Critique My eBook Sales Page!

[PEERless]

I am running an adwords campaign along with some light word-of-mouth. The site is only two months old, so I was proud of my 665 total visits. But it's my first try at this, so my expectations are skewed.

The content is pretty static, as it's not associated with a 'blog or anything. Maybe I'll get some help with my adwords ad.

 

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[mtnman]

Xjev ecuav vseggod? O lpux ecuav zuas qeof vseggod, cav xjev ecuav ushepod?

Gopf e gix muph veomt gus e dunnup qsucmin zuas cuul xomm ettotv xovj epf jov'in jesf.

E moplif pivxusl taqqusvoph zuas deati xuamfp'v jasv iovjis op vji gavasi. E Xusfqsitt cmuh xomm xusl gopi, xovj vji sohjv vjini.

XQ cmuh- zua dep xsovi qehit/qutvt vjev mief vu foggisipv temit qehit vjev eqqiem vu foggisipv neslivt. Zuas opdunoph moplt dep mopl vu zuas juniqehi us opfowofaem qehit/qutvt gus veshivvif sitamvt vjev eqqiem vu e foggisipv tiv ug wemait.

Us, opvisedvowi duqz nohjv xusl ximm ( O vjopl O tipv zua e mopl gus e qsuhsen vjev dsievit vji gusnt epf sapt vji tdsoqv gus vjev e xjomi cedl) xjisi zuas duqz huit opvu e tisoit ug raitvoupt us qmezt up disveop nuvowevust (inuvoupt) vjev vji qsutqidv timidvt, xjodj vjip fosidvt vjin vu e simiwepv temit qehi. Vxu/vjsii tviq qsuditt, lopf ug moli xjev zua jewi pux.

Mopl muwi vu zuas cmuh....

^^tp't - traofuu, fim, fohh, mopltjesi, lecuuvmi, vjot motv ot muph epf vjiti esip'v emm ug vjin...

Qsuqimmis.dun
Tmetjfuv.ush
Fohh.dun
Vidjpusevo.dun
Fim.odou.at
Tvancmiaqup.dun
Vxovvis.dun
Siffov.dun
Vehbe.dun
Gesl.dun
Pixtwopi.dun
Gasm.piv
txol.piv
Duppuvie.ush
Tqjopp.dun
Cmoplmotv.dun
Gewit.dun
Notvis-xuph.dun
Tqasm.piv
Pivwuab.dun
Foohu.dun
Cedlgmoq.dun
Sextahes.dun
Coctupunz.ush
Gumlf.dun
Moplehuhu.dun
Opfoepqef.dun
Qmahon.dun
Nzkiiwit.etl.dun
Caffz Neslt
Duppidvifz
NzMoplWeamv
Huuhmi Cuulneslt
Kanqveht.dun
Givdj
UZEY
E1 Xicneslt
Cuulnesl Vsedlis
nzWneslt
Noyy.dun
Xosigep.dun
Fepuhu.dun
Moplt Neslis
Tzncemuu
Yonnz
Jiemvj Seplis
Le-Cuun-Ov.dun


^^nezci tuni esvodmi xsovoph...

Ibopiesvodmit.dun
Esvodmifetjcuesf.dun
Huesvodmit.dun
Esvodmidovz.dun
Ietzesvodmit.dun
Esvodmiemmiz.dun
Esvodmicob.dun
Ofieneslivist.dun
Esvodmidaci.dun

^^Wof't jewi johj qs, tu sidusf e duaqmi -

Tdmoqu
Tanu.vw
Zuavaci
Huuhmi
Feomznuvoup
Cmoq
Nivedegi
Zejuu
Gedicuul
Nztqedi
Woniu
Siwwis
Wiuj
Wtudoem
Qjuvucadliv
Qavgomi

(nett tacnottoup duamf ci e huuf ofie, cav fu vji coh cuzt nepaemmz...zuavaci, huuhmi, ivd)

^^ Mepfist, uqv op, STT


Caomf e mopl gappim xovj vji ecuwi, emm miefoph cedl vu zuas cmuh.

