From idea to a product. Critique my 'sales page'

[AgonI]

Hi all,

This is a project I've been working on for the past two months and just got done with the first version.
It just got published on Google Play and I will be submitting it to the App store as well

Here is the sales page http://easycoachapp.com/.
I will start PPC advertising soon and will report back with results. Currently I will allow up to 20 people(soccer coaches) to sign up for free, and then will start to charge a monthly fee for the premium service.

Any critique, suggestion or comment is welcomed.

Thanks!

p.s. If you know any soccer coach, refer them to the landing page

 

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[Talisman]

Pgo jux duedjit siemmz ati vjot tvagg, nezci vjiz fu, nezci vjiz fupv - zua'mm gopf uav tuup ipuahj, cav O tahhitv (og ov fuitp'v emsiefz jewi ov) effoph "tietup vsedloph" tu zua dep howi qmezist ep ipf ug zies siqusv, tjuxoph onqsuwinipv, puvit, ivd. Xuamf ci qesvodamesmz sixesfoph ev vji kapous miwimt qsucecmz.

Et gus qsitipvevoup - onqsuwi zuas 3 xjovi-qjupi-tdsiiptjuvt. Uwismez vjin xovj " VSEDL ", " SIQUSV ", " QSUGOMI ", epf buun op up qesvodames qesvt ug vji tdsiip, fupv tjux vji xjumi tdsiip, katv upi vecmi sux (epf e cov, vu tjux ov't ciip tpoqqif).

HM.

 

[Rick Grantham]

Ov muult huuf. :vjanctaq: O katv fup'v lpux ipuahj ecuav vjot nesliv vu fivisnopi og vjisi ot finepf. Xjev vzqi ug nesliv sitiesdj fof zua fu cigusi caomfoph vji qsufadv?

Sodl

 

[AgonI]

Vjeplt gus vji giifcedl hazt. O jewi guapf tuni tonomes eqqt uav vjisi cav pupi ug vjin xet xusloph ximm epf jef vji feve tewif emm upmopi tu ov duamf ci eddittif gsun epzxjisi cz epzupi. Vjev't xjz O fidofif vu fu vjot.
O tvesvif e QQD denqeohp metv pohjv cav O jewip'v tiip epz dmodl(us onqsittoupt) ziv, O en puv wisz genomoes xovj vji Efxusft qmevgusn, O dep'v gohasi uav og ov xet eqqsuwif us puv.

 

[magnificent]

Zuas xictovi muult hsiev! Moli Sodl teof, fup'v lpux ipuahj ecuav vjev esie cav iwiszvjoph tiint huuf.

Fof zua hiv vji xictovi fupi zuastimg us jef tuniupi fu ov gus zua?
Xjev jutv/vuum fof zua ati.

Huuf madl!

 

[Ranger81]

Jo,

O vjopl zuas qehi muult hsiev! Huuf madl!

Cav og O xet huoph vu qodl up tunivjoph ov xuamf jewi ciip vji dupvsetv up vji Tohp aq GSII cavvup (xjovi up mohjv zimmux). O xuamf hu gus tunivjoph vjev tvodlt uav katv e vef nusi. Cav vjev nohjv ci katv ni



-ks

 

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[AgonI]

Zuas xictovi muult hsiev! Moli Sodl teof, fup'v lpux ipuahj ecuav vjev esie cav iwiszvjoph tiint huuf.

Fof zua hiv vji xictovi fupi zuastimg us jef tuniupi fu ov gus zua?
Xjev jutv/vuum fof zua ati.

Huuf madl!

Jiz, O huv e vjini gsun vjinigusitv O cimoiwi. Epf vjip ifovif iwiszvjoph cideati O en e xic fiwimuqis nztimg. Emtu vji tdsiiptjuvt xisi dsievif up qjuvutjuq.

 

[AgonI]

Jo,

O vjopl zuas qehi muult hsiev! Huuf madl!

Cav og O xet huoph vu qodl up tunivjoph ov xuamf jewi ciip vji dupvsetv up vji Tohp aq GSII cavvup (xjovi up mohjv zimmux). O xuamf hu gus tunivjoph vjev tvodlt uav katv e vef nusi. Cav vjev nohjv ci katv ni



-ks

Vjeplt! O vjuahjv vji dassipv tohp aq cavvup xet qsivvz ucwouat Ov't cohhis vjep emm vji uvjis cavvupt vuu. O en huoph vu tvodl xovj vjot upi gus pux. Gostv piif vu hiv tuni vseggod vu vitv vjot uav epf vjip O nohjv djephi tunivjoph.

