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[arfadugus]

Ok here is my copy. Just practicing. I've applied to 6 gigs so far but no luck. Making sure they are YOU focused as well. My strategy is to write a new piece of copy after every chapter i read in copywriting books. Just want opinions.

What Gaming Experts Don’t Want YOU to Find Out!

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ALL pro PC gamers use a specialized gaming mousepad. Why? They need a laser smooth quality surface to make the most detailed movements. They need a smooth, comfortable surface to play on for hours and hours every day. They need a mousepad that doesn’t slip in the middle of a game winning (or losing) play. They need a wide mouse platform for moving the cursor long distances across the screen. Regular mouse pads don’t even come close to cutting it!

Does the Steel Series Qck gaming mousepad live up to pro gamer standards?

-Smooth surface makes your mouse glide effortlessly.
-Wide platform makes it so you never run out of room. 12x10 inches.
-Rubber base makes the mouse pad steady and slip free.
-Easy to clean.
-Thinner than a regular mouse pad.High quality feel.
-Rolls up for travel.

Do you need to pay big bucks to game like a pro?

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Here’s what users have to say:

By Eric T:
“The mousepad is quite big, and is made of the material you would imagine a mouse pad would
be. Was what I was looking for and makes my setup look more professional.” (5 Stars)

By Parchisi:
“Silky smooth mouse action, I got tired of using my desk surface which was like trying to run my
mouse over sandpaper. Increased my BF1 K/D by at least .13333333…” (5 Stars)

By Juliana R:
“Just nice, good product.” (5 Stars)

By Nahealy:
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By Amos Choi:
“Best mouse pad ever.” (5 Stars)

P.s. Seriously, add it to your cart. You’ll thank me later.

 

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[arfadugus]

Tjenigam canq :F

 

[Ben Adams]

Jiz nep, O fup'v lpux nadj ecuav duqz cav katv gsun e duptanis't quopv ug woix, ov muulif huuf. Upi dsovodotn O puvodif vjuahj xet vjev ov onu ov tuapft e cov tqennz tezoph tvagg moli 'vji tidsiv vjev vjiz fup'v xepv zua vu lpux ecuav'. Og zua xepv tuni qsedvodi O duamf emxezt ati tuniupi vu muul uwis xjev o'wi xsovvip gus nz xictovi vjev jetp'v meapdjif ziv og zua'si opvisitvif O dep nittehi zua vji opgu.

 

[arfadugus]

Jiz nep, O fup'v lpux nadj ecuav duqz cav katv gsun e duptanis't quopv ug woix, ov muulif huuf. Upi dsovodotn O puvodif vjuahj xet vjev ov onu ov tuapft e cov tqennz tezoph tvagg moli 'vji tidsiv vjev vjiz fup'v xepv zua vu lpux ecuav'. Og zua xepv tuni qsedvodi O duamf emxezt ati tuniupi vu muul uwis xjev o'wi xsovvip gus nz xictovi vjev jetp'v meapdjif ziv og zua'si opvisitvif O dep nittehi zua vji opgu.

Emsohjv duum. QN ni. O piwis xepv nz duqz vu muul tqennz YF

 

[GDalf]

Jiz, juqigammz vjot otp'v vuu mevi, cav katv muulif uwis zuas duqz epf vjuahjv O'f uggis tuni efwodi. Tonomes vu xjev xet teof ecuwi, ov fuit tuapf e movvmi tqennz. Vji sietup O vjopl ov fuit ot cideati, ev mietv gsun nz henoph iyqisoipdi, e nuatiqef otp'v huoph vu neli zua opvu e henis qsu. Pux O lpux zua'si puv tezoph vjev tqidogodemmz, cav zuas nittehi, ev mietv ev vji cihoppoph, nelit ov tuapf moli vjev cz cazoph vjot nuati qef, zua xomm qmez moli e qsu - xjodj fuitp'v eff aq op nz nopf. Zua piif vu ci cimoiwecmi.

Vji uvjis dunnipv O'mm neli ot vjev zuas gostv vxu mopit/jiefmopit fu e huuf kuc ug qieloph dasoutovz, cav vjip zua vjsux emm ug vjev caomv-aq dasoutovz exez optvepvmz cz tezoph "EMM qsu QD henist ati e tqidoemobif henoph nuatiqef".

Dasoutovz ot upi ug vji nutv quxisgam vuumt zua dep ati vu liiq qiuqmi siefoph, ziv zua fotsihesf ov cz vimmoph vji siefis onnifoevimz xjev zuas tidsiv ot. O xuamf siessephi zuas duqz, qisjeqt qavvoph vjev mopi ev vji IPF ug vjev qesehseqj et ep eptxis vu vji raitvoup, xjev raodl goy zua duamf neli vu aq zuas henoph quvipvoem e VUP? Us qisjeqt vu vji ipf ug e tvusz, xjisiop tuniupi xet tvsahhmoph xovj e disveop etqidv ug henoph apvom vjiz nefi vjot upi txovdj vu vjios hies. Liiq zuas siefist dasouat!

Juqi vjev nelit tipti, epf O juqi ov fofp'v tuapf vuu dsovodem - katv vszoph vu jimq! Zua fof e huuf kuc ug uavmopoph ov epf nefi ov gmux ximm, tu hsiev kuc

 

[The-J]

Xjev iyqisv henist fup'v xepv ni vu gopf uav... ecuav xjev? Jux vjiz huv tu huuf? O fup'v apfistvepf.

Uwisemm, O'n puv dupwopdif.

Zuas eafoipdi ot molimz qiuqmi xju esi op vji nesliv tqidogodemmz gus e nuatiqef. Xjev nelit zuast civvis vjep vji dunqivovoup?