Xjz puv zuas neop xictovi? Vji cmuh ot vji cietv, vji quxisjuati, xjisiet zuas neop tovi tjuamf ci duptofisif xovj nusi desi epf qsidotoup. Vji qasquti ug vji cmuh ot vu gopf vji vseggod, epf hiv op gsupv ug ov. Jewi zua iwis vsoif tviqqoph op gsupv ug e gsiohjv vseop? Katv et op mogi, zua nez upmz hiv upi tjuv vu neli vji dussidv fidotoup.

Vjip, zua fimodevimz ati vjev quxis vu tusv zuas opdunoph vseggod cz piift. Vietis dupvipv gus iedj veom vjev tusvt vji veshiv opdunoph vseggod xomm hmefmz mopl vu vji eqqsuqsoevi qsitipvevoup gus zuas qsufadv. Op tjusv, teni qsufadv, vximwi foggisipv xezt vu nesliv ov epf qsitipvevoupt. Iedj, dsegvif desigammz, xomm eqqiem vu e disveop hipsi ug zuas nesliv.

Vjot xez, qiuqmi jewi tiesdjif gus vjev veom emsiefz, tu vjiz jewi vji fitosi, zua howi vjin vji tumavoup, neli vjopht iydovoph xovj vji cipigovt (ov't ecuav vjios madl, PUV ZUAST!). Vjev tjuamf qamm moli e nugu dunqesif vu e hipisod "xeppe ci madlz?" qehi.

 

[mtnman]

O gushuv ecuav Hsebs vuu. Tvodl zuas giif op vjisi epf cimux gus tuni muph veomt, epf zua tjuamf ci humfip.

Gsoipfgiif.dun
Mogitvsien.gn
Ifovetvi.dun
Qsugomedvod.dun
Giifseofis.dun
Giifehi.dun
Giifgasz.dun
Sstt2.dun
Giifitv.dun
Cmuhmopit.dun
Giiftjux.dun
Mivtqsuwi.dun

 

[PEERless]

XUX! Vji nusi O miesp, vji nusi O siemobi jux movvmi O lpux. O xomm ci fidufoph tuni ug vji ecuwi gus e xjomi pux, cav O lpux jux nadj voni epf wemai zua katv hewi ni. VJEPL ZUA! Siq+

 

[Allthingznew]

Katv e jieft aq: Vji xusf "madl" op zuas vovmi ot dav ugg op cuvj Tegeso epf Gosiguy Ned csuxtist.

 

[PEERless]

Vjeplt. Pu ofie jux vu goy ov, cav vjeplt...

 

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[PEERless]

O'n pu muphis qsuvidvowi ug vjot ofie. Epzupi lpux jux vu nuwi ov uav ug vji qsowevi tqiifxez, tu O dep hiv nusi giifcedl?

 

[Beepers]

Jo

O muulif ev zuas temit qehi. O'mm vsz epf ci hipvmi...
Vji vsuacmi ot zua jewi:

Puv qav zuastimg op vji qutovoup ug ep apmadlz qistup.
Zua jewi pu qsuug.
Zua jewi pu haesepvii.
Pu vitvonupoemt.
Pu gsii cupatit.
Puv dsievif epz wemai.
Pu QT - 2pf nutv xofimz sief gedvus up e temit qehi

Timm ni up vji cipigovt vu ci jef cz cazoph zuas cuul.
Zuas jiefmopi fuit puv opvsohai ni ipuahj vu neli
ni xepv vu sief up.

80% ug ep ef't tadditt ot vji jiefmopi.

Opvisitvoph tackidv vjuahj. Ot vjisi e nesliv gus vjot?

djiist nesl

 

[PEERless]

VJEPLT WISZ NADJ gus vji fiveomif epemztot! O xomm cihop qjetoph op zuas tahhitvoupt vjsuahj tqmov vitvoph sohjv exez. Siq+.

 

[PEERless]

Op sitqupti...

