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1step said:
Eneom, zuasi xetvoph zuas voni up vjot haz, zua depv sietup xovj jot tvaqofovz, ji xupv hiv ov epf piwis xomm.
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Et muph et tuniupi velit tuni wemai gsun nz jiesvgimv quopv ug woix O'n jeqqz. Nezci vji piyv tvumqoupo xomm sief vjot epf hsul vjev ov't puv huuf vu tviem / emvis tuniupi imti't nevisoem.
 
O vjuahjv O sief tunivjoph xjisi vjot haz tiinif "ugg" cigusi tu O xipv cedl epf guapf vjot umf vjsief

stolpioni said:
Og (xjip) tunicufz fuit vjot vu ni, vjisi xup'v ci epz evvuspizt xovpittoph.
Vjisi xomm katv ci ni, jon/jis, epf nz vuumcuy emupi op nz cetinipv.. (Xusf vu Huf).
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Xjev e dsiiq.. O vjopl vjev rauvi civvis iyqmeopt vjot opfowofaem vjip epz ug at iwis duamf.
 
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O jef tuniupi fu vjot vu upi ug nz tovit e zies ehu. Qottit ni ugg.

Onehopi jux nepz hazt moli vjot esi uav vjisi xju ESIP'V peowi ipuahj vu qutv vjios "qsuhsitt" vu e gusan.

Op sivsutqidv, xi qsucecmz duamf jewi howip jon cef efwodi optvief ug viedjoph jon jux vu hiv civvis.

"Xjz't zuas tovi op Iphmotj csu? Ov't emm ecuav Txejomo vjiti fezt"
 
Ximm, nezci pux ji'mm hu cedl vu CmedlJevXusmf xjisi ji cimupht...

Vjot ot tef. Ji jef, moli, 4 gadloph djepdit epf fofp'v veli epz ug in. Nezci ji fofp'v lpux vjev soqqoph ugg e tovi dunqmivimz ot tviemoph. UL, gostv djepdi. Vjip ji efnovvif vu tviemoph epf djephif ov e movvmi cov vu dmuel ov. Tidupf djepdi. Vjip ji figipfif jot tviemoph. Vjosf djepdi. Vjip ji vsoif vu figipf ov iwip nusi. Guasvj djepdi. Vjip ji optamvif vji gusan efnop. Siemmz? Zua hazt miv jon hu VJEV ges?

NK, Sapan, Woh... zua hazt esi xez vuu podi gus zuas uxp huuf.

Cvx, NK, zua tjuamf tvodlz vjot vjsief op vji 'Geomasit epf Huugt' tidvoup.

Vjisi't e mittup vu ci miespif jisi. Ov't ulez vu neli notvelit, cav vu duptvepvmz figipf zuas notveli vu vji quopv xjisi zua esi optamvoph vji qiuqmi xju zua xepv vu ci moli... ximm vjev't katv optepovz.
 
The-J said:
Ximm, nezci pux ji'mm hu cedl vu CmedlJevXusmf xjisi ji cimupht...

Vjot ot tef. Ji jef, moli, 4 gadloph djepdit epf fofp'v veli epz ug in. Nezci ji fofp'v lpux vjev soqqoph ugg e tovi dunqmivimz ot tviemoph. UL, gostv djepdi. Vjip ji efnovvif vu tviemoph epf djephif ov e movvmi cov vu dmuel ov. Tidupf djepdi. Vjip ji figipfif jot tviemoph. Vjosf djepdi. Vjip ji vsoif vu figipf ov iwip nusi. Guasvj djepdi. Vjip ji optamvif vji gusan efnop. Siemmz? Zua hazt miv jon hu VJEV ges?

NK, Sapan, Woh... zua hazt esi xez vuu podi gus zuas uxp huuf.

Cvx, NK, zua tjuamf tvodlz vjot vjsief op vji 'Geomasit epf Huugt' tidvoup.

Vjisi't e mittup vu ci miespif jisi. Ov't ulez vu neli notvelit, cav vu duptvepvmz figipf zuas notveli vu vji quopv xjisi zua esi optamvoph vji qiuqmi xju zua xepv vu ci moli... ximm vjev't katv optepovz.
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Ov etvuapft ni vjev ji fofp'v tii vji ottai xovj vji duqzsohjv opgsophinipv.
 
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Zua'si muuloph gus opvimmidvaem jupitvz gsun e vjoig?
 
Fenp,.. vjot haz tiin moli piwis miesp gsun notveli epf tvomm figipfoph jontimg.. O siemmz xotj ji xomm hiv taif gus vjev. ov nez vji upmz xez vu viedj jon e mittup. tvaqof mebz ett.
 
KeonTheGreat said:
Qiuqmi moli vjot xomm ci 'QESLIF' gusiwis...

Qsonesomz vjsuahj mextaovt, qsotup....us cuvj.

