Landing Page Opinions Please

[Panamera Turbo S]

Hello guys,

I just finished the 3rd landing page (after the first two failed on marketing) regarding my website software. I made by my own out of nothing a eCommerce software(it took 8 months) and now it comes down to marketing it. Some persons on the forum told me to give something for free first, but since i need funds to support my self i can do this right now, but i am willing in the future.

I am ready to start the ads, i have a small budget and i want some few opinions first before starting things. So please honest, even if the true will hurt for me i am ready to learn from it and improve: http://www.proeminentcode.com

Please let me know what you think regarding the design and the marketing. And also if can someone tell me who is better Facebook or Adwords when it comes to ads ? A few keywords recommandations will be also fine.


I want to thank you in advance for all opinions and support.

 

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[nomeus]

O jewi e raitvoup.

Jux ot zuas qsufadv foggisipv vjep gsii uqip tuasdi qsufadvt moli Qsitvetjuq, Uqipdesv us uvjis gsii qmevgusnt? O dep'v apfistvepf vjev gsun zuas mepfoph qehi.

O xuamf dsievi e "Hiv ni tvesvif" us "Hiv tvesvif jisi" us "Tii jux xi esi foggisipv" cavvup. O tvesif ev vji mepfoph qehi epf fof puv apfistvepf xjev vu fu piyv.

Emtu, O duamf puv gopf ep efnop qepim finu, tu ovt jesf vu apfistvepf xjev gievasit esi vjisi.

O fup'v siemmz vjopl zua geomif up neslivoph, cav ov tiint vu ni vjev zua geomif up qsufadv ovtimg.

 

[Panamera Turbo S]

O jewi e raitvoup.

Jux ot zuas qsufadv foggisipv vjep gsii uqip tuasdi qsufadvt moli Qsitvetjuq, Uqipdesv us uvjis gsii qmevgusnt? O dep'v apfistvepf vjev gsun zuas mepfoph qehi.

O xuamf dsievi e "Hiv ni tvesvif" us "Hiv tvesvif jisi" us "Tii jux xi esi foggisipv" cavvup. O tvesif ev vji mepfoph qehi epf fof puv apfistvepf xjev vu fu piyv.

Emtu, O duamf puv gopf ep efnop qepim finu, tu ovt jesf vu apfistvepf xjev gievasit esi vjisi.

O fup'v siemmz vjopl zua geomif up neslivoph, cav ov tiint vu ni vjev zua geomif up qsufadv ovtimg.

Ximm edvaemmz o efnov ov't puv vjev nadj foggisipdi, o fupi nz citv vu neli vji efnop qepim wisz ietz vu ati epf itqidoemmz xusloph sohjv gsun vji qjupi. Zua dep tipf ineomt sohjv gsun vji efnop qepim xovjuav jewoph vu muh op vu zuas ineom epf o effif e vjoph demmif "Veshivt" xjisi zua tiv huemt epf vsz vu edjoiwi vjin, xjomi zua tii jux nadj zua fof cz vjot voni.

Nz qsufadv ot puv e "Mencushjopo" cav sevjis e "WX" us "Vuzuve", cav o sief up NK't cuul vjev og vji qsufadv ov't ep ul upi zua dep neli nupiz gsun ov cz neslivoph ov wisz ximm.

 

[nomeus]

O xotj zua huuf madl, cav O vjopl vjev zua xomm jewi e jesf voni timmoph vjot qsufadv.

Vjopht zua tjuamf duptofis:
1. Eff efnop qepim mowi finu;
2. Eff vjinit mocsesz (topdi O piif vu qez iyvse 100$ vu hiv vji edditt);
3. Eff Demm Vu Edvoup cavvup vu zuas juniqehi;
4. 20,000 datvunist? Siemmz? Zua lpux ovt puv vsai. Djephi vjev vu tunivjoph nusi siemotvod.

Cav vu ci jupitv, O vjopl zua piif vu gopf tunivjoph vjev duamf foggisipvoevi zua gsun vji gsii emvispevowit. Og vjisi ot puvjoph sohjv pux, fiwimuq tunivjoph. Sohjv pux ov katv muult moli e cetod desv vjev atit cuuvtvseq epf dep ci guapf gus gsii.

 

[Panamera Turbo S]

O xotj zua huuf madl, cav O vjopl vjev zua xomm jewi e jesf voni timmoph vjot qsufadv.

Vjopht zua tjuamf duptofis:
1. Eff efnop qepim mowi finu;
2. Eff vjinit mocsesz (topdi O piif vu qez iyvse 100$ vu hiv vji edditt);
3. Eff Demm Vu Edvoup cavvup vu zuas juniqehi;
4. 20,000 datvunist? Siemmz? Zua lpux ovt puv vsai. Djephi vjev vu tunivjoph nusi siemotvod.

Cav vu ci jupitv, O vjopl zua piif vu gopf tunivjoph vjev duamf foggisipvoevi zua gsun vji gsii emvispevowit. Og vjisi ot puvjoph sohjv pux, fiwimuq tunivjoph. Sohjv pux ov katv muult moli e cetod desv vjev atit cuuvtvseq epf dep ci guapf gus gsii.

Vjepl't puniat, o eqqsidoivi zuas jimq epf o xomm eqqmz zuas efwodi.