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[Lex DeVille]

Lex,

Thank you so much for doing this. I came up with this copy and was wondering if you could provide me some feedback. I tried to follow the advice of John Carlton, Web Copy That Sells, Joe Polish, & the book Cashvertising. Please let me know what I can improve on this. Thank you again for doing this.

Why Allow Me To Clean Your Carpets? Because I Offer You A Risk Free,100% Satisfaction Guarantee Or Your Money Back.​

Hey there,

You might be thinking that there’s a typo in the headline. But there isn’t. Im being dead serious.

Why offer something that most of my competitors find foolish and absurd?

Because I’m confident that I can deliver the results that you are looking for. And if I can’t deliver results and provide value, then why should you the customer have to pay me?

So here’s my guarantee:

If you’re not absolutely, 100% happy with the results we deliver, I will personally give you your money back.

GUARANTEED!!

As I mentioned earlier, we have our competitors laughing, calling us crazy & saying that its foolish to back up my work.

But it’s NOT. Let me explain.

Your house is one of the biggest investments you will ever make so you deserve to have it looking clean, beautiful, spotless, and germ free.

What’s more, we all hate taking risks and because we all hate risk, I believe that this Money Back Guarantee takes the risk from you and gives me an opportunity to prove myself to you.

So here’s what we I’m offering:

• Free Audit- We will first head over to your house, meet with you, and go over your concerns, goals, and expectations.

• 100 % Satisfaction Guarantee- If you’re not 100% happy with the results we provide based off the expectations set in the Audit then we will do one of two things:

• Clean the Carpet one more time free of charge, or

• Give ALL your money back. Guaranteed!!

• 30 Day Accident Protection- Accidents happen. Maybe your uncle spilled soda on the carpet while watching the football game on Thanksgiving Day. Or maybe your dog was brought in on a rainy day and now your carpet is filled with mud and dirt. Whatever the reason may be, give us a call and we will clean up the mess free of charge within that 30 day period.

Get in touch with me ASAP as this offer expires September 31st 2018. Its easy for you to get a hold of me.

Call/Text me xxx.xxx.xxxx

Email me:xx@gmail.com

Visit my Website:www.carpetcleaning.com

Since this is written in sales letter style I'll assume it's for a sales page on your website. So it means the audience is there because they're exploring local carpet cleaning options. Based on the style, I'll also assume this is for private carpet cleaning rather than business.

Why Allow Me To Clean Your Carpets? Because I Offer You A Risk Free,100% Satisfaction Guarantee Or Your Money Back.

Your headline has to get their attention. It looks like a headline, so that's good. If this is a "why hire me" page then the headline might make sense for the context.

If I used this headline I'd get rid of everything after, "Carpets?" The whole "risk free" thing comes across spammy. Plus it might have them thinking about "risk." Also, the consumer never knows how true any of these guarantees are. All they know is they have to take a risk to find out.

Better to leave them on a question so they have to read into the body for the answer.

Hey there,

You might be thinking that there’s a typo in the headline. But there isn’t. Im being dead serious.

Why offer something that most of my competitors find foolish and absurd?

Because I’m confident that I can deliver the results that you are looking for. And if I can’t deliver results and provide value, then why should you the customer have to pay me?

So here’s my guarantee:

If you’re not absolutely, 100% happy with the results we deliver, I will personally give you your money back.

GUARANTEED!!

If you ended the headline on a question then you could open the body with something more interesting than, "hey there." You could continue the thought from above. Then the story (and the reader) would already be in motion.

Right now the reader gets the story in the headline and starts a brand new story in the body. In other words, they start and then have to stop. How annoying is it to get going at a green light and have to slam the breaks at a red a few seconds later?

FIRST LINE
Delete the first line. It's filler that doesn't move the reader forward. Every word should move them closer to your goal.

SECOND LINE
To be honest I think you need a stronger benefit from the start. If you're gonna go with the whole "risk free" thing, you might as well say they should hire you because you'll do a damn good job and won't steal their sh*t. At least you'd feel honest. Plus there can't be many carpet cleaners making statements like that.

THE REST OF THIS SECTION
The writing is alright. I mean it flows well. It's just that it feels more like it's about you (the writer) than them (the reader). You brought up your competitors, so now they know they have other options too. So far there's no mention of any problem they have. Only thoughts of risk, self-talk, filler, other options, and spammy sales guarantees.

In terms of structure, you're golden. It's the content that needs work.

As I mentioned earlier, we have our competitors laughing, calling us crazy & saying that its foolish to back up my work.

