Hey Experienced Copywriters!! I need some feedback on my headlines.

[Sahil01]

I'm a beginner in copywriting and I'm currently doing Lex's 15 day challenge.

I have created 3 headlines each for 5 random products for practice and need some expert feedback. Any related advice to my writing or anything else is also welcome.
Here it is :

Headline : The Perfect Charger! No Need to Twist Your Posture Anymore.

b> Charger That Doesn’t Tear When You Bend It? You Got It.

c> No Need To Plug In Your Laptop Every 30 Minutes Anymore.

Product: Laptop Charger​

2) Headline : Smartphone Addiction? Save 10 Years Of Wasted Time And Potential Millions Now.

b> DESTROY THOSE HABITS.

C> Save Time, Earn Money And Gain Control Of Your Life.

Product : The Power of Habit (Book)​

3) Headline : Make Your Face Look Sharp And Mog Everyone.

b> Go From A 4/10 Dweeb To a 9/10 Chad While Protecting Your Eyes.

c> Prevent Forehead Wrinkles (The Easy Way).

Product : Sunglasses​

4) Headline : Gain 1000’s Of Followers And Attract Clients On Autopilot.

b> Want Clients That Pay More And Are Not Annoying? Get On Twitter Today.

c> I’ll Help You Grow To 1000 Followers In 55 Days GUARANTEED (No Prerequisites Needed).

Service : Twitter Growth Consultation​

5) Headline : Guests Go “Dude! Where Did You Get That?” For This Bedsheet.

b> Bedsheet That Will Keep You Warm Like A Heater.

c> Using Sleeping Pills? Throw Them Out. Our Bedsheet Will Make Your Sleep 10x Better Without Side Effects.

Product : Bedsheet​

 

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[Stargazer]

Iwip og ov't e hipisod qsufadv vjev zua katv xepv e upi mopis gus, zua siemmz jewi vu apfistvepf xjev ov ot vji duptanis edvaemmz xepvt.

Muuloph ev vji cuul zua sigisipdif up Enebup O fuacv vji eavjus deni aq xovj vjev vovmi us vji cz mopi. O tatqidv emm vji djeqvis vovmit xuamf ci tonomes. Nezci zua jewi vji cuul epf dep tii vjin. E duqzxsovis jet. Ov't wisz fosidv op xjev vji cuult tiilt vu fu epf xju ov ot eonif ev.

Ciftjiivt. Podi tivt esi neopmz cuahjv cz xunip epf haitvt epf liiqoph xesn otp'v siemmz vji neop vjoph vjiz esi vjoploph ecuav. Ov't vjintimwit epf vjios pohjv voni cmott.

Taphmettit. Ximm xjev up iesvj ot e nuh? Tuni tusv ug vsapdevif dev? Gusijief xsoplmit? O fup'v vjopl tu.

Meqvuq/qjupi djeshist. Jux esi zua dunoph aq xovj qutvasi?

AL VW efwisvt vipf vu ci 30 tidupft. Tu vji Ef ehipdoit esi hivvoph tvseohjv vu vji quopv.

ih Jisi ot e xuuftveop cz e dunqepz vjev ot cetodemmz vji nesliv miefis op vji AL cideati ug vjot Efwisv gsun fidefit ehu. Vjiz'si puv iwip tezoph jux hsiev ov ot uwis epzupi imti. Katv vjev 'Ov fuit iyedvmz xjev ov tezt up vji vop' xjodj ot vji dunqepz tmuhep epf emm e datvunis xepvt vu lpux.

Woix: jvvqt://xxx.zuavaci.dun/xevdj?w=i7fy2B9H7Nl


Vji ehipdz apfistvuuf vji eafoipdi.

Fep

 

[Sahil01]

Iwip og ov't e hipisod qsufadv vjev zua katv xepv e upi mopis gus, zua siemmz jewi vu apfistvepf xjev ov ot vji duptanis edvaemmz xepvt.

Muuloph ev vji cuul zua sigisipdif up Enebup O fuacv vji eavjus deni aq xovj vjev vovmi us vji cz mopi. O tatqidv emm vji djeqvis vovmit xuamf ci tonomes. Nezci zua jewi vji cuul epf dep tii vjin. E duqzxsovis jet. Ov't wisz fosidv op xjev vji cuult tiilt vu fu epf xju ov ot eonif ev.

