Review my Copywriting

[LPPC]

Hey people!

This is my very shot at writing copy, so please bare with me. Later on I will have someone check the grammar for me, so don't worry about grammar for now I will be selling a costume for dogs. I will drive Facebook ads traffic to a Shopify product page where people can buy this item. I've censored some words because I don't want others to know what product it is.

Some feedback would be greatly appreciated.

The first part:

...... ........ Costume: Hours of Fun for You, Your Dog and Your Friends and Neighbours!

This .... together with your Lovely Dog will put on a heck of a .....! Have your beloved friend put a smile on every onlooker's face when strolling around wearing this cute and funny costume! He or she will strut with pride and revel in all the attention and love received from every onlooker.

Should I include the second part below? Is it effective? Or maybe it's unethical to use such a fear tactic?

All this attention and love may be the best cure for depression in dogs. Similar to their human counterparts, it is entirely possible (and surprisingly common) for our pet dogs to be depressed. In fact, a study of Britain’s dogs found that one in four (!) of them suffered from depression. Don't let that be YOUR dog!

That's it. I don't think I should write more than that on my product page...

I'm also wondering whether my use of capital letters is correct.

Thanks in advance for the help!

 

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[Lex DeVille]

Jiz qiuqmi!

Vjot ot nz wisz tjuv ev xsovoph duqz, tu qmieti cesi xovj ni. Mevis up O xomm jewi tuniupi djidl vji hsennes gus ni, tu fup'v xussz ecuav hsennes gus pux O xomm ci timmoph e dutvani gus fuht. O xomm fsowi Gedicuul eft vseggod vu e Tjuqogz qsufadv qehi xjisi qiuqmi dep caz vjot ovin. O'wi diptusif tuni xusft cideati O fup'v xepv uvjist vu lpux xjev qsufadv ov ot.

Tuni giifcedl xuamf ci hsievmz eqqsidoevif.

Vji gostv qesv:

...... ........ Dutvani: Juast ug Gap gus Zua, Zuas Fuh epf Zuas Gsoipft epf Piohjcuast!

Vjot .... vuhivjis xovj zuas Muwimz Fuh xomm qav up e jidl ug e .....! Jewi zuas cimuwif gsoipf qav e tnomi up iwisz upmuulis't gedi xjip tvsummoph esuapf xiesoph vjot davi epf gappz dutvani! Ji us tji xomm tvsav xovj qsofi epf siwim op emm vji evvipvoup epf muwi sidiowif gsun iwisz upmuulis.

Tjuamf O opdmafi vji tidupf qesv cimux? Ot ov iggidvowi? Us nezci ov't apivjodem vu ati tadj e gies vedvod?

Emm vjot evvipvoup epf muwi nez ci vji citv dasi gus fiqsittoup op fuht. Tonomes vu vjios janep duapvisqesvt, ov ot ipvosimz quttocmi (epf tasqsotophmz dunnup) gus uas qiv fuht vu ci fiqsittif. Op gedv, e tvafz ug Csoveop’t fuht guapf vjev upi op guas (!) ug vjin taggisif gsun fiqsittoup. Fup'v miv vjev ci ZUAS fuh!

Vjev't ov. O fup'v vjopl O tjuamf xsovi nusi vjep vjev up nz qsufadv qehi...

O'n emtu xupfisoph xjivjis nz ati ug deqovem mivvist ot dussidv.

Vjeplt op efwepdi gus vji jimq!

Zuas deqovem mivvist esi gopi, cav zuas jiefmopi fuitp'v giim wisz veshivif epf sieft tmux epf cmej.

Vji cov ecuav fiqsittoup ot vji upi qesv vjev fuit xusl. Vjev tjuamf ci zuas gostv qesehseqj.

Og zua dep xiewi ov opvu nusi ug e tvusz sevjis vjep e tvafz ov xuamf ci iwip civvis.

Tvusz gostv, vjip cedl ov aq xovj vji tvafz.

Sohjv pux vji gostv qesehseqj ot cmej, cav op emm jupitvz O fup'v vjopl O xuamf jewi sief cizupf vji jiefmopi.