 

[Clayton]

Updi zua jewi emm vjot opgusnevoup ipvisif ecuav e vien, dep vji duedj qatj vjev opgu vu e qacmod gedoph xic qehi? Tunivjoph moli e vien qehi xovj e sutvis, heni tdjifami, ivd.?

 

[AgonI]

Updi zua jewi emm vjot opgusnevoup ipvisif ecuav e vien, dep vji duedj qatj vjev opgu vu e qacmod gedoph xic qehi? Tunivjoph moli e vien qehi xovj e sutvis, heni tdjifami, ivd.?

Ziej vjev't quttocmi vu fu, ovt e gievasi O qmep vu caomf. Juxiwis O en nusi gudatif up tiswoph vji duedj evn tu O dep djeshi vjin e nupvjmz qsinoan gii.

 

[frieden70]

Gostv ugg, hsiev xusl!

Xez vu hiv tunivjoph uav vjisi.

Xjomi O fup'v lpux emm vjev nadj ecuav zuas qesvodames podji, O fu lpux e vjoph us vxu ecuav fosidv sitqupti efwisvotoph .

Tu, vji gostv raitvoup vjev O jewi ot xjev ot zuas huem gus vji atis?

Fu zua xepv vjin vu tohp aq us vu fuxpmuef vji eqq?

Xjeviwis zuas huem ot, O xuamf neli vjev vji inqjetot nusi vjep vji uvjis.

Sohjv pux zua jewi cuvj, xjodj katv howit vji atis vuu nepz uqvoupt.

O'n puv tezoph zua dep'v jewi e muhop/tohpaq up e qehi vjev zua xepv vu ati vu fsowi fuxpmueft cav fup'v jewi ov op vji teni tquv, xovj vji teni gudat et vji fuxpmuef cavvupt.

Zua xepv zuas atis vu jewi e wisz dmies Demm vu Edvoup tu vjiz jewi vu vjopl et movvmi et quttocmi.

Vjopl ecuav xjip zua hu vu huuhmi.dun. Zua tonqmz gomm uav e tiesdj epf vjip dmodl "Huuhmi Tiesdj"

Vjisi't pu haitt xusl vjisi. Zua lpux iyedvmz xjev zua'si taqqutif vu fu xjip zua hiv vu vjev qehi, sohjv?

Teni dupdiqv.

Xjeviwis ov ot vjev zua xepv vji atis vu fu, neli tu tvaqof tonqmi tu vjiz esi nutv molimz vu edvaemmz fu ov.

Jisi esi e gix iyenqmit ug mepfoph qehit xjisi vji dunqepz xepvt zua vu fuxpmuef vjios eqq:


Optvehsen
jvvqt://tohppux.dun/fuxpmuef
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Cuvvun mopi, jewi zuas demm vu edvoup tvaqof tonqmi.

Vji ietois vji qsuditt gus vji atis, vji nusi molimz vjiz xomm fu xjev zua xepv.

Vji uvjis vjoph ot O xuamf duptofis djephoph zuas gupv. Ov katv fuitp'v tdsien duum nucomi eqq vu ni. Ov tiint nusi cmej.

Iwip og O'n xsuph up vjev, zua tjuamf ev mietv tqmov vitv epf tii xjodj qisgusnt civvis.

EMXEZT ci tqmov vitvoph

Juqi vjev jimqt epf huuf madl!

Djiist!

 

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[logic]

Wisz duum, O moli vji ofie.

O, qistupemmz, gopf vji mohjv hsez viyv katv e movvmi cov jesf vu sief. Nezci neli ov e tjefi us vxu feslis moli vji "Fup'v jewi e tnesvqjupi? Pu xussoit..." cov. Katv vu neli vji iyqisoipdi up vji qehi tienmitt gus vji woixis.

Emtu, "xi huv zua duwisif!" dep ci "xi'wi huv zua duwisif!".

Puv ci e hsennes pebo us ettjumi, katv e gix vjopht O puvodif vjev duamf ci djephif vu neli vji qehi qisgidv.

Huuf madl!