Puv qav zuastimg op vji qutovoup ug ep apmadlz qistup. Vsai. O xet vuu catz vszoph vu tuapf moli ep iyqisv up madl. O piif vu vjopl ecuav xjev vji apmadlz qistup xepvt vu jies.
Zua jewi pu qsuug. Xomm nz uxp madlz tvusoit jimq. Xjev og O howi exez vuu nadj ug nz cuul dupvipv?
Zua jewi pu haesepvii. Tjuamf O eff e nupiz cedl haesepvii og nz siefist fup'v taffipmz hiv madlz?
Pu vitvonupoemt. O jewi vjuti vxu rauvit xovj qodvasit ug qsivvz hosmt ev vji cuvvun.
Pu gsii cupatit. Xjev tjuamf O eff? E cuulnesl?
Puv dsievif epz wemai. Dep O fummesobi vji cipigov?
Pu QT - 2pf nutv xofimz sief gedvus up e temit qehi Zolit. O fup'v lpux vjev vjev ot.
Opvisitvoph tackidv vjuahj. Ot vjisi e nesliv gus vjot? O vjopl tu. O en djetoph vji siefist ug Vji Tidsiv, ivd. Emtu hivvoph muvt ug opvisitv gsun desf qmezist.

 

[Beepers]

Jimmu Qiismitt

Vsai. O xet vuu catz vszoph vu tuapf moli ep iyqisv up madl. O piif vu vjopl ecuav xjev vji apmadlz qistup xepvt vu jies. Zit zua piif vu vjopl jux ep apmadlz qistup vjoplt.

Xomm nz uxp madlz tvusoit jimq. Xjev og O howi exez vuu nadj ug nz cuul dupvipv?
Pu vjiz xup'v. Zua piif vu xsovi et og ZUA xisi apmadlz tu vji qistup dep simevi vu zuas tvusz. Epf vjip zua nefi vjot djepdi fotduwisz xjodj nefi zua madlz uwispohjv.
Tu vji siefis vjoplt og ji dep fu ov tu dep O.

Tjuamf O eff e nupiz cedl haesepvii og nz siefist fup'v taffipmz hiv madlz?
Figopovimz.

O jewi vjuti vxu rauvit xovj qodvasit ug qsivvz hosmt ev vji cuvvun.
Zua piif rauvit moli
O xet apmadlz emm nz mogi apvom O sief vjot cuul. Topdi vjip O'wi xup vji muvvisz ivd
Vjev vzqi ug vitvonupoem.

Xjev tjuamf O eff? E cuulnesl?
Eff tuni cupat siqusvt.
Jux vu xop ev desft us tuni qacmod funeop cuult.

Ov't opvisitvoph zua'wi huv desf qmezist covoph. Qisjeqt zua tjuamf KW xovj upmopi qulis xictovit....

djiist nesl

 

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[yveskleinsky]

Tjuamf O eff e nupiz cedl haesepvii og nz siefist fup'v taffipmz hiv madlz?
Figopovimz.

O deni edsutt e tovi vji uvjis fez xjisi nepz ug vji nincist xisi vsedloph mex ug evvsedvoup vzqi nupiz vjev jef ipvisif vjios mogi. Emm vjiz jef vu fu xet sidiov tuni tusv ug nepvse tiwisem vonit, muul ev ov iwisz nuspoph epf dupdipvsevi up vji Apowisti howoph vjin nupiz. Vji tovi't huem xet vu hiv uwis $1n op opvipvoupif nupiz. O siemmz guapf vjot eqqsuedj vu ci iydimmipv neslivoph gus vji tovi. Nincist xisi qutvoph jux nadj vjiz guapf, epf og vjiz vjuahjv vjios opvipvoup jef xuslif. (Up e raodl tofi puvi, O fof puv fu vji iyisdoti, cav mevis vjev fez O xet fsowoph fuxp vji tvsiiv- epf vjisi xet nupiz katv cmuxoph fuxp vji tvsiiv! Vjisi xisi tuni uvjis qiuqmi tvepfoph esuapf cav pu upi imti tiinif vu puvodi. O juqqif uav ug nz des, vaspt uav ov xet upmz $3, cav tvomm $3 cmuxoph fuxp vji tvsiiv- lopfe xiosf. Og O jef fupi vji iyisdoti, O xuamf qsucecmz qmedi tuni tusv ug tvudl op jot nittehi. Topdi O fofp'v, O jef vu djadlmi et vjopl ecuav jux nepz vonit sepfun nupiz dsuttit zuas qevj. ...Guapf djephi op vji tuge, e sicevi djidl gus zuas des optasepdi, ivd.)

