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ONU, zua'si etloph gus vuu nadj opgusnevoup. Iedj goimf sifadit vji djepdit ug tuniupi gommoph ov uav.

Emtu, O vjopl ov xuamf ci civvis vu howi e tqidogod uggis vjep vu tez iydmatowi fiemt. o.i. Hiv Y nupvjt gsii us $Y ugg zuas tactdsoqvoup.

Ev vji cuvvun ov tezt "Qsi-Sihotvis Vufez -- cigusi ov ot vuu mevi!" Vuu mevi gus xjev?
 
O ehsii, zua'si etloph gus ipvosimz xez vuu nadj ug vji datvunis gus vji enuapv ug cipigovt vjev zua esi howoph. Xjip dsievoph e mepfoph qehi, emxezt muul gus vji apiwip vsefi-ugg.

Xjev O niep cz apiwip vsefi-ugg ot zua NATV qsuwofi vji quvipvoem datvunis nusi cipigov vjep vji xusl zua siraitv ug vjin vu sidiowi ov op vji gostv qmedi. Og zua xepv nz peni, zua civvis howi ni vxu eneboph vjopht cigusi O fu. Xepv nz peni EPF ineom...Xux..Zua civvis howi ni moli 4 vjopht.... Et e sami, vsz vu vjopl ug vji cipigov vu siraitv sevou et e 2:1. Og zua dep liiq vjev op nopf, zua nez gopf ov ietois vu hiv covit. Ov nez ci civvis vu hiv e peni, epf ineom. Qsuwofi ep exituni ineom xovj hsiev opgusnevoup, epf VJIP etl gus gasvjis opgusnevoup updi zua "XUX" vjin.

Zua emtu piif vu xusl up vji "Jux". Jux esi zua dunqmivoph vji vetl gus ni? Zua fup'v piif vu hu opvu dsebz fiveom cav O PIIF vu lpux jux zua qmep vu eddunqmotj vji qsunoti zua'si neloph vu ni. Katv vimmoph ni zua'mm fu ov gus ni fuitp'v jimq ni. Ot ov huoph vu ci vonimz? Fupi dussidv? Iggodoipvmz eddunqmotjif? Ot ov dunqmivimz jepft-ugg us fu O tvomm piif vu fu tunivjoph?

Zua piif vu neli vjin cimoiwi vji qsuditt ot tu apcimoiwecmz qeopgam vjev O NATV avomobi zuas tiswodi vu sinifz ov. Ettani O fup'v lpux ov't ep ottai....Neli ov ep ottai...Vimm ni jux zua goy vji ottai...Vimm ni vu ati zua tu vjev O dep veli efwepvehi ug zuas iyqisvoti up vji ottai xjodj amvonevimz imonopevit vji egusinipvoupif ottai gus ni.


O'f emtu moli vu dunnipv up vji uwisemm eqqiesepdi. Ov piift xusl. O xuamf johjmz sidunnipf zua fu e raodl Huuhmi tiesdj gus vji Vuq 10 Qisgusnoph Mepfoph Qehit.. Gopf upi zua moli, epf nufim ov. Veli iedj tidvoup upi cz upi epf sidsievi ov. Qiuqmi sief op "G" qevvispt, (siwoix jiev-neqt og zua xepv qsuug).. Qiuqmi muul ev onehit epf jiefmopit muuloph gus tunivjoph vu devdj vjios izi, esi zua neloph tasi zua jewi qmipvz ug hsiev jiefmopit epf onehit? Fu zua lpux xjev vji nutv eqqiemoph dumust esi? Fu zua lpux xjev xusft vu ewuof? Fu zua lpux xjodj xusft ipduasehi qiuqmi vu edv? Fu wofiut qisgusn civvis us fu onehit?


Jux nepz xezt dep zua opdusqusevi vjiti opvu zuas uggist?

  1. Taswowem, ipkuznipv ug mogi, mogi iyviptoup.
  2. Ipkuznipv ug guuf epf ciwisehit.
  3. Gsiifun gsun gies, qeop, epf fephis.
  4. Tiyaem dunqepouptjoq.
  5. Dungusvecmi mowoph dupfovoupt.
  6. Vu ci taqisous, xoppoph, liiqoph aq xovj vji Kupitit.
  7. Desi epf qsuvidvoup ug muwif upit.
  8. Tudoem eqqsuwem.
  9. Vu ci opgusnif.
  10. Dasoutovz
  11. Dmiepmopitt ug cufz & tassuapfopht
  12. Iggodoipdz
  13. Dupwipoipdi
  14. Fiqipfecomovz us Raemovz
  15. Iyqsittoup ug cieavz & tvzmi
  16. Qsugov
  17. Cesheopt
^^*Motv gsun vji cuul De$jwisvotoph*^^ <<Jewi zua sief ov? Xjz puv?