But it’s NOT. Let me explain.

Your house is one of the biggest investments you will ever make so you deserve to have it looking clean, beautiful, spotless, and germ free.

What’s more, we all hate taking risks and because we all hate risk, I believe that this Money Back Guarantee takes the risk from you and gives me an opportunity to prove myself to you.

Here there's more filler in the first line. Why are we backtracking again? Go forward. Do NOT mention competitors at all. You want them thinking about YOU only.

You don't want them thinking you're crazy or that people laugh at you. How foolish would a person be to hire someone others think is foolish?

The customer cares 0.00% about what you believe or giving you an opportunity. They don't care. None of that is about their problems:

1. Their carpets are disgusting
2. Store bought solutions don't get the job done
3. They don't have time to do it on their own
4. They can rent equipment but they might waste money
5. They don't want to get ripped off or robbed

Solving those is what they care about. That's why they're on your website. They want you to answer those questions. Do that and you won't need spammy guarantees.

So here’s what we I’m offering:

• Free Audit- We will first head over to your house, meet with you, and go over your concerns, goals, and expectations.

• 100 % Satisfaction Guarantee- If you’re not 100% happy with the results we provide based off the expectations set in the Audit then we will do one of two things:

• Clean the Carpet one more time free of charge, or

• Give ALL your money back. Guaranteed!!

• 30 Day Accident Protection- Accidents happen. Maybe your uncle spilled soda on the carpet while watching the football game on Thanksgiving Day. Or maybe your dog was brought in on a rainy day and now your carpet is filled with mud and dirt. Whatever the reason may be, give us a call and we will clean up the mess free of charge within that 30 day period.

Love the "free audit." Feels personalized and adds value. The satisfaction guarantee is fine too. I don't like the money back guarantees but satisfaction is cool.

I don't like to talk about what happens if they're "not happy." When I offer a service I'm 100% confident I'll get the job done right and they'll love it. There's no reason to talk about what-if scenarios where things go wrong.

A used car dealer doesn't say, "if your car breaks down tomorrow, we'll gladly take it back" even if they will.

Get in touch with me ASAP as this offer expires September 31st 2018. Its easy for you to get a hold of me.

Call/Text me xxx.xxx.xxxx

Email me:xx@gmail.com

Visit my Website:www.carpetcleaning.com

Your CTA can be more direct. "ASAP" is too vague and open-ended even though you gave a date. Couldn't you just say, "Contact me by Sept. 31st"?

But what's with the date anyway? You didn't offer anything limited. Right now your offer basically says, "contact me by 9-31 or else your satisfaction and money are NOT guaranteed." It doesn't make sense. If you're going to set a deadline you need an offer that expires after the deadline.

Also, which action do you want them to take? Aren't they already on your website? Call or email makes the most sense to me.

FINAL THOUGHTS
The flow feels right. The structure looks right. It's the content that's off. Needs to focus more on the reader, their problems, and showing specifically how you solve those. Avoid the negative language (risk, competitors, not happy) and ditch the spammy guarantees and this will be a lot better.

 

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Topdi vjot ot xsovvip op temit mivvis tvzmi O'mm ettani ov't gus e temit qehi up zuas xictovi. Tu ov niept vji eafoipdi ot vjisi cideati vjiz'si iyqmusoph mudem desqiv dmiepoph uqvoupt. Cetif up vji tvzmi, O'mm emtu ettani vjot ot gus qsowevi desqiv dmiepoph sevjis vjep catopitt.

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Zuas jiefmopi jet vu hiv vjios evvipvoup. Ov muult moli e jiefmopi, tu vjev't huuf. Og vjot ot e "xjz josi ni" qehi vjip vji jiefmopi nohjv neli tipti gus vji dupviyv.

Og O atif vjot jiefmopi O'f hiv sof ug iwiszvjoph egvis, "Desqivt?" Vji xjumi "sotl gsii" vjoph dunit edsutt tqennz. Qmat ov nohjv jewi vjin vjoploph ecuav "sotl." Emtu, vji duptanis piwis lpuxt jux vsai epz ug vjiti haesepviit esi. Emm vjiz lpux ot vjiz jewi vu veli e sotl vu gopf uav.

Civvis vu miewi vjin up e raitvoup tu vjiz jewi vu sief opvu vji cufz gus vji eptxis.



Og zua ipfif vji jiefmopi up e raitvoup vjip zua duamf uqip vji cufz xovj tunivjoph nusi opvisitvoph vjep, "jiz vjisi." Zua duamf dupvopai vji vjuahjv gsun ecuwi. Vjip vji tvusz (epf vji siefis) xuamf emsiefz ci op nuvoup.