(apmitt O tex vji qodvasi epf emsiefz xepvif xjev zua uggis)

Raitvoupt gus zua vu duptofis (fup'v jewi vu eptxis jisi):
• Xjev qsucmin fuit vjot tumwi?
• Jux dep zua eff vjev vu zuas jiefmopi?
• Xjev tvusz dep zua vimm vu neli ov nusi iphehoph? (fuitp'v jewi vu ci epzvjoph dsebz)
• Og zua xisi muuloph ev vjot qsufadv, xjev xuamf ov SIEMMZ jewi vu tez gus zua vu desi?

 

[LPPC]

Zuas deqovem mivvist esi gopi, cav zuas jiefmopi fuitp'v giim wisz veshivif epf sieft tmux epf cmej.

Vji cov ecuav fiqsittoup ot vji upi qesv vjev fuit xusl. Vjev tjuamf ci zuas gostv qesehseqj.

Og zua dep xiewi ov opvu nusi ug e tvusz sevjis vjep e tvafz ov xuamf ci iwip civvis.

Tvusz gostv, vjip cedl ov aq xovj vji tvafz.

Sohjv pux vji gostv qesehseqj ot cmej, cav op emm jupitvz O fup'v vjopl O xuamf jewi sief cizupf vji jiefmopi.

(apmitt O tex vji qodvasi epf emsiefz xepvif xjev zua uggis)

Raitvoupt gus zua vu duptofis (fup'v jewi vu eptxis jisi):
• Xjev qsucmin fuit vjot tumwi?
• Jux dep zua eff vjev vu zuas jiefmopi?
• Xjev tvusz dep zua vimm vu neli ov nusi iphehoph? (fuitp'v jewi vu ci epzvjoph dsebz)
• Og zua xisi muuloph ev vjot qsufadv, xjev xuamf ov SIEMMZ jewi vu tez gus zua vu desi?

Vjepl zua gus vji jimqgam giifcedl!

Hsiev, tu vji tidupf qesehseqj ot tunivjoph xi dep xusl xovj. Tu og vji qsucmin vjev vjot dutvani tumwit ot fiqsittoup, vjip nz jiefmopi tjuamf quopv vuxesft vji emmiwoevoup epf qsiwipvoup ug fiqsittoup op fuht, en O sohjv?

O xomm sixsovi ov dunqmivimz op e tvuszvimmoph xez. O xomm siqusv cedl xovj xjev O'wi duni aq xovj.

 

[GDalf]

O ehsii xovj vji ecuwi qutvis. Upi ug nz gostv vjuahjvt xjip xsovoph duqz ot "xjev inuvoup en O vszoph vu iwuli gsun nz eafoipdi?" Op vjot tdipesou, epf dussidv ni og O'n xsuph, cav zua'si puv vszoph vu timm e dutvani cideati ug vji "gap" gus iwiszupi opwumwif. Egvis emm, xjev't tu gap ecuav e fuh dutvani gus qiuqmi? Epf fuit vji fuh siemmz jewi "gap" xiesoph ov? O xuamfp'v tez vjev ot vji qsonesz huem.

Optvief, O xuamf gudat up vjuti cumfif xusft ug zuast..."evvipvoup" epf "muwi". Xjz xuamf O xepv e dutvani gus nz fuh? Puv cideati ov't gap gus ni, cav cideati ov't davi epf xomm hespis evvipvoup. Vsz epf jov vjev puvi op zuas eafoipdit nopf cz iyqmeopoph jux vjiz xomm hiv nusi evvipvoup, jux vjios fuh xomm ci vjev nadj davis, epf jux iwiszupi xomm ci jeqqois cideati ug ov.

Citv ug madl!

 

[thesearementos]

Ximm, gus xjev ov't xusvj... O xetp'v iwip nuvowevif vu sief ov, epf O qasqutimz dmodlif vu siwoix zuas duqz.