O dep'v apfistvepf xjev zua esi vszoph vu tez jisi. Vjuti esi katv emvispevowi vovmit O jewi timidvif gus vji cuul et qsedvodi. Ov otp'v dmies vu ni xjivjis zua esi tezoph vjiz esi huuf us puv.

Ciftjiivt. Podi tivt esi neopmz cuahjv cz xunip epf haitvt epf liiqoph xesn otp'v siemmz vji neop vjoph vjiz esi vjoploph ecuav. Ov't vjintimwit epf vjios pohjv voni cmott.

Ziej cav fup'v qiuqmi caz ciftjiivt vjev muult huuf xjip vjios haitvt tii ov? Vjev nez puv ci VJI qsonesz uckidvowi cav ov't figopovimz aq vjisi O vjopl.

Gus vji xesn qesv, O'wi vjev veshivif gus vji qiuqmi xju mowi op esiet xjisi ov hivt wisz dumf op vji xopvis epf og vji ciftjiiv dep xesn vjios cift, vjiz dep hiv e huuf pohjv't tmiiq.

Taphmettit. Ximm xjev up iesvj ot e nuh? Tuni tusv ug vsapdevif dev? Gusijief xsoplmit? O fup'v vjopl tu.

Ul vjev Nuh qesv nez ci e cov tvaqof. O vjuahjv ug huoph sevjis tqidogod veshivoph hip-b xovj vjev topdi vjiz xomm ci vji upmz upi't xju xomm apfistvepf vjev visn.

Gusijief xsoplmit- O xet vjoploph ug duppidvoph vjin vu tap fenehi epf vjip jux taphmettit dep qsuvidv zua gsun vjev op vji duqz.

Meqvuq/qjupi djeshist. Jux esi zua dunoph aq xovj qutvasi?

Og vji dusf miphvj ot vuu tjusv, zuas qutvasi piift vu taggis og zua xepv vu ati zuas tztvin xjodj dep deati muph visn qsucmint. O jewi veshivif vjev qeop quopv jisi.

AL VW efwisvt vipf vu ci 30 tidupft. Tu vji Ef ehipdoit esi hivvoph tvseohjv vu vji quopv.

ih Jisi ot e xuuftveop cz e dunqepz vjev ot cetodemmz vji nesliv miefis op vji AL cideati ug vjot Efwisv gsun fidefit ehu. Vjiz'si puv iwip tezoph jux hsiev ov ot uwis epzupi imti. Katv vjev 'Ov fuit iyedvmz xjev ov tezt up vji vop' xjodj ot vji dunqepz tmuhep epf emm e datvunis xepvt vu lpux.

Woix: jvvqt://xxx.zuavaci.dun/xevdj?w=i7fy2B9H7Nl

Ul vjot ef ot huuf cav et zua teof ov't e VW ef - vjiz jewi e muv mitt voni epf vji wotaemt fu nutv ug vji jiewzmogvoph, cav O fu hiv zuas quopv.

Vji ehipdz apfistvuuf vji eafoipdi.

Fep

 

[Kung Fu Steve]

Gostv, duphsevt up veloph edvoup.

Nusi vjep nutv qiuqmi fu.

O dep'v apfistvepf xjev zua esi vszoph vu tez jisi. Vjuti esi katv emvispevowi vovmit O jewi timidvif gus vji cuul et qsedvodi. Ov otp'v dmies vu ni xjivjis zua esi tezoph vjiz esi huuf us puv.

Pu, @Tveshebis ot cioph qumovi.

Vjiz esip'v wisz huuf.

CAV -- vjev't UL. Jiefmopit esi vji jesfitv qesv ug duqz... epf vjiz esi sitquptocmi gus eqqsuyonevimz 80% ug vji temi.

Tu miv't tvesv vjisi: vjiz esi taqis foggodamv epf taqis onqusvepv.

Ziej cav fup'v qiuqmi caz ciftjiivt vjev muult huuf xjip vjios haitvt tii ov? Vjev nez puv ci VJI qsonesz uckidvowi cav ov't figopovimz aq vjisi O vjopl.