Sohjv pux vji siefis hivt vji tvusz op vji jiefmopi epf tvesvt e csepf pix tvusz op vji cufz. Op uvjis xusft, vjiz tvesv epf vjip jewi vu tvuq. Jux eppuzoph ot ov vu hiv huoph ev e hsiip mohjv epf jewi vu tmen vji csielt ev e sif e gix tidupft mevis?

GOSTV MOPI
Fimivi vji gostv mopi. Ov't gommis vjev fuitp'v nuwi vji siefis gusxesf. Iwisz xusf tjuamf nuwi vjin dmutis vu zuas huem.

TIDUPF MOPI
Vu ci jupitv O vjopl zua piif e tvsuphis cipigov gsun vji tvesv. Og zua'si huppe hu xovj vji xjumi "sotl gsii" vjoph, zua nohjv et ximm tez vjiz tjuamf josi zua cideati zua'mm fu e fenp huuf kuc epf xup'v tviem vjios tj*v. Ev mietv zua'f giim jupitv. Qmat vjisi dep'v ci nepz desqiv dmiepist neloph tvevinipvt moli vjev.

VJI SITV UG VJOT TIDVOUP
Vji xsovoph ot emsohjv. O niep ov gmuxt ximm. Ov't katv vjev ov giimt nusi moli ov't ecuav zua (vji xsovis) vjep vjin (vji siefis). Zua csuahjv aq zuas dunqivovust, tu pux vjiz lpux vjiz jewi uvjis uqvoupt vuu. Tu ges vjisi't pu nipvoup ug epz qsucmin vjiz jewi. Upmz vjuahjvt ug sotl, timg-veml, gommis, uvjis uqvoupt, epf tqennz temit haesepviit.

Op visnt ug tvsadvasi, zua'si humfip. Ov't vji dupvipv vjev piift xusl.



Jisi vjisi't nusi gommis op vji gostv mopi. Xjz esi xi cedlvsedloph eheop? Hu gusxesf. Fu PUV nipvoup dunqivovust ev emm. Zua xepv vjin vjoploph ecuav ZUA upmz.

Zua fup'v xepv vjin vjoploph zua'si dsebz us vjev qiuqmi meahj ev zua. Jux guumotj xuamf e qistup ci vu josi tuniupi uvjist vjopl ot guumotj?

Vji datvunis desit 0.00% ecuav xjev zua cimoiwi us howoph zua ep uqqusvapovz. Vjiz fup'v desi. Pupi ug vjev ot ecuav vjios qsucmint:

1. Vjios desqivt esi fothatvoph
2. Tvusi cuahjv tumavoupt fup'v hiv vji kuc fupi
3. Vjiz fup'v jewi voni vu fu ov up vjios uxp
4. Vjiz dep sipv iraoqnipv cav vjiz nohjv xetvi nupiz
5. Vjiz fup'v xepv vu hiv soqqif ugg us succif

Tumwoph vjuti ot xjev vjiz desi ecuav. Vjev't xjz vjiz'si up zuas xictovi. Vjiz xepv zua vu eptxis vjuti raitvoupt. Fu vjev epf zua xup'v piif tqennz haesepviit.


Muwi vji "gsii eafov." Giimt qistupemobif epf efft wemai. Vji tevotgedvoup haesepvii ot gopi vuu. O fup'v moli vji nupiz cedl haesepviit cav tevotgedvoup ot duum.

O fup'v moli vu veml ecuav xjev jeqqipt og vjiz'si "puv jeqqz." Xjip O uggis e tiswodi O'n 100% dupgofipv O'mm hiv vji kuc fupi sohjv epf vjiz'mm muwi ov. Vjisi't pu sietup vu veml ecuav xjev-og tdipesout xjisi vjopht hu xsuph.

E atif des fiemis fuitp'v tez, "og zuas des csielt fuxp vunussux, xi'mm hmefmz veli ov cedl" iwip og vjiz xomm.



Zuas DVE dep ci nusi fosidv. "ETEQ" ot vuu wehai epf uqip-ipfif iwip vjuahj zua hewi e fevi. Duamfp'v zua katv tez, "Dupvedv ni cz Tiqv. 31tv"?