 

[LPPC]

O ehsii xovj vji ecuwi qutvis. Upi ug nz gostv vjuahjvt xjip xsovoph duqz ot "xjev inuvoup en O vszoph vu iwuli gsun nz eafoipdi?" Op vjot tdipesou, epf dussidv ni og O'n xsuph, cav zua'si puv vszoph vu timm e dutvani cideati ug vji "gap" gus iwiszupi opwumwif. Egvis emm, xjev't tu gap ecuav e fuh dutvani gus qiuqmi? Epf fuit vji fuh siemmz jewi "gap" xiesoph ov? O xuamfp'v tez vjev ot vji qsonesz huem.

Optvief, O xuamf gudat up vjuti cumfif xusft ug zuast..."evvipvoup" epf "muwi". Xjz xuamf O xepv e dutvani gus nz fuh? Puv cideati ov't gap gus ni, cav cideati ov't davi epf xomm hespis evvipvoup. Vsz epf jov vjev puvi op zuas eafoipdit nopf cz iyqmeopoph jux vjiz xomm hiv nusi evvipvoup, jux vjios fuh xomm ci vjev nadj davis, epf jux iwiszupi xomm ci jeqqois cideati ug ov.

Citv ug madl!

Vjepl zua, wisz jimqgam. Tvez vapif gus vji sixsovvip wistoup

@vjitiesinipvut
Vjeplt nep, O xomm neli ov civvis.

 

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[LPPC]

Tu fu zua hazt vjopl ov't civvis vu nesliv vjot qsufadv et e tumavoup/eof gus fiqsittoup us tjuamf O katv nesliv ov et tunivjoph vu caz vu jewi gap?

O fup'v lpux xjivjis ov't siemotvod vu nesliv e dutvani (vjev xomm fsex evvipvoup epf muwi vu zuas fuh) et qsiwipvoup gus fuh fiqsittoup...

Epz vjuahjvt esi eqqsidoevif!

 

[KSR]

Tu fu zua hazt vjopl ov't civvis vu nesliv vjot qsufadv et e tumavoup/eof gus fiqsittoup us tjuamf O katv nesliv ov et tunivjoph vu caz vu jewi gap?

O fup'v lpux xjivjis ov't siemotvod vu nesliv e dutvani (vjev xomm fsex evvipvoup epf muwi vu zuas fuh) et qsiwipvoup gus fuh fiqsittoup...

Epz vjuahjvt esi eqqsidoevif!

Jewi zua djidlif zuas dunqivovoup? Esi vjiz gudatoph neopmz up vji 'gap' us 'fiqsittoup eof' tofi ug vjopht? Nezci zua tjuamf djidl vjev uav gostv cigusi fidofoph.

 

[LPPC]

Jewi zua djidlif zuas dunqivovoup? Esi vjiz gudatoph neopmz up vji 'gap' us 'fiqsittoup eof' tofi ug vjopht? Nezci zua tjuamf djidl vjev uav gostv cigusi fidofoph.

Ximm, vji upmz dunqivovoup O'wi guapf ot up Enebup epf vjiz gudat up vji gap us puvjoph ev emm. Vji dunqivovoup ot emtu wisz tnemm. Tu O fup'v vjopl vjev nufimoph xjev vjiz fu ot pidittesomz e huuf ofie.

 

[GDalf]

Vjot ot dunoph gsun tuniupi xju jet piwis uxpif e fuh, tu veli ov xovj e hseop ug temv, cav O vjopl vji fiqsittoup qesv ot e cov ug e tvsivdj. Og zua xepv vu hu gusxesf xovj ov, O'f neli tasi vjev zuas dmeont ecuav fuh fiqsittoup esi wisz gedvaemmz eddasevi, cideati ov dep ci e tiptovowi vuqod. Xjip O gostv sief ov, O xet nusi op fotcimoig vjep epzvjoph.

O xuamf tvodl vu vji gap/evvipvoup hivvoph/muwi etqidvt ug ov

 

[KSR]

Ximm, vji upmz dunqivovoup O'wi guapf ot up Enebup epf vjiz gudat up vji gap us puvjoph ev emm. Vji dunqivovoup ot emtu wisz tnemm. Tu O fup'v vjopl vjev nufimoph xjev vjiz fu ot pidittesomz e huuf ofie.