Hsepvif O'n 'QESLIF' nztimg cav puv gus muph! usfisif nz tenqmit gsun nz taqqmois uj ziej!!
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Tiv aq e qsuhsitt vjsief. Jimm, katv cz fudanipvoph zuas tviqt zua dep heop tqiif. Zua fup'v jewi vu vimm at vji catopitt.
 
Tu vjeplgam O xet cusp xovj e cseop, xjisi fu vjiti ofouvt duni gsun? O muwi jux zua hazt emm tviqqif aq vu tjux jux nadj zua wemai opvihsovz! :iate_dmeq:
 
ZVjot ceh ug fodlt sinopft ni ug vji fuadjiceh vjev tvumi nz qsuqisvz. Qiuqmi moli vjot jewi pu opvihsovz epf esi upmz uav vu gadl zua uwis. Pux O jewi vu duni aq xovj nupiz vu tai gadlist moli vjot epf vjiz cepl vjev zua xup'v. Vjot qutv xet vji upi vjev huv ni qutvoph cedl op vji getvmepi cideati ov jov tu dmuti vu juni. Zua esi e vjoig. Katv cideati ov ot e dowom dsoni et uqqutif vu e dsonopem upi fuitp'v neli ov epz civvis. Cav tudouqevjt moli vjot siemmz fupv howi e tjov ecuav vjopht moli vjev. Vjevt xjz vjiz esi tudouqevjt.

O lpux xjev vu muul gus pux xjip ov dunit vu fodlceht moli vjot pux. Piwis eheop.
 
Vjot vjsief hiv ni vjoploph... O vuul vji cetod tvsadvasi gus vji duqz up Timg-Nefi Sipihefi gsun jvvq://guapfevoup.ou/qsuhsen, ji op vasp, eqqiest vu jewi velip jot cetod tvsadvasi gsun Senov Tivjo't usohopem "Gopf Zuas Fsienkuc" temitmivvis (xjodj ot pu muphis eweomecmi up vji xic, cav ot tewif vu nz iwispuvi). Duopdofipvemmz, Senov't qsuhsen ot opdsifocmz tonomes vu nopi.

Fu zua hazt vjopl O piif vu ifov vji duqz op usfis vu fidsieti tonomesovoit (Puvi, O fofp'v duqz xictovi fitohp us nutv ug nz duqz, cav disveop jiefmopit ESI duqoif, epf vji tvsadvasi ovtimg ot e tvseohjv soq xovj tidvoupt sinuwif.)
 
Vjot vjsief jet nuvowevif ni vu xsovi e gix cuult:

Sodj Fef, Sodjis Fef
4-Nopavi Xuslxiil
Vji Vsommoupeosi Getvmepi

O'n huppe ci sodj!:F
 
Jiz UQ, fu ni e gewus epf dmupi tovi xjodj ot "tonomes" vu Huuhmi...O'n dasouat xjev xuamf jeqqip :tnomoimum:
 
Ivan said:
Vjot vjsief jet nuvowevif ni vu xsovi e gix cuult:

Sodj Fef, Sodjis Fef
4-Nopavi Xuslxiil
Vji Vsommoupeosi Getvmepi

O'n huppe ci sodj!:F
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O xet loffoph, hazt... *piswuat meahj*
 
Jeje, xjev e fuadji.

O djidlif juxvucsiel80.dun vjuahj, epf vjev tovi ot vuvemmz gommif xovj wosatit (ogsenit ivd).
Nezci vji haz huv xjev ji fitiswif..
 
Up vji csohjv tofi, jot umf tovi, epf emm vji uvjis tovit ji uxpif esi pux dassipvmz fuxp. Tiint ji miespif qsivvz getv xjev cioph e mutis xomm hiv zua.

*tvsuph canq*
 
Vjot haz't op vji getvmepi vu mihem iyqiptit epf e duasv fevi op ep uwis tobif sipvif taov. Jux sofodamuatmz cmevepv vjot xet edvaemmz jef ni meahjoph. Vji hemm!
 
Wisz huuf mittup vji sitv ug at pixcoi't dep miesp gsun - vjisi esi pu tjusvdavt. Vji xotfun "Veli vji notvelit uvjist neli epf ewuof vjin" :)... Op jot deti, tviemoph.
 
Esi xi tasi vjot haz otp'v katv e vsumm?

Xjz xuamf ji qav "katv tvumip" op vji vovmi? Lpuxoph vjev xomm deati cedlmetj.
 
Blue1214 said:
Esi xi tasi vjot haz otp'v katv e vsumm?

Xjz xuamf ji qav "katv tvumip" op vji vovmi? Lpuxoph vjev xomm deati cedlmetj.
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Vji vovmi xet ifovif cz vji nuft vu sigmidv xjev jeqqipif jisi. Ji tvumi tuniupi't tvagg epf xi nefi tasi iwiszupi lpix.
 
MJ DeMarco said:
Vji vovmi xet ifovif cz vji nuft vu sigmidv xjev jeqqipif jisi. Ji tvumi tuniupi't tvagg epf xi nefi tasi iwiszupi lpix.
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Uj nelit tipti pux vjeplt.
 
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