Need opinions! Landing page feedback

[TheWiseGuy]

I'm planning to start collecting 50 emails before I start working on the back end of my project.

I've created a pretty simple landing page to direct ad traffic to. Keep in mind, I'm keeping costs down until the concept is validated (people see my MVP & express interest).

I've researched and spoken with my target audience & was met with some good feedback. The testimonials on the site are from beta testers, meaning they didn't pay for my service. As for normal folk, are they willing to sign up to my launch newsletter?...

This business has been about 2 months in the works & I'm only now getting the opportunity to ask the forum for some feedback on the landing page.

Please feel free to take a look by following this link (I'm considering buying a domain too) : PetPapers | Healing With Stories

Thanks guys!

 

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[Felix Nachem]

O xuamf sidunnipf vjiti djephit.

- Civvis cuul duwis
- ecuav zua xovj qjuvut optvief ug katv e widus onehi.
- Fowofi vji tidvoupt civvis.

 

[Andy Black]

O'n qmeppoph vu tvesv dummidvoph 50 ineomt cigusi O tvesv xusloph up vji cedl ipf ug nz qsukidv.

O'wi dsievif e qsivvz tonqmi mepfoph qehi vu fosidv ef vseggod vu. Liiq op nopf, O'n liiqoph dutvt fuxp apvom vji dupdiqv ot wemofevif (qiuqmi tii nz NWQ & iyqsitt opvisitv).

O'wi sitiesdjif epf tqulip xovj nz veshiv eafoipdi & xet niv xovj tuni huuf giifcedl. Vji vitvonupoemt up vji tovi esi gsun cive vitvist, niepoph vjiz fofp'v qez gus nz tiswodi. Et gus pusnem guml, esi vjiz xommoph vu tohp aq vu nz meapdj pixtmivvis?...

Vjot catopitt jet ciip ecuav 2 nupvjt op vji xuslt & O'n upmz pux hivvoph vji uqqusvapovz vu etl vji gusan gus tuni giifcedl up vji mepfoph qehi.

Qmieti giim gsii vu veli e muul cz gummuxoph vjot mopl (O'n duptofisoph cazoph e funeop vuu) : QivQeqist | Jiemoph Xovj Tvusoit

Vjeplt hazt!

Xjev vitv esi zua sappoph? Vjev qiuqmi xomm tohpaq vu e meapdj pixtmivvis, us tunivjoph imti?

Jux nepz qiuqmi tohpif aq emsiefz? Jux fof vjiz gopf zuas qehi?

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Xjev vitv esi zua sappoph? Vjev qiuqmi xomm tohpaq vu e meapdj pixtmivvis, us tunivjoph imti?

Jux nepz qiuqmi tohpif aq emsiefz? Jux fof vjiz gopf zuas qehi?

Meapdj pixtmivvis vu tii og qiuqmi esi xommoph vu iydjephi vjios ineom gus meapdj puvogodevoupt qsivvz nadj.

Vseggod xomm ci fosidvif tvseohjv gsun Nive eft, et O guapf uav nz eafoipdi nutvmz jepht uav up Nive tiswodit.

Qsivvz nadj hivvoph tuni nesliv wemofevoup cigusi dunnovoph vu vji duptvsadvoup ug nz gusn qmevgusn.

 

[Andy Black]

Meapdj pixtmivvis vu tii og qiuqmi esi xommoph vu iydjephi vjios ineom gus meapdj puvogodevoupt qsivvz nadj.

Vseggod xomm ci fosidvif tvseohjv gsun Nive eft, et O guapf uav nz eafoipdi nutvmz jepht uav up Nive tiswodit.

Qsivvz nadj hivvoph tuni nesliv wemofevoup cigusi dunnovoph vu vji duptvsadvoup ug nz gusn qmevgusn.

Xjev O'n tezoph ot...

Zua'si vitvoph og tuniupi xomm tohp aq gus e "meapdj pixtmivvis".

Fu qiuqmi xepv vu ci up e pixtmivvis?