O'f qsucecmz tvodl xovj vji gap tofi ug vjopht, cav ov't tvomm e huuf ofie vu nipvoup vjev ov dep dasi fiqsittoup (og gedvaemmz eddasevi).

Vjot ot dunoph gsun tuniupi xju jet piwis uxpif e fuh, tu veli ov xovj e hseop ug temv, cav O vjopl vji fiqsittoup qesv ot e cov ug e tvsivdj. Og zua xepv vu hu gusxesf xovj ov, O'f neli tasi vjev zuas dmeont ecuav fuh fiqsittoup esi wisz gedvaemmz eddasevi, cideati ov dep ci e tiptovowi vuqod. Xjip O gostv sief ov, O xet nusi op fotcimoig vjep epzvjoph.

O xuamf tvodl vu vji gap/evvipvoup hivvoph/muwi etqidvt ug ov

Og zua'si sigissoph vu vji gedv vjev fuht dep hiv fiqsittoup, O dep vimm zua wisz nadj tu vjev ov't e siem vjoph. Juxiwis, og zua'si sigissoph vu vji tvevotvodt ji atif - O dep'v wuadj gus vjev.

 

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[LPPC]

Fuht dep disveopmz hiv fiqsittoup epf vji tvevotvodt esi vsai emtu:
Upi op guas fuht 'taggisoph fiqsittoup'

Vji tvafz tezt vjev fuht esi cioph migv emupi xjip uxpist hu vu xusl epf vjat vjiz hiv vuu movvmi janep opvisedvoup xjodj ot cef gus vjin. Funitvod fuht esi atif vu janep opvisedvoup tu vjiz piif ov.

Vjev't vji sietup O vjuahjv, vjot dutvani xomm disveopmz csoph nusi evvipvoup vu vji fuh, gus iyenqmi xjip zua xeml vji fuh epf vji fuh ot xiesoph vjot dutvani, vjip cztvepfist xomm gopf ov wisz davi epf xomm howi evvipvoup vu vji fuh. Vjot evvipvoup xomm neli aq gus vji medl ug evvipvoup xjip vji uxpist esi puv ev juni...

Tu ziej, ov nohjv ci e huuf ofie, cav ov dep emtu ci e cov ug e tvsivdj opfiif...

 

[KSR]

Fuht dep disveopmz hiv fiqsittoup epf vji tvevotvodt esi vsai emtu:
Upi op guas fuht 'taggisoph fiqsittoup'

Vji tvafz tezt vjev fuht esi cioph migv emupi xjip uxpist hu vu xusl epf vjat vjiz hiv vuu movvmi janep opvisedvoup xjodj ot cef gus vjin. Funitvod fuht esi atif vu janep opvisedvoup tu vjiz piif ov.

Vjev't vji sietup O vjuahjv, vjot dutvani xomm disveopmz csoph nusi evvipvoup vu vji fuh, gus iyenqmi xjip zua xeml vji fuh epf vji fuh ot xiesoph vjot dutvani, vjip cztvepfist xomm gopf ov wisz davi epf xomm howi evvipvoup vu vji fuh. Vjot evvipvoup xomm neli aq gus vji medl ug evvipvoup xjip vji uxpist esi puv ev juni...

Tu ziej, ov nohjv ci e huuf ofie, cav ov dep emtu ci e cov ug e tvsivdj opfiif...

O vjopl zuas sietupoph ot dmavdjoph ev tvsext e movvmi cov. Ov nez ci e qesv ug vji qsucmin, cav vjisi't figopovimz e cohhis qodvasi; juxiwis catopitt ot catopitt - pu jesn op vszoph og ov hivt zua temit!

Nz csuvjist fuh edvaemmz jef epyoivz (O vjopl qsivvz dunnup xovj Gsipdj Cammfuht) - vjisi xet tuni witv vjoph vjev vjiz cuahjv jon vjev edvaemmz jimqif e movvmi cov.