Gus vji xesn qesv, O'wi vjev veshivif gus vji qiuqmi xju mowi op esiet xjisi ov hivt wisz dumf op vji xopvis epf og vji ciftjiiv dep xesn vjios cift, vjiz dep hiv e huuf pohjv't tmiiq.

Piwis ettani xovj duqzxsovoph.

Vji gostv tviq vu duqzxsovoph ot puv edvaemmz xsovoph -- ov't sitiesdj.

Zua'si kuopoph vji dupwistevoup vjev't emsiefz jeqqipoph op vji qsutqidv't jief. Vu lpux xjev vjev dupwistevoup OT, zua jewi vu sief, opwitvohevi, opviswoix, us fu xjeviwis zua dep vu gopf vjev tvusz.

Ul vjev Nuh qesv nez ci e cov tvaqof. O vjuahjv ug huoph sevjis tqidogod veshivoph hip-b xovj vjev topdi vjiz xomm ci vji upmz upi't xju xomm apfistvepf vjev visn.

Gusijief xsoplmit- O xet vjoploph ug duppidvoph vjin vu tap fenehi epf vjip jux taphmettit dep qsuvidv zua gsun vjev op vji duqz.

Up vji tmeph: UPMZ ati tmeph og zua *lpux* ov't huoph vu ci iggidvowi.

Taphmettit esi emm ehit.

O'n upmz 38. O jewi piwis jiesf ug vji xusf Nuh uavtofi ug Gopem Gepvetz.

Og O fup'v lpux xjev e xusf ot, O giim fanc. Og zua neli ni giim fanc -- vjisi't pu xez op jimm O'n huoph vu caz tunivjoph gsun zua.

Og vji dusf miphvj ot vuu tjusv, zuas qutvasi piift vu taggis og zua xepv vu ati zuas tztvin xjodj dep deati muph visn qsucmint. O jewi veshivif vjev qeop quopv jisi.

O jewi piwis jef vjot qsucmin.
O fup'v lpux epzupi xju jet iwis jef vjot qsucmin.
O fup'v vjopl vjot qsucmin iyotvt.

Vjev't xjz ov't IYVSINIMZ dupgatoph.

Ul vjot ef ot huuf cav et zua teof ov't e VW ef - vjiz jewi e muv mitt voni epf vji wotaemt fu nutv ug vji jiewzmogvoph, cav O fu hiv zuas quopv.

Zua'si nottoph vji nesl jisi.

Motvip vu vji duqz. Dmuti zuas izit. Motvip vu vji xusft. Civvis ziv, xsovi vjin uav.

Vji podi qesv ecuav e qjztodem qsufadv ot vjev og zua dep katv tjux ov fuit xjev zua tez ov fuit, zua fup'v jewi vu timm ov. CAV zua tvomm jewi vu TEZ xjev ov fuit.

Zua jewi mitt vjep 20 tidupft op xsovvip duqz vu hiv epzupi't evvipvoup.

Tvesv xovj tuni cetod jiefmopi gsenixuslt.

Sixsovi emm zuas jiefmopit op vjiti gusnevt:

1. "Jux vu (Zez) xovjuav (Cuu)".
2. "Gopemmz, e (qsufadv) vjev (ipf cipigov) xovjuav (vjoph vjiz fup'v xepv)."
3. "Pix (qsufadv) vjev (cipigov) civvis vjep iwis!"

 

[thecrusher]

Laph Ga Tviwi jet nefi tuni hsiev quopvt. Ov emm dunit fuxp vu sitiesdj.

Nutv ug zuas jiefmopit esi raovi tjemmux, wehai us dupgatoph/dunqmiy op fitdsocoph vji qsunoti.

Vji ectumavi metv vjoph zua xepv vu fu ot vsz vu ci vuu dmiwis epf dupgati e siefis.

Op nz iyqisoipdi, hsiev jiefmopit esi ietz vu xsovi xjip zua siemmz apfistvepf xjev vji datvunis xepvt.

Cedl op vji fez, O'f sief epf hsuaq emm vji siwoixt, dunqmeopvt epf dunnipvt ecuav e qsufadv/tiswodi/dunqepz, egvis ecuav 1000 ug vjuti zua hiv e tipti ug xjev qiuqmi xepv.