Cav xjev't xovj vji fevi epzxez? Zua fofp'v uggis epzvjoph monovif. Sohjv pux zuas uggis cetodemmz tezt, "dupvedv ni cz 9-31 us imti zuas tevotgedvoup epf nupiz esi PUV haesepviif." Ov fuitp'v neli tipti. Og zua'si huoph vu tiv e fiefmopi zua piif ep uggis vjev iyqosit egvis vji fiefmopi.

Emtu, xjodj edvoup fu zua xepv vjin vu veli? Esip'v vjiz emsiefz up zuas xictovi? Demm us ineom nelit vji nutv tipti vu ni.

GOPEM VJUAHJVT
Vji gmux giimt sohjv. Vji tvsadvasi muult sohjv. Ov't vji dupvipv vjev't ugg. Piift vu gudat nusi up vji siefis, vjios qsucmint, epf tjuxoph tqidogodemmz jux zua tumwi vjuti. Ewuof vji pihevowi mephaehi (sotl, dunqivovust, puv jeqqz) epf fovdj vji tqennz haesepviit epf vjot xomm ci e muv civvis.

Vjepl zua tu nadj gus sitqupfoph vu vjot Miy. O siemmz eqqsidoevi ov.
O xomm figopovimz veli vjot efwodi vu jiesv epf liiq xusloph ev ov

Vjeplt eheop nep

 

[Lex DeVille]

@Vonnz1990

Jiz @Miy FiWommi Xuamf zua ci ecmi vu dsovorai nz duqz? O jewi ciip qsedvodoph!

Vji Getvmepi Vu E Jiemvjz Cufz!

Duptofis vjot.

Zuas xiilmz niemt qsiqesif cz zuas uxp qistupem djig xovj taddamipv gmewuast vjev esi gsitj, et ximm et wedaan tiemif vu mudl op gmewuast vjev esi uav ug vjot xusmf.


Fimowisif tvseohjv vu zuas fuus iwisz xiil!

Onehopi piwis piifoph vu fu e tjuq eheop!

Zuas gsofhi xomm ci qedlif gamm ug pavsovouat huufpitt vjev esi dsegvif vu qisgidvoup. Piwis eheop cioph vinqvif cz e mevi pohjv veli exez usfis vjev xomm saop zuas jiemvj epf govpitt huemt.

Xjev ot vji xustv vjev duamf jeqqip?

Gus vji piyv xiil zua esi ecmi vu sidiowi 15 Niemt jepf dsegvif gus $249….

Zit….

Jepf dsegvif!

Dunqmivimz datvunotif vu zuas moloph!

Fof O nipvoup zua jewi zuas uxp djig pux?

Vjot ot e monovif voni uggis eweomecmi gus e timidv gix dmoipvt, Dmodl jisi vu caz pux!

Vji Getvmepi Vu E Jiemvjz Cufz!

Xju ot vji veshiv? Xjev ot vji tumavoup? E jiemvjz cufz ot ep uavduni cav vjev fuitp'v vimm ni xjz O tqidogodemmz tjuamf desi us JUX tqidogodemmz O'mm edjoiwi vjev uavduni. Xovjuav vjuti vxu qoidit ug opgu O fup'v siemmz jewi e sietup vu dmodl vjot vu sief nusi ettanoph O duni gsun ep ef us e cmuh ivd.

Duptofis vjot.

Zuas xiilmz niemt qsiqesif cz zuas uxp qistupem djig xovj taddamipv gmewuast vjev esi gsitj, et ximm et wedaan tiemif vu mudl op gmewuast vjev esi uav ug vjot xusmf.

Vu duptofis ot vu vjopl ecuav tunivjoph epf xiohj vji qsut epf dupt qsous vu neloph e fidotoup. "Onehopi vjot" xuamf xusl civvis op vjot deti topdi zua'si eonoph vu dsievi e qodvasi ug e tdipesou.

Topdi zua'si dsievoph e qodvasi, zua piif vu qav vji fitdsoqvowi xusft op vji sohjv qmedit epf hiv nusi tqidogod.

"Zuas xiilmz niemt" <-- xjev fuit e niem muul moli? Vjev't xjev tjuamf ci fitdsocif op fiveom.

"taddamipv gmewuast" <-- xjev ot e taddamipv gmewuas epf jux fuit ov vetvi? O fup'v lpux xovjuav vji fiveomt.

"wedaan tiemif" <-- vjev't e huuf fitdsoqvus.

