I've gotten to a point in my project where I need to start putting together some marketing material. I've never had to write anything like this, heck, I havent had to do any creative writing since high school.
I read over SinisterLex's thread and finished Cashvertising, so I thought I would give it a go. I have written 3 pieces. A cold email, and a customer and business landing page.
I would love for some of you copy pros to pick it apart, give me some of you hints and tips on making it better, or maybe just give up and outsource this part? Anyway Here goes nothing.
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Email Subject
Announcing a new web service, built just for auto repair services, directly linking you with customers.
Mr. Shop Owner,
What if I told you I could make it easy for you to directly connect to your new customer? People looking specifically for your business. People with an issue right at this moment. Not just everyone listening to a radio ad, or flipping pages in the free paper, or seeing your logo sponsoring the morning news report. But people who are actually looking to spend money, in your shop, today.
*Business Name* does just that. The *Business Name* platform is built specifically for the auto repair business, your auto repair business, to link your business with potential customers who are actuallly seeking out your service today.
With a super simple interface, it takes very little time to learn and resembles systems you already have in place. Customers enter their vehicle info and whatever their concerns may be, allowing you to actually send them a detailed estimate for getting their work done at your shop.
Let's be honest, there are times when you have paid staff standing around, why not put them to work marketing your business? With how quick and simple the *Business Name* system is, it takes only a couple of seconds to reach out to your next potential customer.
Did I mention the cost? With *Business Name* you don't pay a thing until we deliver. Not until a customer has agreed that you're their choice for service do we ask anything for you. It costs you nothing to get started and see just how simple the *Business Name* system is.
Don't just take my word though. I've set up a little, sneak peak demo specifically for your business. Just follow the link and enter the login details. See just how easy it is to connect with your next customer.
Demo Link
Username
password
Looking for more information on how we can help your business visit
Busienss Landing Page Link
I'll be following up with you in a couple days to get your shop all signed up and get *Business Name* working for you.
Sincerely,
*name*
*email signature*
I read over SinisterLex's thread and finished Cashvertising, so I thought I would give it a go. I have written 3 pieces. A cold email, and a customer and business landing page.
I would love for some of you copy pros to pick it apart, give me some of you hints and tips on making it better, or maybe just give up and outsource this part? Anyway Here goes nothing.
---------------------
Email Subject
Announcing a new web service, built just for auto repair services, directly linking you with customers.
Mr. Shop Owner,
What if I told you I could make it easy for you to directly connect to your new customer? People looking specifically for your business. People with an issue right at this moment. Not just everyone listening to a radio ad, or flipping pages in the free paper, or seeing your logo sponsoring the morning news report. But people who are actually looking to spend money, in your shop, today.
*Business Name* does just that. The *Business Name* platform is built specifically for the auto repair business, your auto repair business, to link your business with potential customers who are actuallly seeking out your service today.
With a super simple interface, it takes very little time to learn and resembles systems you already have in place. Customers enter their vehicle info and whatever their concerns may be, allowing you to actually send them a detailed estimate for getting their work done at your shop.
Let's be honest, there are times when you have paid staff standing around, why not put them to work marketing your business? With how quick and simple the *Business Name* system is, it takes only a couple of seconds to reach out to your next potential customer.
Did I mention the cost? With *Business Name* you don't pay a thing until we deliver. Not until a customer has agreed that you're their choice for service do we ask anything for you. It costs you nothing to get started and see just how simple the *Business Name* system is.
Don't just take my word though. I've set up a little, sneak peak demo specifically for your business. Just follow the link and enter the login details. See just how easy it is to connect with your next customer.
Demo Link
Username
password
Looking for more information on how we can help your business visit
Busienss Landing Page Link
I'll be following up with you in a couple days to get your shop all signed up and get *Business Name* working for you.
Sincerely,
*name*
*email signature*
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