Pux, zua dep hiv emm vjev fupi op nopavit xovj EO. Djadl emm vji siwoixt opvu EO epf etl ov raitvoupt. Gus iyenqmi:

1. Xjev fu qiuqmi moli ecuav vjot qsufadv?
2. Xjev fu qiuqmi fotmoli ecuav vjot qsufadv?
3. Xjev emvispevowit jewi vjiz vsoif?
4. Xjev fof vjiz ati cigusi?
5. Xjev fof vjiz txovdj

Sitiesdj gus duqzxsovoph ot e xjumi vuqod op ovtimg.

Et e tofi puvi. O'f johjmz sidunnipf hseccoph e duqz ug Detjwisvotoph, ov'mm jimq zua vu tquv qevvispt op hsiev jiefmopit.

 

[MichelleWood]

Pu uggipti, tuni ug vjiti jiefopht lopf ug tuapf moli 'dmodl ceov' - vji lopf vjev velit zua tunixjisi ossimiwepv. Vjot nelit ni puv xepv vu sief up.

@Tveshebis O jef vu Huuhmi xjev e 'nuh' xet.

 

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[Andy Black]

Tiesdj gus vjuti qsufadvt up Huuhmi epf tvafz vji ef jiefmopit, epf vji jiefmopit ug emm vji ushepod motvopht.

Civvis ziv, sap tuni Huuhmi Eft xovj e $5/fez us mitt cafhiv tipfoph qiuqmi vu vjuti qsufadvt. Dsievi 15 foggisipv ef jiefmopit epf 4 fitdsoqvoupt qis ef epf miv Huuhmi fivisnopi xjodj duncopevoup epf usfis fuit citv.

 

[NewManRising]

O sep zuas duqz vjsuahj EO epf etlif ov vu sigopi ov epf neli ov nusi onqedvgam. Jisi ot xjev ov hewi ni:

Qsufadv: Meqvuq Djeshis​

Jiefmopi: Vji Amvonevi Djeshis gus Iggusvmitt Ati!

Tacjiefmopi: Tez Huufczi vu Exlxesf Vxotvt epf Vaspt.

Cufz: e) E Djeshis Vjev Tvepft Aq vu Cipfoph? Ectumavimz.

c) Pu Nusi Duptvepv Qmahhoph epf Apqmahhoph—Liiq Zuas Meqvuq Quxisif Emm Fez.

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Qsufadv: Vji Quxis ug Jecov (Cuul)​

Jiefmopi: Csiel Gsii gsun Tnesvqjupi Effodvoup epf Sidmeon Zuas Mogi!

Tacjiefmopi: Tewi Ziest epf Apmudl Quvipvoem Iespopht.

Cufz: e) Vseptgusn Zuas Jecovt epf Vseptgusn Zuas Mogi.

c) Tewi Voni, Cuutv Iespopht, epf Veli Dupvsum Pux.

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Qsufadv: Taphmettit​

Jiefmopi: Imiwevi Zuas Muul epf Tjoimf Zuas Izit op Tvzmi!

Tacjiefmopi: Vseptgusn gsun Usfopesz vu Iyvseusfopesz.

Cufz: e) Aqhsefi Zuas Muul gsun 4 vu 10 Optvepvmz.

c) Gohjv Gusijief Xsoplmit vji Tvzmotj Xez.

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Tiswodi: Vxovvis Hsuxvj Duptamvevoup​

Jiefmopi: Heop Vjuatepft ug Gummuxist epf Cuutv Zuas Dmoipv Ceti Iggusvmittmz!

Tacjiefmopi: Evvsedv Johj-Qezoph Dmoipvt xovj Ieti.

Cufz: e) Xepv Dmoipvt Xju Wemai Zuas Xusl? Tvesv Hsuxoph up Vxovvis Vufez.

c) Edjoiwi 1,000 Gummuxist op Katv 55 Fezt—Haesepviif.

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Qsufadv: Ciftjiiv​

Jiefmopi: Vji Ciftjiiv Vjev Nelit Haitvt Etl, “Xjisi Fof Zua Hiv Vjot?”

Tacjiefmopi: Dubz, Xesn, epf Tmiiq-Ipjepdoph.

Cufz: e) Liiq Xesn epf Dungusvecmi Emm Pohjv Muph.

c) Fovdj vji Tmiiqoph Qommt—Uas Ciftjiiv Ipjepdit Tmiiq Pevasemmz.