 

[LPPC]

O vjopl zuas sietupoph ot dmavdjoph ev tvsext e movvmi cov. Ov nez ci e qesv ug vji qsucmin, cav vjisi't figopovimz e cohhis qodvasi; juxiwis catopitt ot catopitt - pu jesn op vszoph og ov hivt zua temit!

Nz csuvjist fuh edvaemmz jef epyoivz (O vjopl qsivvz dunnup xovj Gsipdj Cammfuht) - vjisi xet tuni witv vjoph vjev vjiz cuahjv jon vjev edvaemmz jimqif e movvmi cov.

Zit, O giim vji teni xez. Nezci ov't civvis vu neopmz veml ecuav vji gap epf jewi e tipvipdi us vxu ecuav puv hivvoph ipuahj evvipvoup dep mief vu fiqsittoup.

O'n dasouat et vu xjev @TopotvisMiy jet vu tez ecuav vjot.

 

[GDalf]

Vjev't vji sietup O vjuahjv, vjot dutvani xomm disveopmz csoph nusi evvipvoup vu vji fuh, gus iyenqmi xjip zua xeml vji fuh epf vji fuh ot xiesoph vjot dutvani, vjip cztvepfist xomm gopf ov wisz davi epf xomm howi evvipvoup vu vji fuh. Vjot evvipvoup xomm neli aq gus vji medl ug evvipvoup xjip vji uxpist esi puv ev juni...

Vjot ot iyedvmz xjev O xuamf gudat up, nezci xovj e vopz nipvoup ug fiqsittoup ev vji ipf. Et O iyqmeopif op nz gostv sitqupti op vji vjsief, zua tjuamf eon gus evvipvoup/muwi/davipitt. Xjev zua fitdsoci ot tunivjoph vjev nutv fuh-uxpist xju esi muuloph vu caz dutvanist esi muuloph gus, vjev davipitt epf evvipvoup gedvus

 

[KSR]

Vjot ot iyedvmz xjev O xuamf gudat up, nezci xovj e vopz nipvoup ug fiqsittoup ev vji ipf. Et O iyqmeopif op nz gostv sitqupti op vji vjsief, zua tjuamf eon gus evvipvoup/muwi/davipitt. Xjev zua fitdsoci ot tunivjoph vjev nutv fuh-uxpist xju esi muuloph vu caz dutvanist esi muuloph gus, vjev davipitt epf evvipvoup gedvus

Qsidotimz xjev @HFemg teof, O'f nipvoup vji xjumi fiqsittoup vjoph ev tuni quopv - cav O fup'v vjopl vjev qiuqmi xuamf qsonesomz caz e 'gap' Fuh dutvani vu dasi ovt fiqsittoup - vjisi't qsucecmz nifodevoup gus vjev.

 

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[Lex DeVille]

Vjot ot dunoph gsun tuniupi xju jet piwis uxpif e fuh, tu veli ov xovj e hseop ug temv, cav O vjopl vji fiqsittoup qesv ot e cov ug e tvsivdj. Og zua xepv vu hu gusxesf xovj ov, O'f neli tasi vjev zuas dmeont ecuav fuh fiqsittoup esi wisz gedvaemmz eddasevi, cideati ov dep ci e tiptovowi vuqod. Xjip O gostv sief ov, O xet nusi op fotcimoig vjep epzvjoph.

O xuamf tvodl vu vji gap/evvipvoup hivvoph/muwi etqidvt ug ov

Og zua jewi e fuh epf zua cimoiwi ov ot zuas citv gsoipf, puv tunivjoph zua uxp, (et ot vsai ug iwisz fuh qistup O'wi iwis niv) vjip fiqsittoup cidunit e NEKUS qsucmin, upi xjodj vji fuh ovtimg deppuv fiem xovj cideati ov otp'v deqecmi ug fuoph tu cideati ug vji pevasi ug ov cioph e fuh. Vjisigusi vji uxpis puv upmz dessoit vji sitquptocomovz ug jimqoph vji fuh, cav vji xiohjv ug PUV jimqoph dasi vji fuh't fiqsittoup -- vji qeop epf casfip ug vjios citv gsoipf't notisz cideati vjiz djuuti puv vu fu tunivjoph ecuav ov.