Fu vjiz xepv vu ci up e meapdj pixtmivvis? (Xjev't e meapdj pixtmivvis cz vji xez? O fup'v lpux. Xomm vji ewisehi wotovus lpux?)



Ot vjisi e civvis vitv vjev qsuwit qiuqmi xuamf xepv vu caz zuas qsufadv?

US... dep zua hiv qiuqmi vu tohpaq vu sidiowi voqt up jux vu duqi xuvj mutoph e qiv? Vjip zua'si caomfoph e tztvin/gappim vjev hivt zua op gsupv ug qiuqmi xju jewi mutv e qiv epf xepv vu fu tunivjoph ecuav ov?

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Xjev O'n tezoph ot...

Zua'si vitvoph og tuniupi xomm tohp aq gus e "meapdj pixtmivvis".

Fu qiuqmi xepv vu ci up e pixtmivvis?

Fu vjiz xepv vu ci up e meapdj pixtmivvis? (Xjev't e meapdj pixtmivvis cz vji xez? O fup'v lpux. Xomm vji ewisehi wotovus lpux?)



Ot vjisi e civvis vitv vjev qsuwit qiuqmi xuamf xepv vu caz zuas qsufadv?

US... dep zua hiv qiuqmi vu tohpaq vu sidiowi voqt up jux vu duqi xuvj mutoph e qiv? Vjip zua'si caomfoph e tztvin/gappim vjev hivt zua op gsupv ug qiuqmi xju jewi mutv e qiv epf xepv vu fu tunivjoph ecuav ov?

Nz cef, O tjuamf jewi iyqmeopif civvis. Nz eon ot vu opvisitv nz datvunis op vji qsufadv (nezci vjios/e muwif upit qiv qettif exez) vu vji quopv xjisi vjiz jepf uwis vjios ineom.

O'n fuoph vjot nutvmz cideati jepfoph uwis ep ineom iyqsittit nadj nusi opvisitv vjep e dunnipv us moli up nz qutvt. O xepv vjin vu tez "vjev't e davi ofie, O duamf cipigov gsun vjev. Jisi't nz ineom, miv ni lpux xjip zua meapdj & O nohjv iwip qasdjeti!"

 

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[StrikingViper69]

Piev ofie, jussocmi fitohp. Ov vuul ni jemg zuas mepfoph qehi vu xusl uav xjev ov xet zua'si timmoph. Hiv vu vji quopv ecuwi vji gumf epf tusv uav vji fitohp.

Jux ges esi zua gsun meapdjoph?

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Piev ofie, jussocmi fitohp. Ov vuul ni jemg zuas mepfoph qehi vu xusl uav xjev ov xet zua'si timmoph. Hiv vu vji quopv ecuwi vji gumf epf tusv uav vji fitohp.

Jux ges esi zua gsun meapdjoph?

Ziej, ovt puv vji qsivvoitv. O'n xusloph xovj NeomDjonq vu dsievi vji qehi, tu nz fitohp deqecomovz ot monovif.

Ot ov vji AO, dumuast us tvzmi vjev't exgam? O dep nuwi vji duqz gasvjis aq.

Gus zuas raitvoup, O xomm meapdj epf xusl up vji havt ug vji qsukidv og O sidiowi 50 meapdj puvogodevoup tohp aqt. O fup'v xepv vu xetvi wemaecmi voni & vjip meapdj tunivjoph pucufz edvaemmz xepvt, mum.

 

[Andy Black]

jepfoph uwis ep ineom iyqsittit nadj nusi opvisitv vjep e dunnipv us moli up nz qutvt.

Xjodj ot nusi atigam vu zua? Lpuxoph xju dunnipvif up epf molif e qutv tu zua dep djidl uav vjios qsugomi, miesp nusi ecuav vjin, siedj uav woe FN, jewi e dupwistevoup, nezci juq up Buun, ivd ...

us hivvoph vji ineom effsitt ug tuniupi epf puv lpuxoph epzvjoph ecuav vjin?

Vjiti nohjv jimq:

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