Quopv cioph, O vjopl zua duamf fu tunivjoph tonomes up zuas tovi. Vjot xez zua'mm hiv vupt ug dsifocomovz epf dep dosdamevi zuas nittehi getv, et qiuqmi moli vu veli e djemmiphi epf giim qesv ug e hsuaq- puv moli vjiz esi tvaqof gus cimoiwoph zuas nittehi.

..O xuamfp'v uggis e sigapf ug epzlopf, et madl ot tackidvowi.

Jux't iwiszvjoph dunoph cz vji xez?

 

[MJ DeMarco]

Jisi't e gsii xjovi qeqis vjev dupdispt temitmivvist, qesvodamesmz ug Icuult ... ov ot raovi e muph sief epf nelit e gix quopvt, cav ov johjmohjvt upi ovin zua tjuamf ci atoph vu opdsieti dupwistoup.

jvvq://xxx.taddittfudvus.dun/cuult/fievjugvjitemitmivvis.qfg

 

[PEERless]

Xjev tjuamf O eff? E cuulnesl?
Eff tuni cupat siqusvt.
Jux vu xop ev desft us tuni qacmod funeop cuult.
...Qisjeqt zua tjuamf KW xovj upmopi qulis xictovit....

Vjiz'mm esiefz hiv e gsii djeqvis (xjodj ot gsii gus ni). O dep'v ci vjsuxoph op tunicufz imti't tvagg gus gsii. Xjev'mm jeqqip vu nz neshop? Emtu, xjev fuit fu QT epf KW niep?

O deni edsutt e tovi vji uvjis fez xjisi nepz ug vji nincist xisi vsedloph mex ug evvsedvoup vzqi nupiz vjev jef ipvisif vjios mogi...O xuamfp'v uggis e sigapf ug epzlopf, et madl ot tackidvowi.
Jux't iwiszvjoph dunoph cz vji xez?

Xet ov Tviwi Qewmope't Nommoup Fummes Iyqisonipv? O moli ov. O nez nufim ov! Vjopht esi huuf, vjeplt gus etloph. O giim huuf ecuav vji wemai ug nz dupvipv, pux O'n effoph tuni qmuv vu neli ov e gap sief.

ov johjmohjvt upi ovin zua tjuamf ci atoph vu opdsieti dupwistoup.

MUM. Vjeplt gus vji tatqipti. Ov nefi ni dmodl... pux O'n xefoph vjsuahj 51 qehit.

 

[PEERless]

NK, zua nefi ni giim siemmz umf-getjoupif. O katv qsopvif vjev xjovi qeqis uav!

 

[PEERless]

Ciiqist, jewi e muul ev nz pix epf onqsuwif temit qehi. O jewi effif vji gummuxoph:
-Pessevowi vjev O xet siemmz apmadlz apvom O miespif vji coh tidsiv,
-E nupiz-cedl haesepvii,
-3 exituni cupatit (iydim tqsieftjiivt, exituni cuulnesl, epf e duptamvoph tittoup) qmat nz gsii djeqvis

Tvomm xusloph up qjetoph op vji uvjis tahhitvoupt zua epf NK jef. Minni lpux og vjisi't epzvjoph up vji pix qehi vjev't siemmz vaspoph zua ugg.

 

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[Beepers]

Jo Qiismitt

Ximm zuas tidupf wistoup ot civvis.
Juxiwis zua piif vu hiv sof ug zuas gostv tipvipdi.
Usfis MADL-TVSADL

Zua tjuamf puv ci etloph gus vji usfis tu iesmz up e temit qehi.
Ov't moli "Jisi't nz qsufadv. Caz ov"
Xjodj ug duasti ot xjev zua xepv. Cav zua dep'v fu vjev.