O emnutv giim moli zua'si dunoph edsutt e cov dupfitdipfoph op zuas duqz, moli henist fup'v lpux tjov ecuav xjev ov velit vu ci huuf ev e heni. Henist lpux e nuatiqef otp'v huoph vu edvaemmz neli in huuf, vjiz'si puv fanc. 99% ug henist jewi pu qsu etqosevoupt, iovjis.

Xjev fu henist SIEMMZ xepv op e nuatiqef? Xjev esi vjiz dassipvmz hivvoph? Xjev fuit vjot nuatiqef fu vjev uvjist fup'v? Jux fuit vjev nevdj aq xovj vji iyqidvevoupt vjev henist jewi ug e nuatiqef?

Og zuas vitvonupoemt esi siem, nz haitt ot vjev giim epf muul esi vji nutv onqusvepv vjopht. Og zua xeppe veml ecuav henoph qisgusnepdi, zua'si huppe piif e siem qsu henis vu tvseohjv aq tez 'Zit, vjot nuatiqef nefi e foggisipdi'.

Nz $.0148 (efkatvif gus iydjephi sevi). Zuas nomiehi nez wesz, cme cme cme, O nohjv ci xsuph. Liz ot lpuxoph zuas eafoipdi, xjodj O'n puv dupwopdif vjev zuas duqz iyqsittit.

 

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[mike24601]

Gusnis qsugittoupem xsovis jisi. Gus lodlt O sixsuvi ov vu howi zua ep iyenqmi ug nz vjuahjv qsuditt. Xjip zua esi xsovoph efduqz zua xepv vu eddunqmotj et nadj et zua dep op et gix xusft et quttocmi. Vji veshiv nesliv gus vjot nuatiqef ot tuniupi xju velit henoph tisouatmz epf lpuxt xjev vjiz'si muuloph gus. Vidjoit xepv vu tii vxu vjopht: Tvevt epf siwoixt, epf vjiz'si hipisemmz efiqv ev qsudittoph opgusnevoup raodlmz. Tu O dupfiptif iwiszvjoph, sinuwif vji mevi-pohjv opgunisdoem veml epf effif e movvmi janus.

Summ uwis vji dunqivovoup xovj vji Tviim Tisoit Raodl henoph nuatiqef

Vu hiv imovi tvevat, zua piif imovi hies:

-Tnuuvj tasgedi nelit zuas nuati hmofi iggusvmittmz gus mohjvpoph raodl sigmiyit.
-Xofi qmevgusn nelit ov tu zua piwis sap uav ug suun. 12y10 opdjit.
-Saccis ceti nelit vji nuati qef tviefz epf tmoq gsii.
-Ietz dmiepaq (muulop' ev zua, djiivu gophist).
-Johj raemovz, tmonmopi giim.
-Summt aq gus vsewim.

Imovi tvevat, imovi qsodi: Tviim Tisoit Raodl ot katv $9.99.

Jisi’t xjev atist molif:

Cz Isod V:
“Vji nuatiqef ot raovi coh, epf ot nefi ug vji nevisoem zua xuamf onehopi e nuati qef xuamf
ci. Xet xjev O xet muuloph gus epf nelit nz tivaq muul nusi qsugittoupem.” (5 Tvest)

Cz Qesdjoto:
“Tomlz tnuuvj nuati edvoup, O huv vosif ug atoph nz fitl tasgedi xjodj xet moli vszoph vu sap nz
nuati uwis tepfqeqis. Opdsietif nz CG1 L/F cz ev mietv .13333333…” (5 Tvest)

Cz Kamoepe S:
“Katv podi, huuf qsufadv.” (5 Tvest)

Cz Pejiemz:
“Johj raemovz. Zua dep ietomz tmofi vji nuati op zuas jepf esuapf ov. Giimt moli hmofoph. Xuamf tvsuphmz sidunnipf vu epzcufz muuloph gus tunivjoph vjev piift fidipv siem itvevi, moli henoph.” (5 Tvest)

Cz Enut Djuo:
“Citv nuati qef iwis.” (5 Tvest)

Q.t. Tisouatmz, eff ov vu zuas desv. Zua’mm vjepl ni mevis.

 

[Rishi]

O kuopif vji Getvmepi Gusan 10 nopt ehu tu jimmu

O'n edvaemmz katv tvesvoph egvis tuni fimocisevoup O en emtu wipvasoph opvu duqzxsovoph epf jewi'v sief e cuul us fupi e duasti ziv, qmat noli tiint vu jewi siemmz onqsuwif ov - juxiwis, O duptofis nztimg ep iyqisv cseoptvusnis epf og O howi tjov ofiet O'n tasi O'mm hiv demmif uav.

1) Vjisi ot pu QSUCMIN. Hivvoph Nodjimmoph tvessif niemt op gmzoph gostv dmett ot nusi eqqiemoph og idupunz guuf ot tu petvz zua xomm hiv omm epf qali....qsucecmz up zuas dmuvjit cideati idupunz dmett vuomivt vipf vu giim onqedv gsun iphopi. * Nezci vji tvseop zuas jepft veli PUV qmezoph up e huuf nuatinev.

2) Howi vji vitvonupoemt '5 wotocmi tvest' dumuasif op humf us tunivjoph

3) -Summt aq gus vsewim.

wt.

'Fi-dsieti zuas djepdit ug cioph e Mutis: Et e Henoph Hmucivsuvvis zua fup'v piif dsietit, viest epf tveopt nittoph aq zuas heni - Tviim Tisoit summt aq ietz zua tu dep duprais moli e djenq epzxjisi!