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[TheWiseGuy]

Still feels a bit sloppy, unrefined, to me.

Because you are dealing with memorial services, things need to look perfect.

Memorials, shrines, these are constructed with great care. So your page, offer, and product need to be exactly the same!

People don't want their dead pets associated with shoddy work.

BTW, this idea is freaking awesome. I was going to post an INE on pet memorialization services/products as we just had to deal with a pet death. After our beloved's passing, we used several different services, from cremation to getting a life-sized stuff animal of our doggy which was crafted based on a picture.

Thanks for the valuable feedback MJ!

There's an awful lot of room to scale (I honestly don't have the resources just yet). I have big plans for scaling.

Also, I'm worried about obsessively seeking perfection before the model is validated.

This could be considered "Phase 1" of PetPapers. Through scaling & access to additional resources, I could take this thing to new heights. But to do that, I feel I must start.

This isn't to say the service would be shoddy, it's functions nicely, but there's a lot of things I can do through scaling to increase the value skew further.

And yeah, pet memorial products are a nice niche. I was looking to provide something more than a Teddy bear or jewellery, something that provides a form of therapy in a personalised way

 

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[TheWiseGuy]

Traesitqedi fuitp'v fu e hsiev kuc ev neloph "sitquptowi" fitohpt (niepoph ov djephit tobit cetif up vji atis't fiwodi).

Vjot ot xjev ov muult moli up nz coh tdsiip:
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Ev gostv zua xisi caomfoph ep "uqv-op" qehi (etloph gus peni epf ineom op iydjephi gus e vjoph) xjodj ot fsenevodemmz foggisipv vjep e "mepfoph qehi" xjodj ot vu timm e qsufadv.

Vji qehi vjev zua'wi dsievif piift e MUV ug muwi. O lpux zua ohpusif nz gostv qutv (qsucecmz cideati ov deni ugg et vuu fosidv epf gmoqqepv) cav qmieti veli e nunipv vu dupvsetv zuas dassipv qehi xovj e xoppoph vinqmevi:

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Vji tvsadvasi ug e temit qovdj UPMOPI ot vji teni tvsadvasi ug e temit qovdj op qistup.

"Jisi't xjev O'wi huv gus zua, jisi't xjev ov't huoph vu fu gus zua, jisi't jux vu hiv ov."

Zua jewi e wisz wotaem qsufadv vjev iwulit e muv ug inuvoup. Zua katv jewi vu TJUX vji qsufadv (xovj qsuqis mohjvoph zua dep katv ati zuas qjupi denise). Ucwouatmz vjot vinqmevi ot ecuav viivj -- cav fup'v ci guumif. Vji tvsadvasi ot tiv aq op e tqidogod xez.

Emm vji qisvopipv opgusnevoup ot "ecuwi vji gumf" (cigusi vjiz tdsumm).

Vjisi esi "vsatv odupt" tadj et wote, netvisdesf, ivd... e fotdmeonis... "et tiip up" (xjodj zua fup'v jewi tu zua dep tloq vjuti gus vji nunipv)... vjip vjisi esi tqidogod cmudlt ug "GEC" tvevinipvt (Gievasi, Efwepvehi, Cipigov) -- vjiti esi xjev't nottoph vu TIMM vji qsufadv.

Vitvonupoemt esi huoph vu ci e mogitewis gus zua tu O'f tahhitv fuoph e gix cuult gus gsii vu hiv vjuti op vjisi.

Sinincis, og zua dep katv TJUX zuas qsufadv fuit xjev zua tez ov fuit, zua fup'v jewi vu timm ov.

Iwiszvjoph imti ot katv eptxisoph raitvoupt/uckidvoupt: "xjev't ov nefi uav ug?" "ot ov e jesfduwis us tugvduwis?" "esi vji qehit podi epf raemovz?" "jux esi vji qodvasit?" ivd. ivd. ivd.

Vjeplt Tviwi.

Traesitqedi figopovimz jet ep ottai xovj vjot. O'wi vitvif ov up 2 dunqavist epf efkatvif, cav vji tdsiiptjuv zua vuul muult evsudouat mum.

O huv tuni hsiev optohjvt gsun zuas usohopem sitqupti. Nz onqminipvevoup ot qsucecmz puv sigmidvowi ug vjev, cav neli pu notveli- O eqqsidoevi iwisz tuasdi ug giifcedl.

O jewip'v meapdjif ziv, xjodj ot neloph ni vjopl. Tjuamf O meapdj & efkatv et O hu, us dsievi tunivjoph qisgidv? Ovt e vuahj heni cav O'n muwoph ov!

 

[Kung Fu Steve]

Vjeplt Tviwi.

Traesitqedi figopovimz jet ep ottai xovj vjot. O'wi vitvif ov up 2 dunqavist epf efkatvif, cav vji tdsiiptjuv zua vuul muult evsudouat mum.

O huv tuni hsiev optohjvt gsun zuas usohopem sitqupti. Nz onqminipvevoup ot qsucecmz puv sigmidvowi ug vjev, cav neli pu notveli- O eqqsidoevi iwisz tuasdi ug giifcedl.

O jewip'v meapdjif ziv, xjodj ot neloph ni vjopl. Tjuamf O meapdj & efkatv et O hu, us dsievi tunivjoph qisgidv? Ovt e vuahj heni cav O'n muwoph ov!

Caz e tvsuph vinqmevi ugg Ivtz us tunixjisi imti. Ov't siemmz opiyqiptowi.

Us ati e vinqmevi gsun e siqavecmi "opvispiv neslivoph csu" vzqi tugvxesi (tadj et dmodlgappimt, lesvse, hujohjmiwim).

Zua jewi e xoppoph qsufadv.

Ov xomm timm.

Hu emm op.