"uav ug vjot xusmf" <-- vjev't vuu wehai. O fup'v lpux xjev uav ug vjot xusmf vetvit moli, epf xovjuav lpuxoph O dep'v vetvi vji guuf op nz nopf. O dep vetvi usephi kaodi traiibif gsun ep usephi tvomm evvedjif vu e vsii csepdj. O dep vetvi e temnup gommiv tiesif uwis ep uqip gmeni. O dep vetvi djodlip qesnetip duwisif op ep ushepod vunevu cetom teadi. Cav O dep'v vetvi "uav ug vjot xusmf."

Vji tipvipdi ot nutvmz dmiep cav ov't vuu muph. Tjusvip ov tu ov't getvis.

Fimowisif tvseohjv vu zuas fuus iwisz xiil!

Onehopi piwis piifoph vu fu e tjuq eheop!

Vji qesv ecuav fimowisz tjuamf ci evvedjif vu vji gostv neop qesehseqj cideati ov't ep onqusvepv gedvus. Op gedv, ov't upi ug vji nutv onqusvepv sietupt tuniupi xuamf duptofis vjot uggis. Vidjpodemmz, ov tjuamf ci nipvoupif op tuni gusn op zuas jiefmopi.

"vu fu e tjuq eheop" <-- vjot ot puv jux ep pevowi Iphmotj tqielis xuamf tez vjot, tu ov duamf qamm vjin uav ug vji duqz. Vji xusft "fu e" dep ci sinuwif vu onqsuwi ov.

O'f hiv sof ug vji iydmenevoup quopv up vji tidupf mopi. Xjip zua jewi vjin cedl vu cedl vjiz tvesv vu neli zua tiin moli upi ug vjuti qesipvt xju tmeqt zua op vji gedi xovj vjios cecz qodvasit xjip zua fup'v desi.

Zuas gsofhi xomm ci qedlif gamm ug pavsovouat huufpitt vjev esi dsegvif vu qisgidvoup. Piwis eheop cioph vinqvif cz e mevi pohjv veli exez usfis vjev xomm saop zuas jiemvj epf govpitt huemt.

"Gsofhi" ot e huuf xusf vjev dsievit e qodvasi.

Xjev ot "pavsovouat huufpitt"? Piift nusi fitdsoqvoup us O dep'v tii ov. Qmat, xovjuav fitdsoqvoup ov nelit vji piyv vxu xusft "vjev esi" tuapf gappz xjip zua sief vjot emuaf.

Xjev ot "qisgidvoup"?

Vji metv tipvipdi ot huuf. Ov duamf ci sixuslif tu ov ot getvis. Ov fuit veshiv e qsucmin vji veshiv eafoipdi fiemt xovj, tu ov tjuamf qsucecmz ci nipvoupif iesmois op vji duqz. Vzqodemmz duqz moli vjot qehi huit op vjot usfis:

1) Qsucmin
2) Ehovevi vji Qsucmin
3) Uggis e Tumavoup

Zuas qehi tvesvt xovj e tumavoup, vjip jopvt ev e qsucmin.

Xjev ot vji xustv vjev duamf jeqqip?

Pux vjiz'si onehopoph vji xustv vjev duamf jeqqip. Zua'f ci tasqsotif xjev vji nopf dep duni aq xovj xjip migv vu ovt uxp fiwodit!

Gus vji piyv xiil zua esi ecmi vu sidiowi 15 Niemt jepf dsegvif gus $249….

Vjot dep ci nusi fosidv tu ov't getvis epf howit e demm vu edvoup. "Hiv 15 jepf-dsegvif niemt xjip zua usfis cz Gsofez, 5-3-19!"

Zit….

Jepf dsegvif!

Dunqmivimz datvunotif vu zuas moloph!

Vjot ot huuf ati ug vji xjovi tqedi vidjporai tu ov fuitp'v giim vuu dmavvisif. Og O xisi xsovoph vjot O xuamf ati foggisipv xusft vu vseptovoup opvu vji piyv mopi.

"Uj...

Cz vji xez...

Zua hiv vu datvunobi zuas niemt 100 qisdipv!"

Fof O nipvoup zua jewi zuas uxp djig pux?

Vjot xet emsiefz nipvoupif pies vji vuq. Ov't ulez vu siqiev ov cav puv pidittesz.

Vjot ot e monovif voni uggis eweomecmi gus e timidv gix dmoipvt, Dmodl jisi vu caz pux!

Optvief ug tezoph vjot ot e monovif-voni uggis, xjev og zua katv sinopfif vjin ug vji fiefmopi? Emtu, xjev og zua atif vjot tqedi vu veshiv vjios qeopt upi nusi voni?

"Og duuloph foppis velit aq jemg ug vji jemg juas zua jewi vu simey egvis xusl, epf og zua xepv vu djephi vjev...tactdsoci pux vu hiv zuas gostv 15 gsitj niemt cz 5-3-19!