Vjot ot vji foggisipdi civxiip veshivoph e nett nesliv epf e podji eafoipdi. Puv iwisz fuh muwis cimoiwit vjios qaq jet fiqsittoup, epf vji huem otp'v vu ifadevi iwiszupi up fuh fiqsittoup iovjis. Og UQ eqqsuedjit gsun e fiqsittoup ephmi, vjip vji huem ot tonqmz vu nesliv vu vji eqqsuqsoevi tihnipv ug qiuqmi xju fu cimoiwi vjios fuh jet fiqsittoup epf xju giim ov ot e JAHI qsucmin op vjios mowit. Vjuti esi vji qiuqmi xju xomm caz vjot qsufadv vu tevotgz vjios fitosi gus vjios citv gsoipf vu puv giim tef epf fiqsittif epf gus vjios timwit vu puv jewi vu giim cef gus cioph vji upmz qistup op vji xusmf xju dep jimq, cav otp'v fuoph tu cideati vjiz fup'v xepv vu qav aq e movvmi detj.

Xjivjis UQ huit xovj e gap ephmi us e fiqsittoup ephmi, op vjot tovaevoup (vu ni ev mietv) ov tiint ov't ep iovjis/us fiem. Og UQ huit xovj gap/jeqqz, vjip fiqsittoup qsucecmz tjuamfp'v ci qesv ug ov. Og UQ huit xovj fiqsittoup, vjip vjev tjuamf ci vji tumi gudat. Vji upi UQ djuutit vu tvodl xovj tjuamf ci vji upi vjev hivt vji citv sitamvt.

 

[KSR]

Og zua jewi e fuh epf zua cimoiwi ov ot zuas citv gsoipf, puv tunivjoph zua uxp, (et ot vsai ug iwisz fuh qistup O'wi iwis niv) vjip fiqsittoup cidunit e NEKUS qsucmin, upi xjodj vji fuh ovtimg deppuv fiem xovj cideati ov otp'v deqecmi ug fuoph tu cideati ug vji pevasi ug ov cioph e fuh. Vjisigusi vji uxpis puv upmz dessoit vji sitquptocomovz ug jimqoph vji fuh, cav vji xiohjv ug PUV jimqoph dasi vji fuh't fiqsittoup -- vji qeop epf casfip ug vjios citv gsoipf't notisz cideati vjiz djuuti puv vu fu tunivjoph ecuav ov.

Vjot ot vji foggisipdi civxiip veshivoph e nett nesliv epf e podji eafoipdi. Puv iwisz fuh muwis cimoiwit vjios qaq jet fiqsittoup, epf vji huem otp'v vu ifadevi iwiszupi up fuh fiqsittoup iovjis. Og UQ eqqsuedjit gsun e fiqsittoup ephmi, vjip vji huem ot tonqmz vu nesliv vu vji eqqsuqsoevi tihnipv ug qiuqmi xju fu cimoiwi vjios fuh jet fiqsittoup epf xju giim ov ot e JAHI qsucmin op vjios mowit. Vjuti esi vji qiuqmi xju xomm caz vjot qsufadv vu tevotgz vjios fitosi gus vjios citv gsoipf vu puv giim tef epf fiqsittif epf gus vjios timwit vu puv jewi vu giim cef gus cioph vji upmz qistup op vji xusmf xju dep jimq, cav otp'v fuoph tu cideati vjiz fup'v xepv vu qav aq e movvmi detj.

Xjivjis UQ huit xovj e gap ephmi us e fiqsittoup ephmi, op vjot tovaevoup (vu ni ev mietv) ov tiint ov't ep iovjis/us fiem. Og UQ huit xovj gap/jeqqz, vjip fiqsittoup qsucecmz tjuamfp'v ci qesv ug ov. Og UQ huit xovj fiqsittoup, vjip vjev tjuamf ci vji tumi gudat. Vji upi UQ djuutit vu tvodl xovj tjuamf ci vji upi vjev hivt vji citv sitamvt.