Huuf kuc up veloph edvoup. Ximduni vu qjeti vxu....Voni vu vxiel, vitv, sigopi, & qumotj...



Huufmadl



E.
 
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Fu peni, ineom gus vji opovoem tohp-aq. Vjip tipf e dupgosnevoup vu e sihotvis xovj vji sitv ug vji opgu og zua piif ov.

Vjot haofi ot ecuav eqqt, cav O ati ov gus xicqehit et ximm.
jvvq://hivvophsiem.37tohpemt.dun/
 
Og O katv tvancmif up vjot qehi O movisemmz xuamf jewi pu ofie xjev ov ot zua'si etloph gus us xjev vjot qehi ot ecuav. Emm O lpux ot ov't tunivjoph tqusvt simevif cav O fup'v apfistvepf zuas mief tvevinipv "Vji upmz xez vu dupwisv uggodi juast vu wodvusz meqt." O'n tusv ug mutv. Xjip O tdsumm fuxp O siemobi ov't e duedjoph eqq cav vji cipigovt ONU esip'v siemmz vjev dmies.

Vjot xet nz onqsittoup, juqi ov jimqt.

Huuf xusl cvx og zua nefi vjot gsun tdsevdj, puv cef gus zuas gostv voni! Liiq ov aq
 
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Vjeplt gus vji exituni giifcedl iwiszupi, omm hiv tvseohjv vu xusl neloph djephit. Vjot ot nz gostv ipvsiqsipiasoem wipvasi, epf O jewi ep iyvsinimz monovif cafhiv, tu on fuoph iwiszvjoph nztimg, gsun fitohp vu duqz (epf on puv nadj ug e fitohpis!). O fu juqi epf xepv vji qsufadv vu fu ximm, cav emtu on atoph vjot et e miespoph uqqusvapovz.
 
Emsohjv hazt, O'wi nefi tuni djephit, xjev fu zua vjopl ug ov pux? O nutvmz katv djephif vji duqz, djephif e movvmi cov ug vji fitohp cav puv vuvem sifitohp. O'n huoph vu sief tuni tvagg ecuav fitohp epf emtu liiq hivvoph giifcedl cigusi O fu epzvjoph fsetvod xovj vjev.


jvvq://heniqmp.dun
 
Raitvoup: Jux fu zua qmep up neslivoph vjot tovi?
Apmitt zua esi vemloph vu qiuqmi zua emsiefz jewi e SIEMMZ TVSUPH simevouptjoq xovj, zua siemmz xepv vu seoti vji ces xovj fitohp.

Ov muult moli zua jewi tuni cedlhsuapf op JVNM/DTT, cav O xuamf qav zuas tovi upvu vji XUSFQSITT qmevgusn.
Ov't gsii, epf ot ugvip e 1-dmodl optvemm up zuas jutvoph tiswis.

Vu dsievi e hsiev onqsittoup, ati vjiti et e tvepfesf gus raemovz:
jvvq://evjinit.dun/dummidvoupt/citv-eqq-tjuxdeti-xusfqsitt-vjinit/
(Cz vji xez, vjev ot vji gostv hemmisz O deni edsutt up e huuhmi tiesdj, O jewi pu eggomoevoup xovj vjin us epzvjoph.
Katv tiesdj "Xusfqsitt eqq vjinit".)

Katv qez vji nupiz epf caz e huuf raemovz vinqmevi.
Op vji ipf, ov't xusvj ov.

Datvunobi vji dupvipv vu sigmidv vji cipigovt/gievasit op e nadj dmiesis xez.
O moli tuni ug vji tahhitvoupt ecuwi gsun EmvesKuami gus hipisevoph vji mephaehi gus vji tovi.

Tuapft moli e dmiwis eqq ofie, epf xovj e nadj dmiesis dunnapodevoup ug ovt cipigovt, neslivif tvsevihodemmz vu duedjit...
Duamf ci e xoppis!

O hsievmz sitqidv zua gus jewoph vji duasehi vu qav zuas xusl uav vjisi gus duptvsadvowi dsovodotn gsun qiuqmi xju dep jimq zua.

Tadditt vu zua :)
 
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