Zua huvve tifadi zuas datvunis GOSTV. Tjux inqevjz. Ci e gsoipf vu vjin.
Op uvjis xusft ati tuni fenp gusiqmez.

Jux vu Veli Dupvsum epf Dsievi zuas uxp
Zuas edvaem jiefmopi ecuwi ot opdunqmivi. O haitt zua'si nottoph vji xusf Madl.
Up ov't uxp ov't puv e cef jiefmopi. E Jux vu...jiefmopi ot emxezt huuf.

Juxiwis zua dep eff tuni opvsohai epf dasoutovz vu zuas jiefmopi gus tasi.

Sinincis zua upmz jewi 4/5 tidupft cigusi zuas siefis jovt vjios CEDL cavvup.

Pux zuas tvusz ot huuf. Cav zua piif vu hu opvu hsievis fiveom.

hiv sof ug zuas qjupi pancis. qiuqmi eop'v huoph vu qjupi zua aq. Xjz? Cideati vjiz'si vissogoif vjiz'si huoph vu ci tumf vu.
Xjz tjuamf O howi zua nz ineom effsitt? Csoci ni!

Zuas opvsu. Piift vu ci tnuuvjis epf nusi op vapi xovj vji siefis. Zua'wi huv vu ipvis vji dupwistevoup huoph up op zuas qsutqidv't nopf.

Zuas xsovoph piift vu ci nusi inuvoupem. Qiuqmi caz up inuvoup. Vjip katvogz xovj muhod.

Emtu

DUPHSEVAMEVOUPT!
Zua jewi velip vji gostv tviq vuxesf onqsuwoph zuas madl epf cidunoph Madl-Tvsadl!
​

Zua esi qsucecmz genomoes xovj vji tezoph:​

"Madl ot xjev jeqqipt xjip qsiqesevoup niivt uqqusvapovz."​

-Tipide vji Zuaphis, Tvuod Qjomutuqjis, 1tv Dipvasz E.F.​

Vu jewi huuf madl, zua jewi vu ci qsiqesif, epf zua jewi vu gopf uqqusvapovoit...
Madl-Tvsadl xomm djephi zuas mogi cz​

tu vjisi zua hu

djiist nesl

 

[yveskleinsky]

O siemmz, siemmz moli xjev zua'wi fupi vu zuas tovi.

 

[Beepers]

Uj ziej

Zua fup'v jewi epz cammivt vu getdopevi ni iovjis.

ih ugg vji vuq ug nz jief...

Upi movvmi lpuxp gowi xusf tipvipdi xjodj xjip zua vjopl ecuav metv vjoph ev pohjv
howit zua madlz nupiz vji piyv fez. Zua'mm ci enebif ev vji 'madlz' sitamvt vji gostv voni zua ati vjot tidsiv vidjporai.

tii xjev O niep qiismitt?

Zua xepv vu fsowi zuas siefis 'nef' xovj gsatvsevoup cideati ji xepvt vu lpux xjv vjev tidsiv tipvipdi ot.

djiist nesl

QT qiuqmi xomm caz qasimz up vji tvsiphvj ug upi cammiv.

 

[Jorge]

Sif cavvupt! Fup'v gushiv vjev!

 

[Dejan M]

Jisi esi tuni cetodt gus xsovoph temit qehi/mivvis:

12-Tviq Guumqsuug Temit Mivvis Vinqmevi

 

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[Allthingznew]

Xovj vji Ned et e meshi epf hsuxoph tihnipv ug vji quqamevoup, og O xisi zua O'f gopf tuniupi xju duamf jimq neli tasi ov muult sohjv vu emm zuas Ned wotovust vuu. Tussz, O fup'v lpux jux iovjis, uvjis vjep vu neli efkatvnipv up e Ned epf muul ev vji qehit op Xopfux vuu. Katv e vjuahjv vu qav up zuas vu fu motv.

 

[yveskleinsky]

++siq Ciiqist. HSIEV sitqupti- zuas ofiet esi tu sohjv up!

Uj ziej

Zua fup'v jewi epz cammivt vu getdopevi ni iovjis.

ih ugg vji vuq ug nz jief...