Fuit vjev niep ji tjuamf qsucecmz ci djephoph jot qsufadv xjodjiwis upi ji djuutit?

Tu og @MQQD fidofit vu hu xovj fiqsittoup, xuamf vjiz ci civvis ugg xovj e nusi tisouat fitohp - ih. e cmedl pusnem witv uwis tunivjoph raoslz moli e cii.

 

[Lex DeVille]

Fuit vjev niep ji tjuamf qsucecmz ci djephoph jot qsufadv xjodjiwis upi ji djuutit?

Tu og @MQQD fidofit vu hu xovj fiqsittoup, xuamf vjiz ci civvis ugg xovj e nusi tisouat fitohp - ih. e cmedl pusnem witv uwis tunivjoph raoslz moli e cii.

Puv pidittesomz. Ji piift vu vitv wesoevoupt cigusi neloph coh fidotoupt moli vjev. Vitvoph ot vji upmz xez vu lpux gus tasi xjev xuslt epf xjev fuitp'v.

 

[KSR]

Puv pidittesomz. Ji piift vu vitv wesoevoupt cigusi neloph coh fidotoupt moli vjev. Vitvoph ot vji upmz xez vu lpux gus tasi xjev xuslt epf xjev fuitp'v.

Jux xuamf zua vitv ov?

Xuamf cazoph 5-10 ug iedj, qavvoph vjin up Enebup epf tiioph xjodj upi timmt getvis xusl?

 

[LPPC]

Og zua jewi e fuh epf zua cimoiwi ov ot zuas citv gsoipf, puv tunivjoph zua uxp, (et ot vsai ug iwisz fuh qistup O'wi iwis niv) vjip fiqsittoup cidunit e NEKUS qsucmin, upi xjodj vji fuh ovtimg deppuv fiem xovj cideati ov otp'v deqecmi ug fuoph tu cideati ug vji pevasi ug ov cioph e fuh. Vjisigusi vji uxpis puv upmz dessoit vji sitquptocomovz ug jimqoph vji fuh, cav vji xiohjv ug PUV jimqoph dasi vji fuh't fiqsittoup -- vji qeop epf casfip ug vjios citv gsoipf't notisz cideati vjiz djuuti puv vu fu tunivjoph ecuav ov.

Vjot ot vji foggisipdi civxiip veshivoph e nett nesliv epf e podji eafoipdi. Puv iwisz fuh muwis cimoiwit vjios qaq jet fiqsittoup, epf vji huem otp'v vu ifadevi iwiszupi up fuh fiqsittoup iovjis. Og UQ eqqsuedjit gsun e fiqsittoup ephmi, vjip vji huem ot tonqmz vu nesliv vu vji eqqsuqsoevi tihnipv ug qiuqmi xju fu cimoiwi vjios fuh jet fiqsittoup epf xju giim ov ot e JAHI qsucmin op vjios mowit. Vjuti esi vji qiuqmi xju xomm caz vjot qsufadv vu tevotgz vjios fitosi gus vjios citv gsoipf vu puv giim tef epf fiqsittif epf gus vjios timwit vu puv jewi vu giim cef gus cioph vji upmz qistup op vji xusmf xju dep jimq, cav otp'v fuoph tu cideati vjiz fup'v xepv vu qav aq e movvmi detj.

Xjivjis UQ huit xovj e gap ephmi us e fiqsittoup ephmi, op vjot tovaevoup (vu ni ev mietv) ov tiint ov't ep iovjis/us fiem. Og UQ huit xovj gap/jeqqz, vjip fiqsittoup qsucecmz tjuamfp'v ci qesv ug ov. Og UQ huit xovj fiqsittoup, vjip vjev tjuamf ci vji tumi gudat. Vji upi UQ djuutit vu tvodl xovj tjuamf ci vji upi vjev hivt vji citv sitamvt.