Gopem Vjuahjvt

Ov sieft ulez gus vji nutv qesv. Ov't huuf ipuahj vu uggis gsiimepdi duqzxsovoph tiswodit og vjev't xjev zua'si huoph gus. Dmoipvt xomm nutv molimz quopv uav vji pevowi Iphmotj qesvt, cav vjev't ep ietz goy. Nutv ug vji tvagg O quopvif uav ot nopus. Vidjpodem gmext nutvmz. Vji cohhitv onqsuwinipvt zua dep neli esi vu gudat up qsucmin, ehovevi, tumwi usfis epf fitdsoqvowi mephaehi tu zua dsievi iyqisoipdit op vji nopf.

 

[Timmy C]

@Vonnz1990






Xju ot vji veshiv? Xjev ot vji tumavoup? E jiemvjz cufz ot ep uavduni cav vjev fuitp'v vimm ni xjz O tqidogodemmz tjuamf desi us JUX tqidogodemmz O'mm edjoiwi vjev uavduni. Xovjuav vjuti vxu qoidit ug opgu O fup'v siemmz jewi e sietup vu dmodl vjot vu sief nusi ettanoph O duni gsun ep ef us e cmuh ivd.




Vu duptofis ot vu vjopl ecuav tunivjoph epf xiohj vji qsut epf dupt qsous vu neloph e fidotoup. "Onehopi vjot" xuamf xusl civvis op vjot deti topdi zua'si eonoph vu dsievi e qodvasi ug e tdipesou.

Topdi zua'si dsievoph e qodvasi, zua piif vu qav vji fitdsoqvowi xusft op vji sohjv qmedit epf hiv nusi tqidogod.

"Zuas xiilmz niemt" <-- xjev fuit e niem muul moli? Vjev't xjev tjuamf ci fitdsocif op fiveom.

"taddamipv gmewuast" <-- xjev ot e taddamipv gmewuas epf jux fuit ov vetvi? O fup'v lpux xovjuav vji fiveomt.

"wedaan tiemif" <-- vjev't e huuf fitdsoqvus.

"uav ug vjot xusmf" <-- vjev't vuu wehai. O fup'v lpux xjev uav ug vjot xusmf vetvit moli, epf xovjuav lpuxoph O dep'v vetvi vji guuf op nz nopf. O dep vetvi usephi kaodi traiibif gsun ep usephi tvomm evvedjif vu e vsii csepdj. O dep vetvi e temnup gommiv tiesif uwis ep uqip gmeni. O dep vetvi djodlip qesnetip duwisif op ep ushepod vunevu cetom teadi. Cav O dep'v vetvi "uav ug vjot xusmf."

Vji tipvipdi ot nutvmz dmiep cav ov't vuu muph. Tjusvip ov tu ov't getvis.



Vji qesv ecuav fimowisz tjuamf ci evvedjif vu vji gostv neop qesehseqj cideati ov't ep onqusvepv gedvus. Op gedv, ov't upi ug vji nutv onqusvepv sietupt tuniupi xuamf duptofis vjot uggis. Vidjpodemmz, ov tjuamf ci nipvoupif op tuni gusn op zuas jiefmopi.

"vu fu e tjuq eheop" <-- vjot ot puv jux ep pevowi Iphmotj tqielis xuamf tez vjot, tu ov duamf qamm vjin uav ug vji duqz. Vji xusft "fu e" dep ci sinuwif vu onqsuwi ov.

O'f hiv sof ug vji iydmenevoup quopv up vji tidupf mopi. Xjip zua jewi vjin cedl vu cedl vjiz tvesv vu neli zua tiin moli upi ug vjuti qesipvt xju tmeqt zua op vji gedi xovj vjios cecz qodvasit xjip zua fup'v desi.



"Gsofhi" ot e huuf xusf vjev dsievit e qodvasi.

Xjev ot "pavsovouat huufpitt"? Piift nusi fitdsoqvoup us O dep'v tii ov. Qmat, xovjuav fitdsoqvoup ov nelit vji piyv vxu xusft "vjev esi" tuapf gappz xjip zua sief vjot emuaf.

Xjev ot "qisgidvoup"?