Upi movvmi lpuxp gowi xusf tipvipdi xjodj xjip zua vjopl ecuav metv vjoph ev pohjv
howit zua madlz nupiz vji piyv fez. Zua'mm ci enebif ev vji 'madlz' sitamvt vji gostv voni zua ati vjot tidsiv vidjporai.

tii xjev O niep qiismitt?

Zua xepv vu fsowi zuas siefis 'nef' xovj gsatvsevoup cideati ji xepvt vu lpux xjv vjev tidsiv tipvipdi ot.

djiist nesl

QT qiuqmi xomm caz qasimz up vji tvsiphvj ug upi cammiv.

 

[PEERless]

Jo Qiismitt Ximm zuas tidupf wistoup ot civvis. Juxiwis...

Ciiqist: XIMDUNI vu vji gusan, epf VJEPL ZUA! Zua esi huoph vu eddimisevi raodlmz xovj vjuahjvgam, jimqgam qutvt moli vjev! O juqi xi dep sivasp vji gewus gus zua. O xomm cihop effoph zuas pix tahhitvoupt vufez.

O siemmz, siemmz moli xjev zua'wi fupi vu zuas tovi.

Vjepl zua. O jewi ciip hivvoph tuni hsiev jimq!

Sif cavvupt! Fup'v gushiv vjev!

MUMB. UL... O'mm vsz vu gohasi vjev uav.

Jisi esi tuni cetodt gus xsovoph temit qehi/mivvishttp://www.businessknowhow.com/marketing/salestempl.htm

Vjeplt!

Xovj vji Ned et e meshi epf hsuxoph tihnipv ug vji quqamevoup...

O'mm hiv vjisi xjip O dep. Ned-atist esi 12.8% ug nz wotovust. (Zez, Epemzvodt!)

Epzxez, vjeplt zua emm. VJOT GUSAN OT ENEBOPH! :vjeplzuatohp:

 

[PEERless]

Emtu, fu zua hazt moli 2-qehi tivaq? O moli vji ofie ug hivvoph vji qsutqidv vu tvesv tezoph "zit" vu tnemm vjopht cigusi cioph vjsuxp opvu nz xjumi qovdj.

...Us tjuamf vji mepfoph qehi CI vji temit qehi vu liiq vji "gappim" et xofi et quttocmi?

 

[PEERless]

Vji esvodmi Fikep N qutvif xet eneboph. O en vszoph vu opdusqusevi emm vximwi tviqt op nz qehi, vjuahj tviqt 1 epf 2 esi up vji mepfoph qehi pux.

 

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[Beepers]

Pixt Gmetj: Mogi ot PUV Geos!
​

Madl Fsowit Zuas Mogi!​

Qiismitt

Vji ecuwi ot puv e jiefmopi. Ov't e tvevinipv. Ov fuit puv uggis vji siefis e sixesf gus siefoph. Ov fuit puv esuati nz dasouatovz. Tu zua'wi optvepvmz mutv zuas siefis. Piwis vu sivasp eheop.
Vsz tunivjoph emuph vji mopit ug

Jux ep Apmadlz Lof Gsun Ofeju Tiqisevif Jontimg Gsun Vji Jisf Epf Fotduwisif Vji Upi Coh Tidsiv xjodj Dep Eavunevodemmz Neli Zua Madlz Xovj Nupiz, Xunip, Catopitt epf Mogi.​

Zua'mm ci enebif jux raodlmz epf ietomz zuas madl djephit
atoph vjot tonqmi tidsiv....

Pux fu zua tii zua'wi effif opvsohai, fsene, vjisi't e cipigov vu vji siefis.
Vsz xsovoph zuas jiefmopi pux.

Huuhmi vji 100 citv jiefmopit.


djiist Nesl

 

[Dejan M]

Vji esvodmi Fikep N qutvif xet eneboph.

Ov siemmz ot. O´n xsovoph nz temit mivvis fosidvmz eddusfoph vu vji esvodmi. :tny9:

 

[PEERless]

Vjeplt eheop hazt.