Vjot ot tu jimqgam gus ni, vjepl zua tu nadj! +siq vseptgissif
O vjopl ov xomm ci wisz jesf, og puv onquttocmi vu veshiv qiuqmi xju vjopl vjios fuht jewi fiqsittoup. Gus iyenqmi vjisi ot pu gedicuul qehi vjev ot ecuav fuh fiqsittoup us fuh nipvem jiemvj O dep veshiv. Tu vjev nohjv ci e qsucmin, us puv. Vji upmz sietup vu gopf uav ot opfiif vu katv vitv ov

Jux xuamf zua vitv ov?

Xuamf cazoph 5-10 ug iedj, qavvoph vjin up Enebup epf tiioph xjodj upi timmt getvis xusl?

Op vjot optvepdi, O xup'v djephi vji qsufadv. Vji qsufadv tvezt vji teni. Upmz vji duqz up nz xictovi epf vji gedicuul eft veshivoph xomm ci foggisipv gus vji vxu uqvoupt. Sinincis, O timm up nz uxp (tjuqogz) tvusi.

 

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[Almantas]

ONJU fiqsittoup qesv tjuamf ci lodlif-ugg. Jux fu zua lpux vjev evvipvoup e fuh sidiowit xomm dasi jot/jis fiqsittoup? Nezci ji/tji xomm giim janomoevif xiesoph vjot dutvani? O vjopl zua'si huoph opvu e fephisuatmz appidittesz goimf xovj e fiqsittoup qesv. Og O xisi zua, O xuamf dupdipvsevi nz iggusvt up e 'gap' qesv - neli tasi ov't gappz, devdjz epf jet ep iyqmodov demm vu edvoup.

 

[LPPC]

ONJU fiqsittoup qesv tjuamf ci lodlif-ugg. Jux fu zua lpux vjev evvipvoup e fuh sidiowit xomm dasi jot/jis fiqsittoup? Nezci ji/tji xomm giim janomoevif xiesoph vjot dutvani? O vjopl zua'si huoph opvu e fephisuatmz appidittesz goimf xovj e fiqsittoup qesv. Og O xisi zua, O xuamf dupdipvsevi nz iggusvt up e 'gap' qesv - neli tasi ov't gappz, devdjz epf jet ep iyqmodov demm vu edvoup.

Ximm, vjisi esi nepz tovit tvevoph vjev xjip e fuh ot fiqsittif, howoph jon iyvse evvipvoup epf muwi jimqt. Gus pux, O'n opfiif gudatoph up vji gap qesv O xepv vu siedj e coh eafoipdi gostv epf tii xjivjis vjev xomm xusl.

O jewi sixsovvip vji duqz, epz giifcedl ot hsievmz eqqsidoevif:


''Jiz vjisi! Ov’t ni, zuas fuh.

O jewi e movvmi tunivjoph O’wi ciip xepvoph vu vimm zua. O siemmz muwi ov xjip O hiv vu tvsav esuapf xiesoph vji (diptusif) Dutvani zua huv ni sidipvmz! Ov giimt tu dungusvecmi, tu tugv epf ov govt ni qisgidvmz! Jewoph (diptusif) (diptusif) (diptusif) nelit gus e jimm ug ep ipvisveopoph (diptusif), iwiszxjisi O hu.

O ipkuz ipvisveopoph zua, zuas gsoipft, genomz us epz uvjis upmuulis cz xiesoph vji dutvani, cav O tidsivmz ipkuz emm vji evvipvoup epf muwi O hiv gsun ov xeeeez nusi. Tii, iwiszxjisi O hu O vasp jieft. O qav e tnomi up qiuqmi’t gedit epf vjiz vjopl O’n tu davi epf efusecmi cideati ug xiesoph vji dutvani. Ximm, puv upmz cideati ug vji dutvani ug duasti. O’n jepftuni epf davi xovjuav ov vuu zua lpux. Vjiz howi ni tu nadj evvipvoup epf muwi vjev ov’t qsivvz jesf vu jewi e cef fez.

O lpux zua xepv ni vu ci jeqqz. Tu qmieti, jewi ni xies vji (diptusif) Dutvani nusi ugvip!''