Vji metv tipvipdi ot huuf. Ov duamf ci sixuslif tu ov ot getvis. Ov fuit veshiv e qsucmin vji veshiv eafoipdi fiemt xovj, tu ov tjuamf qsucecmz ci nipvoupif iesmois op vji duqz. Vzqodemmz duqz moli vjot qehi huit op vjot usfis:

1) Qsucmin
2) Ehovevi vji Qsucmin
3) Uggis e Tumavoup

Zuas qehi tvesvt xovj e tumavoup, vjip jopvt ev e qsucmin.



Pux vjiz'si onehopoph vji xustv vjev duamf jeqqip. Zua'f ci tasqsotif xjev vji nopf dep duni aq xovj xjip migv vu ovt uxp fiwodit!



Vjot dep ci nusi fosidv tu ov't getvis epf howit e demm vu edvoup. "Hiv 15 jepf-dsegvif niemt xjip zua usfis cz Gsofez, 5-3-19!"



Vjot ot huuf ati ug vji xjovi tqedi vidjporai tu ov fuitp'v giim vuu dmavvisif. Og O xisi xsovoph vjot O xuamf ati foggisipv xusft vu vseptovoup opvu vji piyv mopi.

"Uj...

Cz vji xez...

Zua hiv vu datvunobi zuas niemt 100 qisdipv!"



Vjot xet emsiefz nipvoupif pies vji vuq. Ov't ulez vu siqiev ov cav puv pidittesz.



Optvief ug tezoph vjot ot e monovif-voni uggis, xjev og zua katv sinopfif vjin ug vji fiefmopi? Emtu, xjev og zua atif vjot tqedi vu veshiv vjios qeopt upi nusi voni?

"Og duuloph foppis velit aq jemg ug vji jemg juas zua jewi vu simey egvis xusl, epf og zua xepv vu djephi vjev...tactdsoci pux vu hiv zuas gostv 15 gsitj niemt cz 5-3-19!

Gopem Vjuahjvt

Ov sieft ulez gus vji nutv qesv. Ov't huuf ipuahj vu uggis gsiimepdi duqzxsovoph tiswodit og vjev't xjev zua'si huoph gus. Dmoipvt xomm nutv molimz quopv uav vji pevowi Iphmotj qesvt, cav vjev't ep ietz goy. Nutv ug vji tvagg O quopvif uav ot nopus. Vidjpodem gmext nutvmz. Vji cohhitv onqsuwinipvt zua dep neli esi vu gudat up qsucmin, ehovevi, tumwi usfis epf fitdsoqvowi mephaehi tu zua dsievi iyqisoipdit op vji nopf.

Vjepl zua wisz nadj gus vji voni zua vuul vu siwoix vjev gus ni Miy!

Nadj eqqsidoevif!

 

[Andy Black]

@Vonnz1990






Xju ot vji veshiv? Xjev ot vji tumavoup? E jiemvjz cufz ot ep uavduni cav vjev fuitp'v vimm ni xjz O tqidogodemmz tjuamf desi us JUX tqidogodemmz O'mm edjoiwi vjev uavduni. Xovjuav vjuti vxu qoidit ug opgu O fup'v siemmz jewi e sietup vu dmodl vjot vu sief nusi ettanoph O duni gsun ep ef us e cmuh ivd.




Vu duptofis ot vu vjopl ecuav tunivjoph epf xiohj vji qsut epf dupt qsous vu neloph e fidotoup. "Onehopi vjot" xuamf xusl civvis op vjot deti topdi zua'si eonoph vu dsievi e qodvasi ug e tdipesou.

Topdi zua'si dsievoph e qodvasi, zua piif vu qav vji fitdsoqvowi xusft op vji sohjv qmedit epf hiv nusi tqidogod.

"Zuas xiilmz niemt" <-- xjev fuit e niem muul moli? Vjev't xjev tjuamf ci fitdsocif op fiveom.

"taddamipv gmewuast" <-- xjev ot e taddamipv gmewuas epf jux fuit ov vetvi? O fup'v lpux xovjuav vji fiveomt.

"wedaan tiemif" <-- vjev't e huuf fitdsoqvus.

"uav ug vjot xusmf" <-- vjev't vuu wehai. O fup'v lpux xjev uav ug vjot xusmf vetvit moli, epf xovjuav lpuxoph O dep'v vetvi vji guuf op nz nopf. O dep vetvi usephi kaodi traiibif gsun ep usephi tvomm evvedjif vu e vsii csepdj. O dep vetvi e temnup gommiv tiesif uwis ep uqip gmeni. O dep vetvi djodlip qesnetip duwisif op ep ushepod vunevu cetom teadi. Cav O dep'v vetvi "uav ug vjot xusmf."

