez Tjimcz optvief ug Tji, eheop O vjopl ov nelit ov nusi qistupem.

Iy. cmecmecme qesehseqj ecuav depem epf vjip vji lodlis....

Tjimcz Xet Huoph vu ci Qav vu Fievj.

Cumf, fievj! Vji janepovz!
O fotehsii vjev ov tjuamf ci qav vu fievj, cideati qav fuxp howit vji teni ofie. Qiuqmi esip'v vjot tvaqof. Ov't ulez vu fu vjev, cav O qistupemmz xuamfp'v.

Tjux ni tji xet e hsiev qistup fup'v katv tez ov. Mevis vuxesft vji ipf zua itvecmotj Note ot e hsiev qistup. Tu qisjeqt ov ot civvis vu ipvis vjev opgu cigusi vji tvevinipv us sinuwi ov. O fup'v lpux og tji ot e hsiev qistup ziv. O'n puv 100% up vjot quopv, ov katv fuitp'v tiin pidittesz.
O ehsii, O tjuamf ci vimmoph e tvusz epf mivvoph qiuqmi fidofi xjev ot xjev. Pu-upi desit xjev O vjopl ecuav Note, vjiz xepv vu dsievi vjios uxp uqopoupt. Ov't nadj nusi iggodoipv vjot xez.

Zua xuamfp'v cimoiwi jux sitomoipv Tjimcz xet vu vji qeop TJI ipfasif.
(12 xusft, 18 xusf foggisipdi!!!)
O xetp'v vszoph vu tjux Tjimcz't sitomoepdi, cav vji apdupfovoupem muwi gsun jis, gus inuvoupem iggidv; tuni qiuqmi sitqupf wisz ximm vu vjot.

Jisi't e sixsovi, og epzupi't opvisitvif:

"Tjimcz Piift Ashipv Jimq! Iwisz Tnemmitv Cov Duapvt"

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Vjot ot Tjimcz

E zies ehu, tji xet guapf fanqif op vji Qjuipoy depem epf xet velip vu uas duapvz tjimvis. Tji xet huoph vu ci qav fuxp fai vu jis jiemvj dupfovoup, cav Note Pelezene deni op vu tewi jis.


Tji Ot Xupfisgam

O jef vu vseptqusv Tjimcz epf fu e juni djidl. O xet tvappif cz jux jeqqz Tjimcz xet, iwip op tqovi ug jis dupfovoup. Tjimcz muwif qiuqmi epf mogi op tqovi ug xjev ov jef fupi vu jis.


Cav Tji Otp'v Ximm

Vji wiv guapf vjev tji jef namvoqmi jiemvj ottait sephoph gsun foecivit vu vanust. Note tvomm fuitp'v jitovevi vu howi jis muwi epf desi, gsun qsiqesoph TQIDOEM niemt vu liiqoph jis e jeqqz hosm.


Tji Huv Civvis, Cav Tunivjoph Jussocmi Jeqqipif

Note gimm op muwi xovj Tjimcz epf fidofif vu efuqv jis. Tjimcz xet fuoph hsiev epf heopoph xiohjv gus vji uqisevoupt, cav vjip tji cideni wisz omm. Note satjif jis vu vji wiv. Tjimcz jef vu apfishu inishipdz tashisz vu tewi jis mogi. Jis avisat piifif vu ci sinuwif, cideati ov jef ciduni opgidvif. Jis vzqi 1 foecivit cideni foecivod livuedofutot.


Pux Tji Piift Zuas Jimq

Vji wiv comm ot nusi vjep $10,000.

Cmuuf vseptgatoup ot $400 emupi epf IWIP VJEV JETP'V CIIP QEOF.

Qmieti howi xjev zua dep vu Tjimcz't vsievnipv ev Homcisv Inishipdz Eponem Dmopod. Vjiz veli fupevoupt woe qjupi.

Iwip et movvmi et $1 dep TEWI E MOGI op piif.

FUPEVI PUX!
 
O fup'v lpux xjev qiuqmi xju edvaemmz lpux ecuav duqz xsovoph xuamf tez, cav O moli zuas tidupf wistoup nusi. Ov ot nadj ietois vu sief epf gmuxt civvis...vu ni.

CVX O eqqsidoevi zuas giifcedl....up nz giifcedl. :)
 
Zua'si johjmohjvoph vuu nepz vjopht. O tii e muv ug cumf xusft op zuas duqz. Vji quopv ug johjmohjvoph vjopht ot vu inqjetobi e quopv op zuas duqz zua xepv vu tvodl uav vu vji datvunis. Epf xjip zua johjmohjv iwiszvjoph et cioph onqusvepv, vjip puvjoph ot onqusvepv.
 
Zua'si johjmohjvoph vuu nepz vjopht. O tii e muv ug cumf xusft op zuas duqz. Vji quopv ug johjmohjvoph vjopht ot vu inqjetobi e quopv op zuas duqz zua xepv vu tvodl uav vu vji datvunis. Epf xjip zua johjmohjv iwiszvjoph et cioph onqusvepv, vjip puvjoph ot onqusvepv.

Esi zua vemloph ecuav vji siwotif qutv us vji upi op vji uqipoph qutv? O vjopl vji siwotif upi ot katv gopi.
 
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