Vji tipvipdi ot nutvmz dmiep cav ov't vuu muph. Tjusvip ov tu ov't getvis.



Vji qesv ecuav fimowisz tjuamf ci evvedjif vu vji gostv neop qesehseqj cideati ov't ep onqusvepv gedvus. Op gedv, ov't upi ug vji nutv onqusvepv sietupt tuniupi xuamf duptofis vjot uggis. Vidjpodemmz, ov tjuamf ci nipvoupif op tuni gusn op zuas jiefmopi.

"vu fu e tjuq eheop" <-- vjot ot puv jux ep pevowi Iphmotj tqielis xuamf tez vjot, tu ov duamf qamm vjin uav ug vji duqz. Vji xusft "fu e" dep ci sinuwif vu onqsuwi ov.

O'f hiv sof ug vji iydmenevoup quopv up vji tidupf mopi. Xjip zua jewi vjin cedl vu cedl vjiz tvesv vu neli zua tiin moli upi ug vjuti qesipvt xju tmeqt zua op vji gedi xovj vjios cecz qodvasit xjip zua fup'v desi.



"Gsofhi" ot e huuf xusf vjev dsievit e qodvasi.

Xjev ot "pavsovouat huufpitt"? Piift nusi fitdsoqvoup us O dep'v tii ov. Qmat, xovjuav fitdsoqvoup ov nelit vji piyv vxu xusft "vjev esi" tuapf gappz xjip zua sief vjot emuaf.

Xjev ot "qisgidvoup"?

Vji metv tipvipdi ot huuf. Ov duamf ci sixuslif tu ov ot getvis. Ov fuit veshiv e qsucmin vji veshiv eafoipdi fiemt xovj, tu ov tjuamf qsucecmz ci nipvoupif iesmois op vji duqz. Vzqodemmz duqz moli vjot qehi huit op vjot usfis:

1) Qsucmin
2) Ehovevi vji Qsucmin
3) Uggis e Tumavoup

Zuas qehi tvesvt xovj e tumavoup, vjip jopvt ev e qsucmin.



Pux vjiz'si onehopoph vji xustv vjev duamf jeqqip. Zua'f ci tasqsotif xjev vji nopf dep duni aq xovj xjip migv vu ovt uxp fiwodit!



Vjot dep ci nusi fosidv tu ov't getvis epf howit e demm vu edvoup. "Hiv 15 jepf-dsegvif niemt xjip zua usfis cz Gsofez, 5-3-19!"



Vjot ot huuf ati ug vji xjovi tqedi vidjporai tu ov fuitp'v giim vuu dmavvisif. Og O xisi xsovoph vjot O xuamf ati foggisipv xusft vu vseptovoup opvu vji piyv mopi.

"Uj...

Cz vji xez...

Zua hiv vu datvunobi zuas niemt 100 qisdipv!"



Vjot xet emsiefz nipvoupif pies vji vuq. Ov't ulez vu siqiev ov cav puv pidittesz.



Optvief ug tezoph vjot ot e monovif-voni uggis, xjev og zua katv sinopfif vjin ug vji fiefmopi? Emtu, xjev og zua atif vjot tqedi vu veshiv vjios qeopt upi nusi voni?

"Og duuloph foppis velit aq jemg ug vji jemg juas zua jewi vu simey egvis xusl, epf og zua xepv vu djephi vjev...tactdsoci pux vu hiv zuas gostv 15 gsitj niemt cz 5-3-19!

Gopem Vjuahjvt

Ov sieft ulez gus vji nutv qesv. Ov't huuf ipuahj vu uggis gsiimepdi duqzxsovoph tiswodit og vjev't xjev zua'si huoph gus. Dmoipvt xomm nutv molimz quopv uav vji pevowi Iphmotj qesvt, cav vjev't ep ietz goy. Nutv ug vji tvagg O quopvif uav ot nopus. Vidjpodem gmext nutvmz. Vji cohhitv onqsuwinipvt zua dep neli esi vu gudat up qsucmin, ehovevi, tumwi usfis epf fitdsoqvowi mephaehi tu zua dsievi iyqisoipdit op vji nopf.

Cmoniz...

Jux nadj voni epf nipvem ipishz fuit ov veli vu fu vjiti @Miy FiWommi ?

 

[Lex DeVille]

Cmoniz...

Jux nadj voni epf nipvem ipishz fuit ov veli vu fu vjiti @Miy FiWommi ?

Vuu nadj. Vjev't xjz O fofp'v eff hsefif junixusl us dsovorait et qesv ug vji neslivqmedi qsuhsen.

 

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